Dognapping to Catfishing-FINAL
A catfish story that spanned continents19 total reviews
Comment from Spitfire
Sorry to be so late in getting to this. So glad Charlotte turned out to be the good guy-er-girl. Bruni adds a hilarious dimension to this well-written chapter.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
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Sorry to be so late in getting to this. So glad Charlotte turned out to be the good guy-er-girl. Bruni adds a hilarious dimension to this well-written chapter.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Shari, I'm just sorry you only got paid two cents to review :/ i enjoyed your comments and i thank you for sticking with it 😄
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A touch of "Hawaii Five-0" written into this story for good measure.
Tightly written with good characterizations used throughout the telling of the story.
Your "F-bomb" is certainly different than most others are.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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A touch of "Hawaii Five-0" written into this story for good measure.
Tightly written with good characterizations used throughout the telling of the story.
Your "F-bomb" is certainly different than most others are.
Comment Written 28-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Hi Brett, thank you for your RR&R and continued interest in the story. I was kind of sad to end it :) I wasn't sure how many would get the Hawaii Five-O reference so added the video. Thank you so much for your kind assessment. Have a great Wednesday!
Comment from DonandVicki
I will most definitely have to go back and read your other chapters as this last one has captured my attention. A very well written and imaginative story.
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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I will most definitely have to go back and read your other chapters as this last one has captured my attention. A very well written and imaginative story.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2016
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Thank you so much, DonandVicki, For your RR&R. I look forward to hearing what you think of the earlier preceding chapters 😁 if I could understand the directions to link them, I would have, but it's like reading Greek to me ;/
Comment from Heidi M
What a ride you and Bruni took us on! Your writer's voice came through loud and clear (as did Brunhilda's) in this story. This was the right length for the tale you told; not too short, not too long.
I love your humor throughout the entire piece. One example: 'airport's "Stop, drop & roll in ten seconds or die"' lane; ain't that the truth?
hysteri(c)al barking
I'm so glad you were able to show Charlotte some of the nicer parts of Arizona. You did a good job of tying up all the loose end.
Sehr gut!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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What a ride you and Bruni took us on! Your writer's voice came through loud and clear (as did Brunhilda's) in this story. This was the right length for the tale you told; not too short, not too long.
I love your humor throughout the entire piece. One example: 'airport's "Stop, drop & roll in ten seconds or die"' lane; ain't that the truth?
hysteri(c)al barking
I'm so glad you were able to show Charlotte some of the nicer parts of Arizona. You did a good job of tying up all the loose end.
Sehr gut!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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Thank you, Heidi, for your RR&R and for the catch. I'm always amazed at how many get by me. :/ I am so grateful for the fine editors fan story provides, such as yourself :) Thank you for hanging in there through the end :) Have a sehr gut day!! :)
Comment from Jay Squires
This is oddly hilarious, though I probably understood about a third of the ramble. It's your voice, your style. It reminds me a lot of the fifties SOC (Stream of Consciousness) where everything is written out as rapidly as you can without censoring anything. Viscerally, your story was a lot like visiting a stygian part of town while enjoying a bit of a buzz. And that's good ... in small doses. In other words, I wouldn't read a novel of this style, but a shorter piece can sustain the energy and freedom that your post exhibits.
Here are a few considerations, all plebian:
Since we live in the 'burbs', and for the most part stay out of the downtown area, were unaware [... downtown area, WE (?) were unaware ...]
and Damnation Scripture to the scantilly clad [... Scripture to the SCANTILY clad ... Also, just as a heads up, "scantily clad" was used twice in this post, and is, itself, a little hackneyed. Just an FYI.]
for the ninety minute drive north [for the NINETY-MINUTE drive ...]
wonderful friend from Europe, who I would eventually [...wonderful friend from Europe, WHOM I would eventually ...]
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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This is oddly hilarious, though I probably understood about a third of the ramble. It's your voice, your style. It reminds me a lot of the fifties SOC (Stream of Consciousness) where everything is written out as rapidly as you can without censoring anything. Viscerally, your story was a lot like visiting a stygian part of town while enjoying a bit of a buzz. And that's good ... in small doses. In other words, I wouldn't read a novel of this style, but a shorter piece can sustain the energy and freedom that your post exhibits.
Here are a few considerations, all plebian:
Since we live in the 'burbs', and for the most part stay out of the downtown area, were unaware [... downtown area, WE (?) were unaware ...]
and Damnation Scripture to the scantilly clad [... Scripture to the SCANTILY clad ... Also, just as a heads up, "scantily clad" was used twice in this post, and is, itself, a little hackneyed. Just an FYI.]
for the ninety minute drive north [for the NINETY-MINUTE drive ...]
wonderful friend from Europe, who I would eventually [...wonderful friend from Europe, WHOM I would eventually ...]
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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Good morning, Jay. I was so happy to receive your review. You make very valid observations and suggestions for improvement; all which have been incorporated into the story, or corrected. I will definitely consider your suggestion that my writing style is best confined to shorter works as I continue to define where I want to take it for long term projects.
Thank you very much and have a wonderful day.
Comment from MelB
An amazing story on how you met this lady on Facebook and how she ended up becoming a good friend. She's fortunate to have a friend like you to come to her rescue.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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An amazing story on how you met this lady on Facebook and how she ended up becoming a good friend. She's fortunate to have a friend like you to come to her rescue.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2016
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Good morning, Melissa, and thank you very much for your readership throughout the six chapters. I appreciate your RR&R and continued interest in my work. I appreciate you! Have an awesome day :)
Comment from Dawn Munro
"and a few thousand tumbleweeds..." - omit "and" - just a comma is fine, as "and" is coming up with Micky D
Congratulations. You have officially converted moi and undoubtedly several mois to desert-loving, dog-hugging, troll-haters. If this was not a true story I would say you made it up. Wait. That IS rather obvious, isn't it? I mean, if it wasn't a true story you would have HAD to make it up, right?
Ignore me. It's 2:10 a.m. and I think I am still asleep. Either that or this nightmare of being in pain and sick is real and I have no excuse for my lousy review.
But then I do know what I like, and this is not it - it's what I love. :)) Warm, witty and wonderful story-telling, polished to an Arizona shine. (You DO know turquoise, amethyst - my birthstone - garnet, jade, onyx, opal, azurite, malachite and peridot, among other semi-precious gemstones, can be found in Arizona, yes? I was once a rockhound. As in, any of these, should you wish to send a ton or so, would not be refused, especially one peridot necklace, chain of white gold please. Of course if I have to, payment can be made in fake FanStory dough of say, a dollar. That shit's worth it's weight in malachite. *grin*)
Well done, well done, my talented friend. Fooooking brilliant!
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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"and a few thousand tumbleweeds..." - omit "and" - just a comma is fine, as "and" is coming up with Micky D
Congratulations. You have officially converted moi and undoubtedly several mois to desert-loving, dog-hugging, troll-haters. If this was not a true story I would say you made it up. Wait. That IS rather obvious, isn't it? I mean, if it wasn't a true story you would have HAD to make it up, right?
Ignore me. It's 2:10 a.m. and I think I am still asleep. Either that or this nightmare of being in pain and sick is real and I have no excuse for my lousy review.
But then I do know what I like, and this is not it - it's what I love. :)) Warm, witty and wonderful story-telling, polished to an Arizona shine. (You DO know turquoise, amethyst - my birthstone - garnet, jade, onyx, opal, azurite, malachite and peridot, among other semi-precious gemstones, can be found in Arizona, yes? I was once a rockhound. As in, any of these, should you wish to send a ton or so, would not be refused, especially one peridot necklace, chain of white gold please. Of course if I have to, payment can be made in fake FanStory dough of say, a dollar. That shit's worth it's weight in malachite. *grin*)
Well done, well done, my talented friend. Fooooking brilliant!
Comment Written 26-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Good afternoon, Dawn! Thank you for this awesome sleep deprived review. I loved it. :) As to the rockhound reference, how about if I put my class ring with a peridot center and mail it to you? It IS my birthstone, and honestly, not a fan. I did not know opals were mined in Arizona. My mom, as the story goes, had a fiery opal from Australia from a man she didn't marry, until her younger sister lost it.
Thank you for the SIX! I know they are far and few between and you have many deserving peeps, so it is greatly appreciated. I also appreciate the suggestion on the comma...change made. I hope you are on the mend, I sense a little of your spicy self coming back again, so that is great :) XO
Comment from crybry67
This is a wonderful read, it grabbed my attention and wouldn't turn me loose.
I never thought of naming that inner voice of mine, although that probably would make it easier to pass the blame.....
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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This is a wonderful read, it grabbed my attention and wouldn't turn me loose.
I never thought of naming that inner voice of mine, although that probably would make it easier to pass the blame.....
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2016
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Thabk you so much for your RR&R, and lovely words. I am so glad to hear you enjoyed theseries. Thank you for hanging in there! Have a great week ahead! :)
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm giving you a six for such a fun story. You are a delightful author. I hope they're paying you enough fanstory funny money to stick around. I get attached to my favorite authors lol! Keep writing, my friend. You are on to something good here.
- "a best (belling) author, Oscar nominee..." - should this be best-selling author?
- "...at the (the) Desert Gold RV Resort..." - no need for two of the same word there?
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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I'm giving you a six for such a fun story. You are a delightful author. I hope they're paying you enough fanstory funny money to stick around. I get attached to my favorite authors lol! Keep writing, my friend. You are on to something good here.
- "a best (belling) author, Oscar nominee..." - should this be best-selling author?
- "...at the (the) Desert Gold RV Resort..." - no need for two of the same word there?
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Hi Joy! Happy Sunday and thank you for the awesome review and the fantabulous SIX!! I still haven't gotten over your Sue Grafton compliment recently, and now scoring as one of your favorite authors, SCORE! If I don't stick around, youbkmow you van find me on my Facebook author page ☺
Thank you for the catches, all corrected...mucho gracias!! XO
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
A good end to an excellent story. I noticed one snag.
"YOU PEOPLE ARE SOOOOO BUSTED!!!!" S/B YOU PEOPLE ARE SOOOOO FOOOOKING BUSTED!!!!"
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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A good end to an excellent story. I noticed one snag.
"YOU PEOPLE ARE SOOOOO BUSTED!!!!" S/B YOU PEOPLE ARE SOOOOO FOOOOKING BUSTED!!!!"
Comment Written 25-Sep-2016
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2016
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Brunhilda and I are shaking our heads at you...ya bitch when we use fooooooking and ya butch when we don't use fooooooking! What the foooook are we going to do with you, Thomas? Haha, thanks for the RR&R 😂