Approaching Storms
a Kyrielle poetic form46 total reviews
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice, Melissa. I've never tried a Kyrielle. Yours is very well done. The flow is smooth, the rhyme is excellent, and a pleasure to read. I am going to become a fan.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Very nice, Melissa. I've never tried a Kyrielle. Yours is very well done. The flow is smooth, the rhyme is excellent, and a pleasure to read. I am going to become a fan.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you Paul for your wonderful review. I am glad you liked this Kyrielle. I thought I would take this style out and dust it off. :)
Melissa
Comment from Whitewave
Sugarray77,
This is a clever example of the Kyrielle poetic form and an amazing picture to complement your words - 'The boiling clouds can't hold the strain...'
Lightning explosions and growling thunder, that announce an imminent storm, are some of the most fascinating signs and sounds of nature. You have described it all.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Sugarray77,
This is a clever example of the Kyrielle poetic form and an amazing picture to complement your words - 'The boiling clouds can't hold the strain...'
Lightning explosions and growling thunder, that announce an imminent storm, are some of the most fascinating signs and sounds of nature. You have described it all.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the wonderful review!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray!
I love stormy weather so the artwork I found alluring.
You describe well step by step the effects of an in coming storm matching strong descriptive words
My favourite verse is the last one.. thunder snd lighting are common themes and you did a great job describing them but I love the detail about the rain and how :
Loud thuds of droplets hit the dust;
flung out before a windy gust.
And then
Sporadic spatters strike my pane...
approaching sounds of coming rain.
Great detail
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Ciao Sugarray!
I love stormy weather so the artwork I found alluring.
You describe well step by step the effects of an in coming storm matching strong descriptive words
My favourite verse is the last one.. thunder snd lighting are common themes and you did a great job describing them but I love the detail about the rain and how :
Loud thuds of droplets hit the dust;
flung out before a windy gust.
And then
Sporadic spatters strike my pane...
approaching sounds of coming rain.
Great detail
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Hello dear Franca. Thanks so much for your wonderful review. I hoped to share the tension of an approaching storm. I also love stormy days and listen to each sound it makes. :). Thanks again.
Melissa
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Ciao!
Your morning glory has two votes now! ( smile)
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You are adorable, Franca. Hugs!
Comment from Heather Knight
I love the image you paint here. Besides I admire your ability to rhyme. You say in your profile you've learned to write like this in just four years!
The word meter is a mystery to me. So are rhyme and rhythm.
I tried to rhyme in the past, but I've given up. I'd compare my few tries to an elephant playing violin.
Congrats!
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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I love the image you paint here. Besides I admire your ability to rhyme. You say in your profile you've learned to write like this in just four years!
The word meter is a mystery to me. So are rhyme and rhythm.
I tried to rhyme in the past, but I've given up. I'd compare my few tries to an elephant playing violin.
Congrats!
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hello Heather... I am grinning as I write this because of your comparison to an elephant. So funny. I had no clue about meter, rhythm, etc. til I came to FS. My son gifted me a 3 month subscription and I was hooked. I have taken the poetry classes offered here and they have helped immensely. Don't give up on meter... it is a pattern. Iambic is in a unstressed / stressed pattern. Just listen for the more pronounced... stressed ... syllables. Thanks so much!
Melissa
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Hi again Melissa,
It's not exactly that I've given up, but I have kind of found my niche: short stories and free verse (the second one not very good).
It could be because I'm impatient and I hate rules, who knows. I also love flash fiction. Does that mean I'm lazy? :)
Hugs
Comment from Anne Johnston
Good rhyming, and easy to read. Well done on this poem. Your well-chosen words built up to the climax of the storm as it approaches. Great picture you have chosen to illustrate.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Good rhyming, and easy to read. Well done on this poem. Your well-chosen words built up to the climax of the storm as it approaches. Great picture you have chosen to illustrate.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much Anne. I appreciate your lovely comments.
Melissa
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You are welcome
Comment from rspoet
Hello Melissa,
You've written a marvelous Kyrielle with wonderful description
of the gusts and rain of the storm.
Excellent rhymes and very good meter.
The repeat line blends nicely.
I might have used "roiling" rather than "boiling," but both work well.
Perfect picture too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hello Melissa,
You've written a marvelous Kyrielle with wonderful description
of the gusts and rain of the storm.
Excellent rhymes and very good meter.
The repeat line blends nicely.
I might have used "roiling" rather than "boiling," but both work well.
Perfect picture too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi Robert. I am grinning as I read... I'm so glad you liked it. I always value your take on my writing. I chose boiling because the last time I wrote a storm poem I used roiling, so thought I would change up a bit. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are alarming, descriptive, clear and creative. I pondered on the words of this poem, as today, we are expecting a storm here in Florida! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is
awesome and compliments both the theme and words of this poem.
Hi Melissa, I hope you are doing well - have a great weekend!...Maria
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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The author's words are alarming, descriptive, clear and creative. I pondered on the words of this poem, as today, we are expecting a storm here in Florida! The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is
awesome and compliments both the theme and words of this poem.
Hi Melissa, I hope you are doing well - have a great weekend!...Maria
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hello Maria. Thanks so much for the lovely review. Hope your storm in Florida is milder than the one I wrote about here. Stay safe.
Melissa
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
What a well crafted poem. It must have been quite a challenge. I love the illustration and the word images that capture a coming storm with such clarity and feeling.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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What a well crafted poem. It must have been quite a challenge. I love the illustration and the word images that capture a coming storm with such clarity and feeling.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi Nancy. Thanks so very much for the lovely review. I am delighted that you liked it :)
Melissa
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Comment from Mark D. R.
OK Melissa, I rarely review long verses, but with my poem buddies I often read the same.
This is truly exquisite writing and only corroborates that my own writing is not classical poetry and that in this lifetime I will not attempt the same LOL
Just maybe I could try one four-line stanza in the Kyrielle style, but I doubt it. I will leave it to you to continue to impress me with your poetry!
Mark
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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OK Melissa, I rarely review long verses, but with my poem buddies I often read the same.
This is truly exquisite writing and only corroborates that my own writing is not classical poetry and that in this lifetime I will not attempt the same LOL
Just maybe I could try one four-line stanza in the Kyrielle style, but I doubt it. I will leave it to you to continue to impress me with your poetry!
Mark
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Hi there Mark. Thanks so very much. I am tickled that you liked my writing and this kyrielle form. I KNOW you could write a lovely one if you tried. Thanks again, my friend.
Melissa
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M,
I am not trying. I will leave it to you!
M
Comment from leather
Unlike some people, I generally like to watch storms--not the hurricane type, just normal ones. There is just something awesome about the sounds and sights. They usually prompt me to check my battery supply. I loved your poem too.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Unlike some people, I generally like to watch storms--not the hurricane type, just normal ones. There is just something awesome about the sounds and sights. They usually prompt me to check my battery supply. I loved your poem too.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much for the review!!!
Melissa