Luncheon of the Boating Party
50 word story based on RenoIr painting9 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
This is wonderful. Really liked how you used Renoir's charming painting as the jump-off point for your dribble. The atmosphere of this painting does lend itself nicely to your theme. Good Luck in the prompt contest if it isn't over. Marilyn
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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This is wonderful. Really liked how you used Renoir's charming painting as the jump-off point for your dribble. The atmosphere of this painting does lend itself nicely to your theme. Good Luck in the prompt contest if it isn't over. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for sharing my emphatic, Marilyn, and your kind praise. I only wish this prompt had allowed me to use more words. I think the contest voters wanted more, too. Rod
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Sometimes I don't check to see who won. How did you make out with this nice piece?
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This one earned no ribbons but received some nice reviews.
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Good for you.
Comment from Sugarray77
This is an excellent verse for the 50 Word Flash prompt. I love Renoir and think you did a superb job of captivating this painting in your poem. All the best,
Melissa
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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This is an excellent verse for the 50 Word Flash prompt. I love Renoir and think you did a superb job of captivating this painting in your poem. All the best,
Melissa
Comment Written 09-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, Melissa, for your kind praise of "Luncheon." It was fun trying to tell a 50-word story of an event that happened more than a hundred years ago.
Comment from WryWriter
Hmm, and which couples went home with different partners? LOL! Great use of descriptive words. The mood was enticing. I counted fifty words as according to contest rules. Great job! Enjoyed this read.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2018
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Hmm, and which couples went home with different partners? LOL! Great use of descriptive words. The mood was enticing. I counted fifty words as according to contest rules. Great job! Enjoyed this read.
Comment Written 08-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2018
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I am delighted you enjoyed ?Luncheon, ? WryWriiter, and truly appreciate your kind praise. I hadn?t considered your question until you asked it. Now I can?t stop wondering.
Comment from judiverse
A great work of art you based your flash fiction on. Partying seems to be going on all right, both in the artwork and your write. Such is the way of youth. They are thinking only of pleasure at the moment. That captures the young people's style, even today. Some things never change. Glad you brought this work of art to our attention, and you showed how timeless it is with your story. judi
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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A great work of art you based your flash fiction on. Partying seems to be going on all right, both in the artwork and your write. Such is the way of youth. They are thinking only of pleasure at the moment. That captures the young people's style, even today. Some things never change. Glad you brought this work of art to our attention, and you showed how timeless it is with your story. judi
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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You hit the nail on the head when you said ?Some things never change?--especially regarding young people. Thank you, judi, for sharing ?Luncheo.?
Comment from jpday
Great effort! I like the use of the painting as inspiration for the 'dribble' story. I feel like "It was sultry and no breeze swept through" was the best sentence for me and really captured the frozen moment of the painting. Good job!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Great effort! I like the use of the painting as inspiration for the 'dribble' story. I feel like "It was sultry and no breeze swept through" was the best sentence for me and really captured the frozen moment of the painting. Good job!
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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I am so pleased you felt I ?captured the frozen moment? of Renour?s painting. Many thanks for your kind praise.
Comment from Lady Jane
That's all we did (that) afternoon. - to eliminate the second 'all' - for smoother reading
It was sultry(,) and no breeze swept through.
Interesting concept for a dribble short, mystery author. But, it's a sinfully relatable and intriguing write :) It definitely shows your crafting skills. The image was great, the presentation, amazing, and the content...well, we've already discussed that. Just a couple of edit suggestions above and you'll have a strong contender. Best of luck, dear.
janelle
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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That's all we did (that) afternoon. - to eliminate the second 'all' - for smoother reading
It was sultry(,) and no breeze swept through.
Interesting concept for a dribble short, mystery author. But, it's a sinfully relatable and intriguing write :) It definitely shows your crafting skills. The image was great, the presentation, amazing, and the content...well, we've already discussed that. Just a couple of edit suggestions above and you'll have a strong contender. Best of luck, dear.
janelle
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much, Janelle, for your high praise of ?Luncheon? and your suggestions.
Comment from kahpot
Excellent, this is a wonderful take on this great artwork, one can imagine the flirting that may have gone on, very well done and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Excellent, this is a wonderful take on this great artwork, one can imagine the flirting that may have gone on, very well done and best wishes for your competition****kahpot
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you so much for sharing ?Luncheon? and your very kind praise, kahpot.
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, what a lovely winsome poem from the painting. Very pretty, summery and youthful, I enjoyed it and saw no errors. I have no suggestions for improvement and found this a delightful work to read and review, cheers, Anastasia Vasa.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Hello, what a lovely winsome poem from the painting. Very pretty, summery and youthful, I enjoyed it and saw no errors. I have no suggestions for improvement and found this a delightful work to read and review, cheers, Anastasia Vasa.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Many thanks for sharing ?Luncheon, ? Anastasia. I am delighted you enjoyed it.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
How wonderful ... putting actions/thoughts to one of the masters' scenes!! :) ;) Be sure to pop back in there and edit your tag line to be "Renoir"... :) :) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) ;)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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How wonderful ... putting actions/thoughts to one of the masters' scenes!! :) ;) Be sure to pop back in there and edit your tag line to be "Renoir"... :) :) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) ;)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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Thank you for sharing ?Luncheon? and your kind praise. it was fun to bring this scene to life. Fan Story makes it impossible to use quotation marks in my descriptive line or author?s notes.
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Not impossible...you just have to type them in yourself...no cut paste. Quotation marks in author notes, title, and tag line have to be manual entries. :) ;)
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I did that and it doesn?t work for me. I have no problems with anything I type inside the story box.