A Serendipitous Meeting
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Comment from Douglas Goff
I suppose lawyers are used to a lot of bad things coming across their desks.
I like the characters. Seem to be a bit different then your other ones. Less innocent l, but in a good way.
We shall see.
Douglas
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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I suppose lawyers are used to a lot of bad things coming across their desks.
I like the characters. Seem to be a bit different then your other ones. Less innocent l, but in a good way.
We shall see.
Douglas
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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It is a little different. I really miss you. Please drop by more often. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was another goood read. sadly I was not notified. FS really ticks me off when it does not do regular notification, especially from favourite writers.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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This was another goood read. sadly I was not notified. FS really ticks me off when it does not do regular notification, especially from favourite writers.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2025
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Thank you for searching it out. I have no clue why it didn't come into your PM box. I always posts on Sundays unless something major happens.
Comment from Mistydawn
I thought your chapter was very well-written, interesting. Your characters relatable, realistic. I can understand why she wouldn't want to have anything to do with her ex. I keep hoping something will eventually happen with the Rebeka and the doc. Guess I have to keep reading to find out. Great job looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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I thought your chapter was very well-written, interesting. Your characters relatable, realistic. I can understand why she wouldn't want to have anything to do with her ex. I keep hoping something will eventually happen with the Rebeka and the doc. Guess I have to keep reading to find out. Great job looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2025
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Richard Stuart wasn't her ex. He was her agent who took advantage of her in a couple of ways. Thank you for the kind review.
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Thank you for clearing that up for me.
Comment from Paul McFarland
You have laid the groundwork for a good story, Barb. Tyler and Roger could be very interesting characters. We will probably be dealing with problems that Stuart causes.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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You have laid the groundwork for a good story, Barb. Tyler and Roger could be very interesting characters. We will probably be dealing with problems that Stuart causes.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Harry Craft
"He's the same person who embezzled your money, correct?" asked Roger. That is my favorit line in the story because it lets the reader know what is happening and why Rebeka might have elevated blood pressure. Great story. Keep up the great work Barbara!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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"He's the same person who embezzled your money, correct?" asked Roger. That is my favorit line in the story because it lets the reader know what is happening and why Rebeka might have elevated blood pressure. Great story. Keep up the great work Barbara!
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the kind review and the understanding.
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You are so welcome!
Comment from Patrice Alves
I love your characters, they have meat lol. Tyler sounds like a hunk lol. Barbara, keep up the good work. Is it novel that I won't mind buying when it's finished.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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I love your characters, they have meat lol. Tyler sounds like a hunk lol. Barbara, keep up the good work. Is it novel that I won't mind buying when it's finished.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Your welcome :)
Comment from papa55mike
This is a great setup chapter for the secrets that are about to be revealed. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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This is a great setup chapter for the secrets that are about to be revealed. What a wonderfully written story. Best of luck with your writing! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I hope to see yu again.
Comment from jmdg1954
Moving the story along nicely. Getting the "ducks in a row" so yo say.
These two were written within a couple of short paragraphs. I think once is enough (just my opinion).
"Thank you. I'll let her know to expect your call."
"I'll tell Amber to expect your call."
Looking forward to seeing Roger in action,
John
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Moving the story along nicely. Getting the "ducks in a row" so yo say.
These two were written within a couple of short paragraphs. I think once is enough (just my opinion).
"Thank you. I'll let her know to expect your call."
"I'll tell Amber to expect your call."
Looking forward to seeing Roger in action,
John
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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I'll check that area out. I appreciate you point them out.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi barbara,
Another good instalment here as things move forwards.
Tyler introduced his best friend, Roger Whitmore to Rebeka - may need a comma after Whitmore here.
"Your assistant, Amber is getting your financial records together, right?" - same here for after Amber.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Hi barbara,
Another good instalment here as things move forwards.
Tyler introduced his best friend, Roger Whitmore to Rebeka - may need a comma after Whitmore here.
"Your assistant, Amber is getting your financial records together, right?" - same here for after Amber.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Thank you for the help. I'll make the appropriate changes.
Comment from Karen Denise
Overall, this is quite good and well-written. But I do have a few issues with some of the realism here. I think it's a little strange and unprofessional for him to be performing medical exams like this in his home. I know that taking blood pressure and measuring a baby bump are not especially invasive, but I feel like it sets a bad precedent for a doctor to be doing any of this at home. Also, and I know this may seem nitpicky, but I do want to point out that doctors really don't measure your belly at this early stage of the pregnancy, as far as I'm aware. The baby bump at 13 weeks can be small or nonexistent basically. OB/GYNs don't start measuring the bump until around 20 weeks or later. Finally, I'm just a little concerned about the ethical ramifications of what appears to be an eventual budding romance between what is now, after this exam, a doctor and his patient. Maybe I'm being prudish or something, but it just strikes me as concerning (and possibly illegal?) for a doctor to pursue a patient like that. However, I'm still impressed with the story and interested to find out what happens next!
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reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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Overall, this is quite good and well-written. But I do have a few issues with some of the realism here. I think it's a little strange and unprofessional for him to be performing medical exams like this in his home. I know that taking blood pressure and measuring a baby bump are not especially invasive, but I feel like it sets a bad precedent for a doctor to be doing any of this at home. Also, and I know this may seem nitpicky, but I do want to point out that doctors really don't measure your belly at this early stage of the pregnancy, as far as I'm aware. The baby bump at 13 weeks can be small or nonexistent basically. OB/GYNs don't start measuring the bump until around 20 weeks or later. Finally, I'm just a little concerned about the ethical ramifications of what appears to be an eventual budding romance between what is now, after this exam, a doctor and his patient. Maybe I'm being prudish or something, but it just strikes me as concerning (and possibly illegal?) for a doctor to pursue a patient like that. However, I'm still impressed with the story and interested to find out what happens next!
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Comment Written 05-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2025
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know that taking blood pressure and measuring a baby bump are not especially invasive, but I feel like it sets a bad precedent for a doctor to be doing any of this at home. (they are necessary and can't get to town because the bridge is out, besides this is fiction.)
Want to bet, I had five babies, I have this down.
Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate your thoughts. In fiction there is an element called 'suspense of disbelief.'
