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Blind Trust

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A woman is stalked by a fan

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Comment from Allezw2
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Lady Gayle,

For your information.

Throughout, you have the guide taking the arm or the elbow of the blind person's arm.

The preferred method is to permit the blind person to find the guide's elbow, either side, and use that as a reference to position. The guide has to alert this individual to the condition of the pavement and any obstructions, of course.

It is definitely not the normal course for the guide to take the blind person's arm.

For your information, GM's OnStar is only available, factory installed, on GM vehicles. Rudy would have had to contact another agency to have the service you described.

This posting is taking on a sharper edge, with a cowardly act of aggression.

So now we have them staked out and acting as bait?

Nicely done,

Fantasist

 Comment Written 13-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 14-Jan-2010
    Hey Wayne! Man! I changed that to OnGuard! I wanted to use the same one I did with Bob in Riding High!

    I will pay closer attention to the arms. Mostly, I think Rudy's doing that more like holding hands, a gesture like that, rather than actually guiding, but you're right. I'll make that clear.

    Thanks for the ideas, my friend. You keep me on the straight and narrow.

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from RenieReader
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Good grief, I wouldn't feel safe anywhere with that nut job after me. You've created a real maniac, Gayle. Great job and believable. Shudder.

He put the car in gear and drove around the block to [his garage entrance.] the entrance to his garage.

Hugs,
Renie

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 09-Jan-2010
    Hey Renie,

    Yes, better said that way! Will do!

    You just wait...creepy times ahead!

    hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from c_lucas
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This is a very interesting chapter that shows the depth of Rudy's courage. It is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme.

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2010
    Good to see you back, Charlie. Thanks for the wonderful words and the excellent rating! :)

    Gayle
reply by c_lucas on 08-Jan-2010
    You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie
reply by c_lucas on 08-Jan-2010
    You're welcome, Gayle. Charlie
Comment from jayesnb
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You seem to have a good hand on your story and the direction you want it to take..You are great at bringing in new information at just the right time..This was a great read and kept me flowing along. The pace seemed to pick up a bit here, which worked out perfectly..

now Im off to the next chapter..


 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 07-Jan-2010
    I'm having fun, too, Jaye. It's such a blast meeting new people. I've been gone just long enough that there's a ton of folks here I don't know. Like coming home. Anyway, thanks for the great review.

    Gayle
Comment from shelley kaye
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norman stanley sounds like a psycho's name
oh wait that was norman bates oops LOL

anyway, this was a great chapter LOVED all the detail you put in from the sun burning through the clouds to even the coffee (even though i hate coffee lol)

didn't notice any spaggies or typos

thanx for sharing!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Hey shelley, read over your first two sentences. You just said something there ... without realizing it. No one's spotted it yet, and that's as I hoped it would be. Can't wait to see who's first!

    Thanks for the great review!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
reply by shelley kaye on 06-Jan-2010
    what? was stanley norman bates' middle name?
Comment from Connie P
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I was waiting on the next chapter and there it was. Thanks for continuing this intriguing story. I admire your polished style. Thanks for posting,
Connie

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Glad you're having a good time with this one, Connie. It sure is a blast to write it!

    Thanks again<

    Gayle
Comment from ZigzagMLT
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Very well done, well composed.

Here are some things I picked up while reading, and some comments along the way.

...want to. There were times when it ...

love the image of mist like a wet blanket!

threw off the covers

than the one he was in...

Perhaps set up that he had put the timer on the coffee - it seemed like a surprise earlier on.


great intro of the guy below... makes me questions... and now I am waiting for answers...


In the end I am not sure why they have not called the police and had the calls traced... a bit odd, but I can live with it.

Thanks for another great chapter!
Zigzagmlt

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Hi Zig

    Definitely right on about the timer for the coffee. Good one, will implement.

    I can certainly go back and explain about why they didn't call the cops. Or, I can have a cop come to the condo regarding the vandalism to his car. What do you think?

    Gayle
reply by ZigzagMLT on 06-Jan-2010
    I think involving the cops would be a good idea. It's realistic. Otherwise someone might wonder why they didn't. And stories are educational too, we learn the rules through watching how others handle situations. It might not be a bad idea to remind readers about why she doesn't call the cops about the phone calls... perhaps Rudy might well ask her or suggest that she does? Good luck with incorporating things. Z
Comment from patmedium
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Always tell the truth, me!
Are you ready for the whole unvarnished truth of my reactions to this one?
Are you SURE you wanna know?
WWWWWWEEEEEEEEEEEEEELLLLLLLL....
As I reached the end of this wee chapter, I thought to myself:
(I did, you know!)
I thought to myself:
"And I get PAID for reading this stuff!...
I'D GLADLY DO IT FOR FREE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
Pat.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Gayle does happy dance all over the office. Pat, you're making me smile all over my face! Thank you so much, not just for the stars but for the wonderful comments.

    Hugs,
    Gayle
reply by patmedium on 06-Jan-2010
    That particular one was stunning, compulsive, couldn't put it down etc.etc.etc. ... SO BORING WHEN YOU SAY IT LIKE THAT! Much nicer to tell the truth... but differently, eh? Pat.
Comment from joelh605
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Interesting - is the parking lot where he can see it from his place? Else how did he ID Rudy's car?

Keep it going, Gayle - the pages turn!

Joel
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They entered the condo and by habit, she reset the alarm.

Needs a comma before "by" - you can save the one after "habit" if you move those two words to the end of the sentence - only alternative I can think of at the moment.

just drive away. Don't come back again or I'll kill you."
Rudy clenched his fists and something that might pass for a smile quirked his lips. Otherwise, he showed no emotion as the voice baited him.


Just me, but I was waiting for the guy to hang up - and evidently he's still on the line?

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    Rutro! The car. How would he know...oy veh. Well, I sure can fix that, no problem.

    Also let me check to see if he didn't hang up for a reason.

    Thanks for the great review, Joel. You've got the eyes of an eagle! Glad I get to benefit!

    Hugs,
    Gayle
Comment from Readywriter52
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I agree with Rudy assessment. Nathan is crazy. It must be very frustrating to him when Rudy didn't react the way he thought he would. I think Rudy will push Nathan over the edge and he will do something stupid.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2010


reply by the author on 06-Jan-2010
    I think you just might be right about Nathan. Definitely a yo-yo, that's for sure.

    Thanks again<
    Gayle