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Comment from ravenblack
A death metal love song...Well, really a love song tinged with hate, the two extremes. Hate for what your haunting Lenore has done to you, reducing you while at the same time lusting all the same. Intestinal embrace- yuck !
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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A death metal love song...Well, really a love song tinged with hate, the two extremes. Hate for what your haunting Lenore has done to you, reducing you while at the same time lusting all the same. Intestinal embrace- yuck !
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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The song is actually a pretty pop ballad. ha! Just exaggerating to the extreme max. To tell the truth crazy about this particular Lenore. mikey
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Crazy as in rabid?
Comment from CR Delport
A love song? For second there I thought it was some kind of bondage thing :) It is well written though. Thanks for sharing .
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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A love song? For second there I thought it was some kind of bondage thing :) It is well written though. Thanks for sharing .
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you kindly. Exaggeration to the ultimate extreme. Believe it or not the music is actually a pretty little pop ballad. Twisted huh? mikey
Comment from tbacha58
Oh, I love you
my sweet Lenore
Oh Lenore
Lenore
Damn. What did you do to me?
Damn.
That poem is so deep and powerful. Someone was badly hurt
and unforgiving. Life is cruel sometimes. Hugs Terry
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Oh, I love you
my sweet Lenore
Oh Lenore
Lenore
Damn. What did you do to me?
Damn.
That poem is so deep and powerful. Someone was badly hurt
and unforgiving. Life is cruel sometimes. Hugs Terry
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you for reading this my friend. I am so pleased that you were able to get a message from it. I was a bit afraid to post it but, then I just pressed 'enter'. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello Michael,
I could definitely hear this being sung to the plaintive twang of a guitar - a ghoulish guitar??
Surrounded by tubercular blood drops
expectorated from your sweet lips
a swirling pattern surrounds my silhouette
as the pale moon follows behind me ... powerful imagery.
You have used some very unique imagery here ... in time for Hallowe'en, perhaps?
Have a great weekend, my friend. :)
Sonali
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Hello Michael,
I could definitely hear this being sung to the plaintive twang of a guitar - a ghoulish guitar??
Surrounded by tubercular blood drops
expectorated from your sweet lips
a swirling pattern surrounds my silhouette
as the pale moon follows behind me ... powerful imagery.
You have used some very unique imagery here ... in time for Hallowe'en, perhaps?
Have a great weekend, my friend. :)
Sonali
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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The music is actually pretty pop ballad type stuff. ha! Just exaggerating to the furthest extreme. I thought the Halloween season might be the time to sneak this in. ha! Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from Sasha
Love can be painful and often cruel and you certainly covered both quite well with this one. Devoured by love is something few write about, but just leave it to you to take this to its highest limits. Actually very well done. Definitely not your typical love song...would love to hear the music to this too.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Love can be painful and often cruel and you certainly covered both quite well with this one. Devoured by love is something few write about, but just leave it to you to take this to its highest limits. Actually very well done. Definitely not your typical love song...would love to hear the music to this too.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Glad you caught what is was doing. Taking it to the furthest extreme of exaggeration. The music is pretty lovey dovey actually featuring "two becoming one" more prominently as a sort of hook. Glad you liked it. Was a bit afraid to post and then just pressed 'post'. ha! mikey
Comment from Cookie333
Well, there is a name for this type of love Mike, heehee
sounds kind of painful, a bit more than the normal 'love bite' my friend. I am still working on the refrain for a piece I'm working on...I need the tune to be playing in my head while I write it I think.
I could definitely hear this being sung...
thanks Mike-quite a few unique images here-are there shots for the "tubercular" ?
Karen
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Well, there is a name for this type of love Mike, heehee
sounds kind of painful, a bit more than the normal 'love bite' my friend. I am still working on the refrain for a piece I'm working on...I need the tune to be playing in my head while I write it I think.
I could definitely hear this being sung...
thanks Mike-quite a few unique images here-are there shots for the "tubercular" ?
Karen
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Yeah. Shots of love!! The song itself is very ballad like for the most part with a little jazz break once in a while. "Two becoming one" is the pretty hook. I guess I took my tendency to exaggerate a bit to the extreme. ha! Glad I still have friends, mikey
Comment from boxergirl
Oh, Lenore. what did you do to me? Something extreme and intense it sounds like. Almost animalistic as the poem progresses. Strong imagery with "claws pierce" and "jaw clamps". The picture compliments your message. Damn good job, mikey! 8-)
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Oh, Lenore. what did you do to me? Something extreme and intense it sounds like. Almost animalistic as the poem progresses. Strong imagery with "claws pierce" and "jaw clamps". The picture compliments your message. Damn good job, mikey! 8-)
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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So delighted you got this one. A little extreme exaggeration. Thank you very much indeed! mikey
Comment from l.raven
Shit!! Michael, your claws pierce my thighs as you tickle my unwilling femurs, your jaws clamps down tightly on my abdomen seeking the sweet spot...I would say that is two becoming as one...or dinner and a movie...LOL...What did she do to you???Really??? A great write Michael...you do have a way with words...and a great picture to top it off...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Shit!! Michael, your claws pierce my thighs as you tickle my unwilling femurs, your jaws clamps down tightly on my abdomen seeking the sweet spot...I would say that is two becoming as one...or dinner and a movie...LOL...What did she do to you???Really??? A great write Michael...you do have a way with words...and a great picture to top it off...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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I think she said she loved me.....ha! Glad you liked this. Thank you very much. Was afraid of getting ripped for this one. mikey
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NO!!!I have read much worse...xxoo your welcome...xxoo
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Michael you do have a way with words but this is....I don't know...Oh, oh Lenore
Surrounded by tubercular blood drops
expectorated from your sweet lips
a swirling pattern surrounds my silhouette
as the pale moon follows behind me?........Almost make me nauseous. Is this for Halloween? Nancy
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Michael you do have a way with words but this is....I don't know...Oh, oh Lenore
Surrounded by tubercular blood drops
expectorated from your sweet lips
a swirling pattern surrounds my silhouette
as the pale moon follows behind me?........Almost make me nauseous. Is this for Halloween? Nancy
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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It does sound like Halloween. I took my propensity to exaggerate and took it to the ultimate extreme. It actually is a couple in love. Just described in a very extreme way like two animals devouring each other. I debated whether to post. But, I just pressed enter. This is actually a song. mikey
Comment from adewpearl
tubercular blood drops expectorated...wow, that is not what I was expecting in a love poem LOL
good alliteration in phrases like surrounds my silhouette, self-centered and in will you wallow and more
piercing claws, clamping jaws - this is gruesome!
half remembered desert - half-remembered dessert
Definitely memorable imagery :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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tubercular blood drops expectorated...wow, that is not what I was expecting in a love poem LOL
good alliteration in phrases like surrounds my silhouette, self-centered and in will you wallow and more
piercing claws, clamping jaws - this is gruesome!
half remembered desert - half-remembered dessert
Definitely memorable imagery :-) Brooke
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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I figured if I was going to exaggerate I might as well go all out to the extreme! Thank you kindly for enduring. It is Halloween season after all. Regards, mikey