Gaudeamus Igitur
Rondeau Redouble22 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Congrats on the win with this one Steve, a great read, and, of course, well rhymed. Unfortunately I could see myself in a lot of these humourous verses. Your repeated lines all worked well, great write.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Congrats on the win with this one Steve, a great read, and, of course, well rhymed. Unfortunately I could see myself in a lot of these humourous verses. Your repeated lines all worked well, great write.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 28-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Valda. Many reviewers have expressed a similar sentiment, so we are not alone, if that's any consolation!
Steve
Comment from livelylinda
kiwisteveh: Congratulations on your contest win! Being on the way to 71 this year, I understand and agree with you totally. I've had to stop driving, etc., etc. You solidly beat me in this contest. Mine was rhyming, had alliteration, bla, bla, bla, but yours was so much more complex. Also, congratulations on your first book . . .rather like having a baby isn't it?? Linda
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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kiwisteveh: Congratulations on your contest win! Being on the way to 71 this year, I understand and agree with you totally. I've had to stop driving, etc., etc. You solidly beat me in this contest. Mine was rhyming, had alliteration, bla, bla, bla, but yours was so much more complex. Also, congratulations on your first book . . .rather like having a baby isn't it?? Linda
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Linda. You have a few years on me, so I hope the 'lively' still applies. I am starting to feel my age, though still working part-time. The poem was partly inspired by the girl at the checkout of the hardware store volunteering to carry my goods to the car for me. Yikes! I must look old and feeble.
Steve
Comment from Stephanie Launiu
Bravo. You certainly deserved winning the Rhyming Contest with your Rondeau Redouble. Your rhyming and meter were flawless. And the subject matter and wry humor are hitting closer to home each day for me. Congratulations on a well-written piece.
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Bravo. You certainly deserved winning the Rhyming Contest with your Rondeau Redouble. Your rhyming and meter were flawless. And the subject matter and wry humor are hitting closer to home each day for me. Congratulations on a well-written piece.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Steph.
The poem was partly inspired by the girl at the checkout of the hardware store volunteering to carry my goods to the car for me.
Steve
Comment from mrsmajor
Steve,
You're not going to believe this, but I have been working on a poem using the same form and about the pleasure of aging...it takes a lot of thought, and work to complete one of these poems, I've done it before, and this one is so well written...Rhyming not at all forced, and the essence of the piece is just about life, something we all can identify with.
I enjoyed this 6 star poem very much, thanks for sharing this with us...You did a heck of a job...
Warmly,
Victoria
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Steve,
You're not going to believe this, but I have been working on a poem using the same form and about the pleasure of aging...it takes a lot of thought, and work to complete one of these poems, I've done it before, and this one is so well written...Rhyming not at all forced, and the essence of the piece is just about life, something we all can identify with.
I enjoyed this 6 star poem very much, thanks for sharing this with us...You did a heck of a job...
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Victoria, and good luck with your poem. I have always found the trick with these is to choose the rhymes wisely. I actually struggled with this one and nearly gave up because there aren't that many rhymes for 'steeper'.
And yes, guess what, nearly everyone who has reviewed this can relate to the idea of ageing.
Steve
You're quite welcome, Steve, It was a pleasure...I'm still working on my poem, and the choice of rhyming words is most important...its been the cause of my changing and starting anew...But when you get it right you're on the road to completion,
Yep old age, has hit many of us...and eventually all of us have to meet up with that idea...me, it seems I've been old forever...lol
Warmly,
Victoria
Comment from Joy Graham
Hi Steve,
This rondeau redouble is pure delight :) I love your theme, and can feel my own grumpiness about growing old. Dirty old man scared away the helpful lassie by wanting to, "keep her". Your rhymes are terrific and add to the fun of the piece.
I haven't tried a rondeau redouble in a while, but yours makes me think I should try it again. You show how a skilled poet can make this poetry form look easy and appealing. With a fine example as this one, how could I go wrong? Oh, "I go wrong" seems to be the song of my people these days. Ugh.
Congratulations on winning this contest. You appear to have grabbed that first place ribbon with no resistance. Thise Borg people say, "resistance is futile". You have proven that here. Excellent poem.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Hi Steve,
This rondeau redouble is pure delight :) I love your theme, and can feel my own grumpiness about growing old. Dirty old man scared away the helpful lassie by wanting to, "keep her". Your rhymes are terrific and add to the fun of the piece.
I haven't tried a rondeau redouble in a while, but yours makes me think I should try it again. You show how a skilled poet can make this poetry form look easy and appealing. With a fine example as this one, how could I go wrong? Oh, "I go wrong" seems to be the song of my people these days. Ugh.
Congratulations on winning this contest. You appear to have grabbed that first place ribbon with no resistance. Thise Borg people say, "resistance is futile". You have proven that here. Excellent poem.
Joy xx
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Joy. The rhymes are both the blessing and the curse for this form. The night before the deadline I was ready to throw this away because I just could not see how to sensibly fit in the very few words that rhyme with 'steeper'. Now I'm glad I perevered!
An yes, choosing a theme that nearly everyone can relate to is always a good idea.
Steve
Comment from geetha silvaratnam
Wow, this really rhymes so well and it has a very good flow too. I really enjoyed reading your poem, Steve. The artwork used is just so perfect for this. Congratulations on winning 1st prize....
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Wow, this really rhymes so well and it has a very good flow too. I really enjoyed reading your poem, Steve. The artwork used is just so perfect for this. Congratulations on winning 1st prize....
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Geetha.
When I first started on FanStory I was too scared to even enter these site contests, but I've won a few now, which says something for the improvement in my writing...
Steve
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Wow this is truly inspiring, Steve! You've come a long way indeed. You must have put in a lot of effort, so well deserved !
Cheers,
Geetha
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 26-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 26-Feb-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can understand this poem. I turned 65 last month. Not a good thing, LOL We all grow older. Your contest entry rhymed well and the rhythm flowed smoothly. This is a good write. Good luck.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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I can understand this poem. I turned 65 last month. Not a good thing, LOL We all grow older. Your contest entry rhymed well and the rhythm flowed smoothly. This is a good write. Good luck.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Barbara. I have a couple of years on you! On the wrong side of you, I mean!
Steve
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is an excellent, skillfully-written poem! I can relate to its message. Stairs
I used to run up and down just a year ago, I now take slowly. Good blend of
literal and figurative language
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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This is an excellent, skillfully-written poem! I can relate to its message. Stairs
I used to run up and down just a year ago, I now take slowly. Good blend of
literal and figurative language
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Janice. Most of my reviews seem to be coming from old folks! I guess most of us can relate.
Steve
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well done poem in its form. It is witty and a true image of growing older and how it makes you remember all the things you used to do and now can't or won't. I like the use of 'fifty shades of grey' to allude to the fact that the speaker may be a dirty old man.
Good luck and keep writing.
Joan
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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This is a well done poem in its form. It is witty and a true image of growing older and how it makes you remember all the things you used to do and now can't or won't. I like the use of 'fifty shades of grey' to allude to the fact that the speaker may be a dirty old man.
Good luck and keep writing.
Joan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2019
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2019
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Thanks, Joan. This actually sprang from an incident this week where the checkout girl at the hardware store carried my goods out to the car for me. One of those 'uh-oh, I'm getting old' moments.
Steve
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You're most kindly welcome. You mean she doesn't do it for all her handsome male customers.
Joan
