Comment from
lancellot
Structurally, this is fine. You have solid editing and the idea and theme of the story fits with what the contest is about. I would advise against the all telling and no showing writing method. It can become a bad habit.
Good luck.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
I will look over. And try to improve by adding more showing. Thanks for the advice.
Comment from
DonandVicki
You stated in your header that this is fiction, yet this reads like Non-fiction for sure. This line in particular, "He realized AI was a double-edged sword, capable of both tremendous good and grave harm." So very true.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
Yes, some basics are true, but overall the story is fiction. Thank you for taking the time to read and to comment.