The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 93 "Foggy Morning on the Bay"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
26 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
Oh great! you paint too. I liked your misty morning ,both the acrylic on canvas seascape and the accompanying word picture.I liked the idea of fog being a grey shroud and the sun struggling to tear it open.
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
Oh great! you paint too. I liked your misty morning ,both the acrylic on canvas seascape and the accompanying word picture.I liked the idea of fog being a grey shroud and the sun struggling to tear it open.
Comment Written 27-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 27-Jan-2015
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Thank you Sanku for your understanding of the painting and the poem, it was a fun experience in both art and poetry. :-) Carolyn
Comment from kiwisteveh
Carolyn, I enjoyed this as a lovely pen-portrait of a scene. You veered away from the fog a little in the middle section, but that matters little.
Strong description utilising a number of sensory images that those familiar with the sea will recognise all too well.
Good stuff.
Steve
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
Carolyn, I enjoyed this as a lovely pen-portrait of a scene. You veered away from the fog a little in the middle section, but that matters little.
Strong description utilising a number of sensory images that those familiar with the sea will recognise all too well.
Good stuff.
Steve
Comment Written 16-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2015
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Thanks Steve for feeling the fog. :-) Carolyn
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
The acrostic, Foggy Morning, is well written. The presentation and the colour all serve to heighten the strength of your words. I like the line:
Gagging on the thickness and the morning stench... that was really imaginative! Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
The acrostic, Foggy Morning, is well written. The presentation and the colour all serve to heighten the strength of your words. I like the line:
Gagging on the thickness and the morning stench... that was really imaginative! Good luck in the contest! xsx sandra
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks so very much for your fine review. :-)Carolyn
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
This is a really good descriptive acrostic for your entry to the contest. As it is 'Foggy Morning' I think your title should be just that. That it usually the way it is done. I cannot see the near rhyme, but then it is not necessary - this free style works well and the descriptive writing makes up for it and is an enjoyable read. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
This is a really good descriptive acrostic for your entry to the contest. As it is 'Foggy Morning' I think your title should be just that. That it usually the way it is done. I cannot see the near rhyme, but then it is not necessary - this free style works well and the descriptive writing makes up for it and is an enjoyable read. Good Luck in the contest. Regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks so much, it is actually not an entry, however, I wish it were. :-) I appreciate your fine remarks, Carolyn
Comment from GracieAnn
Sonali, this is a densely, pardon the pun, worded write that delivers strong emotional and descriptive words that puts the reader inside the sights, smells and sounds of the bay. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
Sonali, this is a densely, pardon the pun, worded write that delivers strong emotional and descriptive words that puts the reader inside the sights, smells and sounds of the bay. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 15-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Hi there GracieAnn, this is Carolyn, :-) I am so glad you enjoyed this one. Your comments always mean a lot to me, and I feel confident Somali would say Thanks as well.
Love, Carolyn
Comment from Spitfire
Well done. Both the painting and the poem. It doesn't read like an acrostic, but flows smoothly more like free verse. A+ personification of the fog. Excellent sensory appeal. Lavish buffet of rotting fish for the seagulls who give it a standing ovation. Great image. One of your Carolyn. Wish I have a sixer left. -
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
Well done. Both the painting and the poem. It doesn't read like an acrostic, but flows smoothly more like free verse. A+ personification of the fog. Excellent sensory appeal. Lavish buffet of rotting fish for the seagulls who give it a standing ovation. Great image. One of your Carolyn. Wish I have a sixer left. -
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks Shari for this wonderful review. I am so glad you enjoyed it and the poem. I hope to display more paintings and photos of my own from time to time. I will treasure the virtual six.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from Caressa_08
This sure beats trying to find an appropriate picture, If you can use your own artistic skill to paint one..Very nice & quite a compliment for your poem that I liked & particularly the last line of the last stanza.
Thanks for Sharing & have a Wonderful new year....Caressa
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
This sure beats trying to find an appropriate picture, If you can use your own artistic skill to paint one..Very nice & quite a compliment for your poem that I liked & particularly the last line of the last stanza.
Thanks for Sharing & have a Wonderful new year....Caressa
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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And Happy New Year to you too Carissa. Thank you so much for this fine review. :-) Carolyn
Comment from l.raven
HI Carolyn, remind me of when I lived in Florida...when the tide went out and the would stink like crazy...and all the seagulls would come and eat fish...and whatever else washed up to shore...I love your poem...and the picture beautiful...so very well written...Love ya you...luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
HI Carolyn, remind me of when I lived in Florida...when the tide went out and the would stink like crazy...and all the seagulls would come and eat fish...and whatever else washed up to shore...I love your poem...and the picture beautiful...so very well written...Love ya you...luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Hello my special friend. So glad young liked this one, and yes the beach is not all white sand and tan bodies...... I had painted this one and then it inspired the poem...
Love you too Linda,
Carolyn
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you are so welcome sweet girl...I love it Carolyn...luff xxoo
Comment from Neonewman
Multi-talented artistry I see, we share a little something in common. Love the artwork as it depicts the very essence of your wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered. Took me to the seashore.
God bless!
Steve
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
Multi-talented artistry I see, we share a little something in common. Love the artwork as it depicts the very essence of your wonderfully crafted piece you have delivered. Took me to the seashore.
God bless!
Steve
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks Steve, Ok, bring on the art... I am so glad you enjoyed this one, There are times I spread myself to thin between art and writing. This time the art inspired the poem.
I appreciat3e your fine comments.
:-) Carolyn
Comment from misscookie
I must say the artwork is a perfect match for your poem
I could vision myself there.
You captured my attention from the stat.
Thank you for sharing this misty poem.
Cookie
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
I must say the artwork is a perfect match for your poem
I could vision myself there.
You captured my attention from the stat.
Thank you for sharing this misty poem.
Cookie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2015
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Thanks misscookie,
I always appreciate your fine comments. So glad you enjoyed the poem and painting.
:-) Carolyn
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I'm so far behind.
You're very welcome have blessed week end also.
Cookie