Our Knight!
Inspires us all.2 total reviews
Comment from CM Pickard
This fits the poetry contest rules, and for the most part it works. The concept behind the poem is clear and well thought out, the rhyme is well considered but for me the last two lines don't quite land as well as I'd expect. I think it's the 'global preaching...? As is it meets the rules and works but given the subject maybe consider tweaking it a bit to lift it to the next level? As usual this is just my thoughts so feel free to ignore.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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This fits the poetry contest rules, and for the most part it works. The concept behind the poem is clear and well thought out, the rhyme is well considered but for me the last two lines don't quite land as well as I'd expect. I think it's the 'global preaching...? As is it meets the rules and works but given the subject maybe consider tweaking it a bit to lift it to the next level? As usual this is just my thoughts so feel free to ignore.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Thanks for feedback.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is beautiful. The words "lighten" and "brighten" feel like a heartfelt prayer for the Lord's presence to illuminate our lives. It shares such a strong trust in God's power to guide the world. Thank you for sharing this inspiring piece!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Your poem is beautiful. The words "lighten" and "brighten" feel like a heartfelt prayer for the Lord's presence to illuminate our lives. It shares such a strong trust in God's power to guide the world. Thank you for sharing this inspiring piece!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2025
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Thank for feedback.
