Our prayer
We are well betrayed11 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Thank you for sharing this original and moving verse about betrayal. Your strong words mimicking the sentiments of the Lord's Prayer capture the unflinching reality of living on the breadline. An impressive entry! Well done and good luck
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thank you for sharing this original and moving verse about betrayal. Your strong words mimicking the sentiments of the Lord's Prayer capture the unflinching reality of living on the breadline. An impressive entry! Well done and good luck
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much.
Comment from papa55mike
There are too many stories like that all over the world. The family unit seems broken beyond repair. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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There are too many stories like that all over the world. The family unit seems broken beyond repair. This is a wonderfully written poem. Good luck in the contest! Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thanks a lot
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Wow. I don't know what to say. The color of the background is sad, but maybe that is what you intended. And the Artwork selected... what's with the illegible boxes in the corner? No ill intent intended.
Good luck with your entry.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Wow. I don't know what to say. The color of the background is sad, but maybe that is what you intended. And the Artwork selected... what's with the illegible boxes in the corner? No ill intent intended.
Good luck with your entry.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thanks thanks a lot
Comment from lyenochka
That's so devastating to think of how any parent can leave a family destitute. I liked how you used the Lord's Prayer as a model and showed us an ungodly father who isn't like our Heavenly Father Who does care for us.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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That's so devastating to think of how any parent can leave a family destitute. I liked how you used the Lord's Prayer as a model and showed us an ungodly father who isn't like our Heavenly Father Who does care for us.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 30-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Helen
Comment from Neonewman
Good lord. I was not expecting that. What an awful thing to do to your family. This is a strong entry for this betrayal contest. This well-crafted piece answered the call.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Good lord. I was not expecting that. What an awful thing to do to your family. This is a strong entry for this betrayal contest. This well-crafted piece answered the call.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Many thanks
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My pleasure.
Comment from Boogienights
This is a dark and sad poem about a father's betrayal. I'm sure there are many who can relate, having a parent leave. I think that's the ultimate betrayal. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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This is a dark and sad poem about a father's betrayal. I'm sure there are many who can relate, having a parent leave. I think that's the ultimate betrayal. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2025
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Many thanks
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is definitely a good betrayal poem. The imagery is effective and the poem flows well. The image presentation supports your words well.
Best wishes,
Alex
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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This is definitely a good betrayal poem. The imagery is effective and the poem flows well. The image presentation supports your words well.
Best wishes,
Alex
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Alex
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You're welcome, Jen!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is inventive and clever and I enjoyed the concept of this write even thought the metre is uneven I still enjoyed the sarcastic humour here. Your prayer is honest and raw Jen, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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This is inventive and clever and I enjoyed the concept of this write even thought the metre is uneven I still enjoyed the sarcastic humour here. Your prayer is honest and raw Jen, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Dolly. X
Comment from teafor2
Scribe, you've penned a dark humored work that is well rhymed with all negative propositions...No redeeming features for protagonist((s) and/or
antagonist(s)...It definitely meets the requirements of said contest. Good
luck. teafor2
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Scribe, you've penned a dark humored work that is well rhymed with all negative propositions...No redeeming features for protagonist((s) and/or
antagonist(s)...It definitely meets the requirements of said contest. Good
luck. teafor2
Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Many thanks
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You are welcome.
Comment from ESOSTINE
You made a humour out of the prayer, yet passed a passionate message. We hope that our sincere prayers will be answered. thanks for sharing your creative mind. Remain blessed, my friend.
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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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You made a humour out of the prayer, yet passed a passionate message. We hope that our sincere prayers will be answered. thanks for sharing your creative mind. Remain blessed, my friend.
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Comment Written 28-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2025
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Many thanks
