sssSNAKEsss
s alliteration contest entry27 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi, jannypan. This is such a fun read. When I lived in California, I came home to find a 5 foot rattler in my yard. A common occurrence there. Hired a snake wrangler to take it away to Loma Linda antivenin program. Marilyn
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Hi, jannypan. This is such a fun read. When I lived in California, I came home to find a 5 foot rattler in my yard. A common occurrence there. Hired a snake wrangler to take it away to Loma Linda antivenin program. Marilyn
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for reading & reviewing my poem. I really appreciate it. We have rattlers everywhere. Sometimes they sneak into residential areas from nearby fields. I do not want to hurt them. I just wish they would stay far far away from me.
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Where are you in Texas, janny? Rattlers are so scary. I was always very careful with myself and my dogs in southern California. Marilyn
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I am in Midland. There are vacant lots around and some open fields. Whenever construction begins on any of them, the snakes scatter. Some elementary schools have vacant fields that border them, too. When I was teaching, we always had to be on the lookout for them especially at recess.
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The first two weeks of May I'll be driving across country (again as I have in the past) passing through Texas on the 40 once more. It is such a vast state, a proud state. Who doesn't like Texas? (Not the snakes, though!) Marilyn
Comment from Pantygynt
Well of course it goes well with the other one. Sorry I can't rise to an alliterative reply again but it is too early in the morning. You ought to have a go at my competition - Alliterative Verse. Entries are blind so there can be no accusations of favouritism here.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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Well of course it goes well with the other one. Sorry I can't rise to an alliterative reply again but it is too early in the morning. You ought to have a go at my competition - Alliterative Verse. Entries are blind so there can be no accusations of favouritism here.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. I did read about your contest. I struggle with meter. I appreciate your time reading and reviewing my poem. It means a great deal to me. Thank you again.
Comment from MickeyV
Hi, Jannypan. You are very creative. What a tough task and you were able to tell a very intriguing little story here. It flowed beautifully. Love the "snake surveillance." Yikes, that's scary. Thanks for sharing. It put a smile on my face. All the Best! Mickey
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Hi, Jannypan. You are very creative. What a tough task and you were able to tell a very intriguing little story here. It flowed beautifully. Love the "snake surveillance." Yikes, that's scary. Thanks for sharing. It put a smile on my face. All the Best! Mickey
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Thank you very much for taking time to read,review, and comment on my poem. I do not like snakes. If they stay far, far away from me out in the fields, then that will be ok. I will investigate your portfolio ASAP. Thanks again.
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My pleasure!
Comment from Ninap2
This is so clever. I have been reading your works with a bit of envy I must admit! I can feel the heat and hear the slithering snake and I can taste the super sized soda. Well done!
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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This is so clever. I have been reading your works with a bit of envy I must admit! I can feel the heat and hear the slithering snake and I can taste the super sized soda. Well done!
Comment Written 24-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I appreciate your review and kind words. I must admit that I am still learning how this site works. I have only recently figured out how to write a decent haiku. Please read all my work. I feel honored that someone actually said they were reading my work.
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I will read all your work if you read all of mine. ;)
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Yes, I looked you up. I have read several. I read the one about Roland. I really liked that one although it was sad. I will read the others. I fanned you. Thank you.
Comment from Domino 2
Congratulations on your win, Jannypan.
100% 's' alliteration in this so clever and great fun read.
Clever and original presentation, too.
Great skill to present as a smooth continuing story within such tough restrictions.
Genuinely excellent!
BRAVO!
Best wishes, Ray xx
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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Congratulations on your win, Jannypan.
100% 's' alliteration in this so clever and great fun read.
Clever and original presentation, too.
Great skill to present as a smooth continuing story within such tough restrictions.
Genuinely excellent!
BRAVO!
Best wishes, Ray xx
Comment Written 10-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the well wishes.
Comment from Melspoems
You did a great job telling a story in your poem using only words that start with s, I can see why you won, congratulations.
Good imagery too and the last line made me smile
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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You did a great job telling a story in your poem using only words that start with s, I can see why you won, congratulations.
Good imagery too and the last line made me smile
Comment Written 10-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2014
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Thank you very much for the review and kind words. Where I live it is in the 90s even now.
Comment from w.j.debi
Wonderful alliteration combined with excellent story telling. Those lucky students have no idea. I hope they enjoy the snow cones.
This is imaginative and so well conceived. I can see why you won the contest. It is no easy task to pack that much alliteration onto a page and come up with a story that makes sense, especially one that has a dramatic flare by building tension and telling a complete story.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Wonderful alliteration combined with excellent story telling. Those lucky students have no idea. I hope they enjoy the snow cones.
This is imaginative and so well conceived. I can see why you won the contest. It is no easy task to pack that much alliteration onto a page and come up with a story that makes sense, especially one that has a dramatic flare by building tension and telling a complete story.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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I so appreciate your review and kind words. I was nicely surprised by the win. I appreciate the congratulations.
Comment from flamingstar
Absolutely hate snakes but love the line "snowcones sound so soothing." Tonssss of alliteration going on here. You were even able to tell a story with it!
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Absolutely hate snakes but love the line "snowcones sound so soothing." Tonssss of alliteration going on here. You were even able to tell a story with it!
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I do not like snakes either. But, I do love snowcones.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
A truly excellent entry for the Alliteration Celebration contest. Such a good subject chosen for the letter ssssssssssssssss. A worthy entry which sounds like a winner. Good Luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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A truly excellent entry for the Alliteration Celebration contest. Such a good subject chosen for the letter ssssssssssssssss. A worthy entry which sounds like a winner. Good Luck. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. Actually I had written most of the poem before this contest came up. Contest or not, it was fun to write although the picture is the least scary one I could find. I did not want to spend time looking at snakes. Thank you for the kind comments.
Comment from GabbyLew
This poem is hilarious!!!
I like how you wrote "snake slithered south". Not only does it look like a snake slithering, but the snake is slivering down ,i.e., 'south'.
Solid artwork!
Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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This poem is hilarious!!!
I like how you wrote "snake slithered south". Not only does it look like a snake slithering, but the snake is slivering down ,i.e., 'south'.
Solid artwork!
Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2014
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Thank you so much. I appreciate it.