Free Verse Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Going Home"A collection of free verse poems
48 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, I have seen the rose rimmed eyes when I was a work years ago, a person teared up. Sometime people can get so overwhelmed that they get teared up.
This is good about bringing things to memory. Moments are precious and you can record them and use them for your writing.
It nice when we see the beauty of God and be thankful.
Congratulations on all of your wins and I know people who are at peace with themselves enjoy your works.
Good luck with this book.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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Yes, I have seen the rose rimmed eyes when I was a work years ago, a person teared up. Sometime people can get so overwhelmed that they get teared up.
This is good about bringing things to memory. Moments are precious and you can record them and use them for your writing.
It nice when we see the beauty of God and be thankful.
Congratulations on all of your wins and I know people who are at peace with themselves enjoy your works.
Good luck with this book.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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How kind of you to take the time to review my poem. I appreciate your kind words and the sixth star. Thank you very much. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Melissa Russell Deur
What spectacular imagery! You deserve First Place in the free-verse contest. I love your first stanza. Also the "lithesome hips of rose" and "the steeple of my hands" and "rose-rimmed eye that blinks and forces out a waxen tear."
I appreciate your author's note about "Rose Sunday." It helped me to see how you layered the word "rose" in your poem. Lovely!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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What spectacular imagery! You deserve First Place in the free-verse contest. I love your first stanza. Also the "lithesome hips of rose" and "the steeple of my hands" and "rose-rimmed eye that blinks and forces out a waxen tear."
I appreciate your author's note about "Rose Sunday." It helped me to see how you layered the word "rose" in your poem. Lovely!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2020
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How kind of you to take the time to review my poem, Melissa. It's always interesting to hear which particular images strike a reader. I very much appreciate your congratulations, kind words, and the sixth star. Thank you very much. Best wishes, Tony
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You are welcome!
Comment from dragonpoet
Tony,
This poem makes you think of childhood memories in general and Christmas memories in particular with the mention of Advent candle and mention of Saints and sandstone of church building. It reminds of the anticipation of Christmas.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Tony,
This poem makes you think of childhood memories in general and Christmas memories in particular with the mention of Advent candle and mention of Saints and sandstone of church building. It reminds of the anticipation of Christmas.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Very many thanks for dropping by to review this one, Joan, and for your congratulations. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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You are most kindly welcome, Tony.
Joan
Comment from BethShelby
Congratulation on winning the Free Verse Poetry contest with this lovely and moving poem. This is a journey in your mind back to the church yard where your grandfather lies and your words take the reader with you as your go.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Congratulation on winning the Free Verse Poetry contest with this lovely and moving poem. This is a journey in your mind back to the church yard where your grandfather lies and your words take the reader with you as your go.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Many thanks for your kind words, Beth, and your congratulations. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 09-Jul-2020
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2020
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Joan E.
Congratulations on having your free verse so highly recognized by FanStory. The announcement gave me the opportunity to admire the poem I had missed. I appreciated your appeal to our senses of sound and sight with your vivid use of imagery as you shared your reminiscences. Well done-
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Congratulations on having your free verse so highly recognized by FanStory. The announcement gave me the opportunity to admire the poem I had missed. I appreciated your appeal to our senses of sound and sight with your vivid use of imagery as you shared your reminiscences. Well done-
Comment Written 29-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Joan, both for your congratulations and for your complimentary review. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Tootsie
This is a very moving poem, I usually don't try to review these free-verse poems but this one was very enjoyable
Also congrats on your award I am truly happy for you it must be
a thrill. God Bless
Tootsie
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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This is a very moving poem, I usually don't try to review these free-verse poems but this one was very enjoyable
Also congrats on your award I am truly happy for you it must be
a thrill. God Bless
Tootsie
Comment Written 28-Jun-2020
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2020
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Thank you, Tootsie, both for your congratulations and for your complimentary review. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from estory
I thought this was great. It reminded me of Dylan Thomas with those jumbled up images capturing the mysteries of the world around you and mixing it all up with the roiling emotions inside of you. We see in the landscape these intertwined memories of faith, love, hope, and death. I loved that faint light glittering on the leaves like memories, the ephemeral sandstone arches in the steeple of your hands, the flickering advent candles. It is all very fragile, and yet substantive, the real meaning of life beneath the shimmering physical. estory
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I thought this was great. It reminded me of Dylan Thomas with those jumbled up images capturing the mysteries of the world around you and mixing it all up with the roiling emotions inside of you. We see in the landscape these intertwined memories of faith, love, hope, and death. I loved that faint light glittering on the leaves like memories, the ephemeral sandstone arches in the steeple of your hands, the flickering advent candles. It is all very fragile, and yet substantive, the real meaning of life beneath the shimmering physical. estory
Comment Written 12-May-2020
reply by the author on 14-May-2020
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I'm most appreciative of your thoughts about this poem, estory. Delighted that the emotional content came through so well. Thanks very much for the sixth star. All the best, Tony
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like this stanza :"that glistens on the turning leaves
of childhood memory
where lone I walk through time" it reverberates with my own memories of my own childhood. Sometimes we need a trip down the memory lane to understand our life better.
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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I like this stanza :"that glistens on the turning leaves
of childhood memory
where lone I walk through time" it reverberates with my own memories of my own childhood. Sometimes we need a trip down the memory lane to understand our life better.
Comment Written 10-May-2020
reply by the author on 10-May-2020
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You're right. The odd glance backward is good for the soul. It lends perspective and depth.
Comment from JudyE
You've painted a true 'picture in words' here. It's very evocative and scans very nicely. I don't always enjoy free verse but I read this through several times, trying to absorb all the images you created.
Cheers
Judy
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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You've painted a true 'picture in words' here. It's very evocative and scans very nicely. I don't always enjoy free verse but I read this through several times, trying to absorb all the images you created.
Cheers
Judy
Comment Written 09-May-2020
reply by the author on 09-May-2020
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Thanks, Judy. I rather agree with you about free verse, unless it makes good use of poetic devices such as alliteration, internal rhyme and assonance. So much of it seems to me to be prose chopped rather arbitrarily into lines.
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That's mostly my argument too - that too often it's really prose arranged to look like poetry.