Whispers
a 5-7-5 poetic form25 total reviews
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this 5-7-5. It has a definite mood with the word 'wild' and also describing the nights as 'still, windless.' Congratulations on the first place win! Very nice.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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I liked reading this 5-7-5. It has a definite mood with the word 'wild' and also describing the nights as 'still, windless.' Congratulations on the first place win! Very nice.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hi Crystie. Thanks for your lovely review and comments. I am pleased that you liked it :)
Melissa
Comment from BermyBye50
Melissa,
Congrats on winning the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Your poem is beautifully crafted and captures the essence of the blessing and gift of an inspiring Muse.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Melissa,
Congrats on winning the 5-7-5 Poetry Contest. Your poem is beautifully crafted and captures the essence of the blessing and gift of an inspiring Muse.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hello Eugene! Thank you so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Lobber
Hi my friend,
Congratulations. It's a pleasure to be in great company. Happy new year!
- Jer
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hi my friend,
Congratulations. It's a pleasure to be in great company. Happy new year!
- Jer
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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thank you so much Jer!! Congrats on your placing!!!
Melissa
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa
This is a good mix of words and artwork to illustrate the metaphor in the poem. It seems the light and sound of the candle can be the dawn of ideas for writing.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hi Melissa
This is a good mix of words and artwork to illustrate the metaphor in the poem. It seems the light and sound of the candle can be the dawn of ideas for writing.
Congrats on the win.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a nice day.
Joan
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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hello Joan! Thank you so much for your wonderful review and gift of stars! Hugs, my friend.
Melissa
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Don't mention it, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from SimianSavant
Very neat piece. First, some constructive criticism. The trailing ellipses came off as gratuitously schmaltzy. And you have the word "my" twice. Why not write "a whispering muse" in the last line, and change the ellipsis to a comma or colon? I think the power of your imagery is sufficient. The simplicity of a candle at a writer's desk is sufficiently powerful in its minimalism to convey your idea. What makes your image more powerful is that it looks like a candle lit in memory of the dead, burned in a church at night, whispering thoughts from the dead to the living. You tapped into a deep well there.
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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Very neat piece. First, some constructive criticism. The trailing ellipses came off as gratuitously schmaltzy. And you have the word "my" twice. Why not write "a whispering muse" in the last line, and change the ellipsis to a comma or colon? I think the power of your imagery is sufficient. The simplicity of a candle at a writer's desk is sufficiently powerful in its minimalism to convey your idea. What makes your image more powerful is that it looks like a candle lit in memory of the dead, burned in a church at night, whispering thoughts from the dead to the living. You tapped into a deep well there.
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Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you Simian for your amazing review and all of the points you suggested. :)
Melissa
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much, but you have used the wrong photo on the front page. I am thrilled by the selection.
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
Isn't it something, how our muse whispers most of the time? I never hear him whisper! Only when he shouts do I reach for my pen. Most of the time, he's AWOL.
I like the combo... "windless nights/wild shadows/whispering muse"... the three adjectives all begin with "w".
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 contest. "Good Luck!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Hi Melissa,
Isn't it something, how our muse whispers most of the time? I never hear him whisper! Only when he shouts do I reach for my pen. Most of the time, he's AWOL.
I like the combo... "windless nights/wild shadows/whispering muse"... the three adjectives all begin with "w".
Nice entry for the 5-7-5 contest. "Good Luck!"
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 02-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2025
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Hello KB. Thanks for your insight on this verse. I like to use 'W' words. When I write in amphibrach meter, I love beginning with the word "Whenever". Such possibilities with the word ... whenever... it can go anywhere. LOL. Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Whispers, has the proper formatting and finds the notions and ideas forming in the moving shadows cast by light inspired by the creativity that circles around you. Nice.
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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This 5-7-5, Whispers, has the proper formatting and finds the notions and ideas forming in the moving shadows cast by light inspired by the creativity that circles around you. Nice.
Comment Written 31-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hi Bill. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love your 'candle whisperings' Melissa. A lovely scene you describe here with your lovely descriptive alliteration. Beautifully written and presented. Happy writing in 2025.
Valda
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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I love your 'candle whisperings' Melissa. A lovely scene you describe here with your lovely descriptive alliteration. Beautifully written and presented. Happy writing in 2025.
Valda
Comment Written 31-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hello Valda. Thanks so very much for your wonderful review!! So appreciate you, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Ulla
Ah, Melissa this 5-7-5 poem for the contest appealed to my imagination. Something was definitely stirring on this still windless night where the candle should have merely cast a steady shadow. Your muse was brewing.
Loved it. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Ah, Melissa this 5-7-5 poem for the contest appealed to my imagination. Something was definitely stirring on this still windless night where the candle should have merely cast a steady shadow. Your muse was brewing.
Loved it. All the best of luck. Ulla xxx
Comment Written 30-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Jan-2025
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Hello Ulla. Dean Koontz told me once to try writing at night by the light of a single candle. I've tried it a few times and must admit the inspiration and prompts were wonderful. Thank you so much.
Melissa
