The Challenge
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "The Challenge, Act I, Scene 1"Young Man Has Doubts About Becoming a Priest
39 total reviews
Comment from chatterbox1
An interesting look into the sacrifices families make to secure their futures. Investing in one child at the expense of the others is bound to keep the chosen one in line.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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An interesting look into the sacrifices families make to secure their futures. Investing in one child at the expense of the others is bound to keep the chosen one in line.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Chatterbox. I hope in the succeeding scenes it will grow beyond the power structure of the family. I hope you will be around to read it.
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Okay
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I wonder why you choose to set your two successive plays in the nineteen fifties, and what sort of research it demands to prepare for such retrospection. I find it hard to identify with this time-frame, and my perception of events in the play is probably faulty, at least for the moment.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I wonder why you choose to set your two successive plays in the nineteen fifties, and what sort of research it demands to prepare for such retrospection. I find it hard to identify with this time-frame, and my perception of events in the play is probably faulty, at least for the moment.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Katherine, for reading and for your candid response. I chose the 50s both for Genius in Love and The Challenge because the 50s were a time of relative social stability. Not all good. Church doctrine was fixed. Women's rights were negligible. There was no internet. The world was smaller. I lived in those times and I'm trying to shine a light on the stability and the abuses that brings on.
Please give the play another look as it evolves through the characters.
Comment from 1Dreamer
You have piqued my curiosity. I would like to read more of this script. You've given depth to the characters and their interaction and what you have so far is interesting! Curious as to where it will go.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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You have piqued my curiosity. I would like to read more of this script. You've given depth to the characters and their interaction and what you have so far is interesting! Curious as to where it will go.
Comment Written 03-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you, 1Dreamer, for taking a chance with it. I'm glad to have you aboard for the long haul. I don't think you'll be disappointed.
Comment from Soledadpaz
I sense a trainload of conflict coming down the pike. That mom sure has her hands full with her three children, because even if they're grown, they never stop being children to you.
Can't help but wonder what has Phillip so down. Is it Arthur? Guess I'll have to wait to find out!
Sol
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I sense a trainload of conflict coming down the pike. That mom sure has her hands full with her three children, because even if they're grown, they never stop being children to you.
Can't help but wonder what has Phillip so down. Is it Arthur? Guess I'll have to wait to find out!
Sol
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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You'll find out soon, after the guests arrive. Thank you for reading and for your kind analysis, Sol.
Comment from Alaskastory
"The Challenge, Act I, Scene 1" is so well laid out that I grasp the scene changes so quickly. Dark print in the dialogue is so helpful. The story moves along leaving all sorts of questions needing answer about Phillip's attitude and who Susan must be. I look forward to the next scene.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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"The Challenge, Act I, Scene 1" is so well laid out that I grasp the scene changes so quickly. Dark print in the dialogue is so helpful. The story moves along leaving all sorts of questions needing answer about Phillip's attitude and who Susan must be. I look forward to the next scene.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thank you, AlaskaStory. I was thinking of you and me when I increased the font size and "Bolded" the dialogue. We seniors hafta stick together.
Comment from Terry Broxson
This is an extremely well written first act. I am giving it five stars because I like the set up of some potential conflict that will have to be resolved. I am not sure what the conflicts will be or how they will be handled. So, at this point I am holding you to a high standard. Good Start.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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This is an extremely well written first act. I am giving it five stars because I like the set up of some potential conflict that will have to be resolved. I am not sure what the conflicts will be or how they will be handled. So, at this point I am holding you to a high standard. Good Start.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Terry, for holding me to that high standard. I hope in future scenes, I will rise above it or crawl under it, whichever the case may be. I hope you'll be there to keep me honest.
Comment from Sherry Asbury
I'm hooked, but good. All of this seems so outre and on the edge of Hitchcock. I read the first part about the crucified "Jesus" - thinking it was his brother - then thinking it was a statue - holy cow, to coin a phrase. You have a natural bent for this type of story and I will follow it closely. Excellent work!!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I'm hooked, but good. All of this seems so outre and on the edge of Hitchcock. I read the first part about the crucified "Jesus" - thinking it was his brother - then thinking it was a statue - holy cow, to coin a phrase. You have a natural bent for this type of story and I will follow it closely. Excellent work!!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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I'm not sure it will be precisely what you are looking for, with hints of the occult and supernatural.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Hi Jay,
I love your new play, and am glad to get in on the beginning. I love your detailed descriptions. You quite stand out as a script writer.
I've been out of pocket for awhile and need to go back and finish Genius in Love.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Hi Jay,
I love your new play, and am glad to get in on the beginning. I love your detailed descriptions. You quite stand out as a script writer.
I've been out of pocket for awhile and need to go back and finish Genius in Love.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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It's so good to have you reading this play, Rhonda. I'm delighted, of course, for the six stars, but just to hear your kind words and encouragement, gives me the momentum to go on. I was fortunate that Genius in Love resonated with so many people. I hope The Challenge does as well.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Virtual 6!!! This is an amazing start to your new script, Jay, and written in a way that is so easy to see and follow. It seems that Phillip isn't quite ready to become a priest, and is questioning his faith. Sometimes it happens, and that person finds himself going in a different direction but still working for God. Not everyone saint was a priest, or a monk. I loved how his mother was gently trying to keep him on the path she and his father had hoped for him. Then she adds that his brother James is drinking again. We have a good insight to this family and the problems life has given them to get Phillip into the church. (I think it might have something to do with James's drinking.) Well done, my friend, I will be watching for the next part. I go on holiday on the 23rd of this month until the 5th of December, but I'll catch up when I get home. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Virtual 6!!! This is an amazing start to your new script, Jay, and written in a way that is so easy to see and follow. It seems that Phillip isn't quite ready to become a priest, and is questioning his faith. Sometimes it happens, and that person finds himself going in a different direction but still working for God. Not everyone saint was a priest, or a monk. I loved how his mother was gently trying to keep him on the path she and his father had hoped for him. Then she adds that his brother James is drinking again. We have a good insight to this family and the problems life has given them to get Phillip into the church. (I think it might have something to do with James's drinking.) Well done, my friend, I will be watching for the next part. I go on holiday on the 23rd of this month until the 5th of December, but I'll catch up when I get home. Love and hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 02-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2021
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Sandra your virtual sixes are sevens in my book any day. I'm just giddy that you're on board for this new adventure. I will be different, but I hope the characters will fill a need in the readers' hearts. Bless you, Sandra!
Comment from amahra
A story about people of faith--how delightful, Jay. I'm going t enjoy following this. "Three sheets to the wind" Never heard this one. Funny. I love the artwork you chose: A cross and a meat cleaver. Hmm... I gotta stay tuned for this one.
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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A story about people of faith--how delightful, Jay. I'm going t enjoy following this. "Three sheets to the wind" Never heard this one. Funny. I love the artwork you chose: A cross and a meat cleaver. Hmm... I gotta stay tuned for this one.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thank you, Amahra. I changed the image, though I may go back to it for other scenes. I'll look forward to having you aboard for this play. I appreciate you more than you know!