The Heart of Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "Twilight Cinquain"'Tis not the Bard, but pretty good poetry anyway
15 total reviews
Comment from mickbey
Nice theme and message in this poem, the illustration is stunning, that's my kind of scene, it goes right with the poem, the poem is calming and pleasant, nice work, good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Nice theme and message in this poem, the illustration is stunning, that's my kind of scene, it goes right with the poem, the poem is calming and pleasant, nice work, good luck.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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What a nice review, thanks so much :-)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Excellent work with the writing of this serenely beautiful, extremely peaceful cinquain, mystery poet.
Your elegant word choices and outstanding message make this an very enjoyable piece to read...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Excellent work with the writing of this serenely beautiful, extremely peaceful cinquain, mystery poet.
Your elegant word choices and outstanding message make this an very enjoyable piece to read...
Best of luck to you in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2013
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Thank you Dean Kuch, I am glad you enjoyed this one, your comments mean a lot to me. :-)
Comment from Charlene0513
A solacing effect upon the evening hours as we stride to make things better come the morn.
Good imagery that describes the coolness at that time.
Charlene
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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A solacing effect upon the evening hours as we stride to make things better come the morn.
Good imagery that describes the coolness at that time.
Charlene
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Charlene, I appreciate your fine comments.
Comment from Sueellen11
Excellent entry into this contest,,, true to form and count correct,, beautifully worded,, lovely picture also,,,good luck,,,blessings,,,sueellen
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Excellent entry into this contest,,, true to form and count correct,, beautifully worded,, lovely picture also,,,good luck,,,blessings,,,sueellen
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Sueellen11, I appreciate the review and good wishes for the contest. :-)
Comment from MarjorieAnne
This poem creates a serene mood with smooth progressions from line to line. Line three could be improved so as not to use "is" again and say something about twilight without using the rather archaic "upon us". Line four nicely lifts emotions to a spiritual level.
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reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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This poem creates a serene mood with smooth progressions from line to line. Line three could be improved so as not to use "is" again and say something about twilight without using the rather archaic "upon us". Line four nicely lifts emotions to a spiritual level.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Hi there MarjorieAnne, what do you think about this?
Twilight gently descends....
Thank you for your wonderful remarks and suggestions. Carolyn
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That sounds great. You're welcome.
Comment from allborn66
This is a very beautiful poem. I love the word choice. The form enhances the piece. You communicate your theme well. Barbara
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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This is a very beautiful poem. I love the word choice. The form enhances the piece. You communicate your theme well. Barbara
Comment Written 19-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2013
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Thank you Barbara for this insightful, and lovely review. :-)
Comment from adewpearl
Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the cinquain.
Gods' grace - should be God's grace, singular possessive
nice alliteration in God's grace
You create a beautifully serene mood with lovely detail :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Your poem is in excellent syllable count for the cinquain.
Gods' grace - should be God's grace, singular possessive
nice alliteration in God's grace
You create a beautifully serene mood with lovely detail :-) Brooke
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you Brooke for the great review, I will fix my apostrophe.
:-)
Comment from starkat
This is a very soothing cinquain that foretells of a restful sleep, and perhaps pleasant dreams. Beautiful artwork enhances the feel of twilight and calm. Makes me feel like I'm in a tent in my sleeping bag on the banks of that lake, ready to fall asleep. You did a wonderful job of using the cinquain framework to hang your well chosen words.
Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best ... ;o)
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a very soothing cinquain that foretells of a restful sleep, and perhaps pleasant dreams. Beautiful artwork enhances the feel of twilight and calm. Makes me feel like I'm in a tent in my sleeping bag on the banks of that lake, ready to fall asleep. You did a wonderful job of using the cinquain framework to hang your well chosen words.
Excellent contest entry. Wishing you the best ... ;o)
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I am delighted you enjoyed Twilight. Sleeping bag, in a tent, by the lake. Now that's tranquility. :-)
Comment from mfowler
This is such a sweet and positive verse. You've employed the cinquain format deftly to create this prayer of sleeptime blessing. Lovely!
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is such a sweet and positive verse. You've employed the cinquain format deftly to create this prayer of sleeptime blessing. Lovely!
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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I appreciate your insightful review, thank you so much.
Comment from FrannyG
This is a very nice cinquain with a good title and a very appropriate and lovely image to go with it. It is quite atmospheric and very soothing with words like 'calm', 'peaceful', 'rest' and 'sleep'. Very nice.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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This is a very nice cinquain with a good title and a very appropriate and lovely image to go with it. It is quite atmospheric and very soothing with words like 'calm', 'peaceful', 'rest' and 'sleep'. Very nice.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2013
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Thank you FrannyG for the wonderful review. I am especially glad that you liked it.