Death Rattle
My more srious take on Rigor mortis, and death...63 total reviews
Comment from Rasmine
Dean,
I didn't see anything, but still will take the two points. I want to get to 10 member dollars but am up to 9.91 :P so yours I am reading. I wish I had read this -- maybe you removed it, oh well.
Have a good weekend.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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Dean,
I didn't see anything, but still will take the two points. I want to get to 10 member dollars but am up to 9.91 :P so yours I am reading. I wish I had read this -- maybe you removed it, oh well.
Have a good weekend.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2018
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2018
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No, I didn't remove it, Rasmine. I just posted the poem a very long time ago. I think it was before you came to FanStory if I'm not mistaken.
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from jaeladarling
Spooky poem - and just in time for Halloween! :) The death rattle - wow, I think that's more info than I needed to know. :p Anyway. Great work on this. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Spooky poem - and just in time for Halloween! :) The death rattle - wow, I think that's more info than I needed to know. :p Anyway. Great work on this. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2014
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Thanks for taking the time to read and review it for me, jaeladarling. I appreciate it, very much. :)
Comment from Kingsrookviii
This is just tremendous fun and so well done. All your work is, but this one is so perfect. The death rattle struck a chord for me, because my dad had a death rattle and it brings chills up my spine. I sure with that I had your technical expertise with the layout, video and such. You never disappoint. Well done, my friend. This is bound for gory, I mean glory and may become a Halloween classic! Take care, Bruce.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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This is just tremendous fun and so well done. All your work is, but this one is so perfect. The death rattle struck a chord for me, because my dad had a death rattle and it brings chills up my spine. I sure with that I had your technical expertise with the layout, video and such. You never disappoint. Well done, my friend. This is bound for gory, I mean glory and may become a Halloween classic! Take care, Bruce.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks for all those wonderful stars, and the awesome review. Both are very much appreciated! :}
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Yeah, I love your stuff. With Halloween, I probably will be studying your material to learn to improve my horror poems. I may even break out the old black and white movies. God, how I love those corny old shows! Take care, Bruce.
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I do too, Bruce. The 1932 movie "FREAKS!" stills gives me the willies! :}
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Hey, I'll look that one up! Thanks.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem is very good, although a bit macabre. I like it in the sense that you did a good job explaining your point and adding animation in interesting places to support the text. I would not change anything. This is more than a contest entry, so I am glad you saved it for this presentation. Good job with a strange topic.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Your poem is very good, although a bit macabre. I like it in the sense that you did a good job explaining your point and adding animation in interesting places to support the text. I would not change anything. This is more than a contest entry, so I am glad you saved it for this presentation. Good job with a strange topic.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the outstanding comments, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one! :}
Comment from DR DIP
SHIT SHIT SHIT I am so pissed off I haven't a bloody 6 this my friend is one of your absolute best productions yet! sincerely I am in awe of your productions I am awe of your writings you are a master wordsmith of the highest degree. thanks for sharing and if I cold give a 7 I would I have read and watched this 5 times now... just because!!
as always your fanstory friend and student..dip
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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SHIT SHIT SHIT I am so pissed off I haven't a bloody 6 this my friend is one of your absolute best productions yet! sincerely I am in awe of your productions I am awe of your writings you are a master wordsmith of the highest degree. thanks for sharing and if I cold give a 7 I would I have read and watched this 5 times now... just because!!
as always your fanstory friend and student..dip
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the outstanding comments, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one! :}
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always a pleasure you know that and if I am ever remiss in commenting or appraising I apologise I amtrying to have a go at reciprocating to all our fanstory poets who go to the trouble and time to comment on my 2 cent poems I really do appreciate it
dip
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I understand, dipster. We really have to spread ourselves quite thin here. No doubts about it!
Comment from Cedar
As usual Deano, another masterpiece. You are certainly the "King" when it comes to this style of poetry. You are truly gifted when it comes to writing horrific pieces. Hopefully, one day soon, it will pay off for you. Fantastic work my friend. Bill
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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As usual Deano, another masterpiece. You are certainly the "King" when it comes to this style of poetry. You are truly gifted when it comes to writing horrific pieces. Hopefully, one day soon, it will pay off for you. Fantastic work my friend. Bill
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for your excellent assessment and exceptional rating of this poem, Bill. I sincerely appreciate it. :]
Comment from daeneam
haha I thought Rigor mortis (Mortiz) is a name of a man... hah! It is a recognizable sign of death.
Yep, I agree, this is hardly humorous. This is a very serious thing and not to be joked about. It will be a chilling experience for anyone too.
When I was young, I caught my playmate's attention by telling him he had no head. (In my country, when you see someone without his head, he will die.) He was so frightened that he went home crying. I never expected him to cry because he used to bully me. So, I never do such thing again. As for my playmate, he is still alive today and he is a good father and husband. c", Mae
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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haha I thought Rigor mortis (Mortiz) is a name of a man... hah! It is a recognizable sign of death.
Yep, I agree, this is hardly humorous. This is a very serious thing and not to be joked about. It will be a chilling experience for anyone too.
When I was young, I caught my playmate's attention by telling him he had no head. (In my country, when you see someone without his head, he will die.) He was so frightened that he went home crying. I never expected him to cry because he used to bully me. So, I never do such thing again. As for my playmate, he is still alive today and he is a good father and husband. c", Mae
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the outstanding comments, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one! :}
Comment from amahra
I think you've become to fantasy horror writing that Vincent Price was to horror movies. I think I'll call you the King of fantasy horror. Shall I bow down. Great writing and awesome art work.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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I think you've become to fantasy horror writing that Vincent Price was to horror movies. I think I'll call you the King of fantasy horror. Shall I bow down. Great writing and awesome art work.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the outstanding comments, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one! :}
Comment from Zue65
Nothing will beat you Dean, in the field of horror poetry. You are definitely the emperor of the horror and thriller themes and you shine best in this category. It is not really my kind of thing, although I have posted some poems of this type too. As always, the pictures and the animated videos are just perfect for your poems. Excellent, God bless.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Nothing will beat you Dean, in the field of horror poetry. You are definitely the emperor of the horror and thriller themes and you shine best in this category. It is not really my kind of thing, although I have posted some poems of this type too. As always, the pictures and the animated videos are just perfect for your poems. Excellent, God bless.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for the outstanding comments, my friend. I'm glad you liked this one! :}
Comment from vapros
Dean, among writers of this genre, you are certainly out of reach of all others here. This poem is in the class of Poe's best. Then, to make a visual production number of it, gives Fanstory members a peek into aahh . . . greatness of some sort.
I believe I will write something in this vein, one day soon, just for fun. But I will delay it, until yours is out of sight. I could not stand a comparison. Good work.
Bill
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Dean, among writers of this genre, you are certainly out of reach of all others here. This poem is in the class of Poe's best. Then, to make a visual production number of it, gives Fanstory members a peek into aahh . . . greatness of some sort.
I believe I will write something in this vein, one day soon, just for fun. But I will delay it, until yours is out of sight. I could not stand a comparison. Good work.
Bill
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2014
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Thanks so much for your excellent assessment and exceptional rating of this poem, Bill. I sincerely appreciate it. :]