The Checkup
A frightening dental experience39 total reviews
Comment from Natureschild
This poem is an engaging and humorous piece with vivid imagery and a clear narrative. The exaggerated scenarios evoke laughter and a touch of sympathy for the narrator.
Good luck, Terry
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This poem is an engaging and humorous piece with vivid imagery and a clear narrative. The exaggerated scenarios evoke laughter and a touch of sympathy for the narrator.
Good luck, Terry
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Katiemae1977
This is a really, really great poem Paul. Your rhymes and meter are flawless and make for an easy read. Your storyline moves well and is compelling. You had me riveted until the end.
Best of luck in the contest and I hope you do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
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This is a really, really great poem Paul. Your rhymes and meter are flawless and make for an easy read. Your storyline moves well and is compelling. You had me riveted until the end.
Best of luck in the contest and I hope you do well.
Luv&stuff
Katiemae1977
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Colorado Owl
You did an excellent job of resurrecting one of my worst nightmares! Your description makes me cringe and want to cancel my next dental appointment. (Thank you?)
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You did an excellent job of resurrecting one of my worst nightmares! Your description makes me cringe and want to cancel my next dental appointment. (Thank you?)
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from l.raven
Hi Paul, I know it wasn't a fun experience...but
it made me smile just picturing your foot over
your head...but I'm so glad you survived the whole
ordeal...and you made it home safe...
I remember telling jokes to my dentist when I went...
we were always in competition to see who would tell
the funniest joke...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and I love your picture...
very well written...love Linda xxoo
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Hi Paul, I know it wasn't a fun experience...but
it made me smile just picturing your foot over
your head...but I'm so glad you survived the whole
ordeal...and you made it home safe...
I remember telling jokes to my dentist when I went...
we were always in competition to see who would tell
the funniest joke...
I love your poem my sweet friend...and I love your picture...
very well written...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
Comment from forestport12
Mouth to ear," Yea, I love that one. I could see you doing this live at a comedy club. So much to identify with, but its those exaggerations, like putting the chair back as far as it would go and before that seeing her robed up with a bit of blood on her. But then again, they may not be dramatic license. And then the part where you are asked a question but are unable to answer. I can identify with that! love the clever rhymes. Not all put up big money deserve an exceptional. This earned it.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Mouth to ear," Yea, I love that one. I could see you doing this live at a comedy club. So much to identify with, but its those exaggerations, like putting the chair back as far as it would go and before that seeing her robed up with a bit of blood on her. But then again, they may not be dramatic license. And then the part where you are asked a question but are unable to answer. I can identify with that! love the clever rhymes. Not all put up big money deserve an exceptional. This earned it.
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Forest. I use to have a dentist who would always ask me all kinds 0of questions when he had his hands in my mouth.
Comment from Janet Foor
Dental experiences can be scary. Mine happened on a trip to Scotland. A tooth became abscessed so I was in miserable pain. Finding a dentist was not easy and then when we did, it was like going back in time to a more primitive place. Everything was cold white porcelain. But unlike your experience, no frightening bloodstains.
Great story in a poem Paul.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Dental experiences can be scary. Mine happened on a trip to Scotland. A tooth became abscessed so I was in miserable pain. Finding a dentist was not easy and then when we did, it was like going back in time to a more primitive place. Everything was cold white porcelain. But unlike your experience, no frightening bloodstains.
Great story in a poem Paul.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Janet. Did you run into any of my relatives in Scotland?
Comment from Neonewman
As soon as I noticed someone else's blood on her gown, I would have been out of there. Two years ago, I had to have all of my teeth removed. My body rejected the numbing agents, and I felt the whole experience. I'm done with the dentist forever.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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As soon as I noticed someone else's blood on her gown, I would have been out of there. Two years ago, I had to have all of my teeth removed. My body rejected the numbing agents, and I felt the whole experience. I'm done with the dentist forever.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Having all your teeth out is a tough way to avoid future dental appointments.
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I can share your pain having had many bad dental experiences and having to wear dentures. Here's one I wrote on this theme
dental torture blues
Sitting in the dental chair
Undergoing dental surgery
While the dentist probes
And tortures me
With his instruments of pain
The Frank Zappa song plays over and over
The torture never stops
The torture never stops
And I think of the mad dentist
In Little House of Horrors
The Jack Nicolson character
Who screams Pain is good
As he assaults his patients
Doing root canals
Without anesthesia
And so, I endure the torture
Of the dentist
In the vain hope
I can save my teeth
Until the next time
I undergo dental torture
The song faces away
And I slowly recover
Then as I leave
I am confronted with the bill
And the song roars back to life
The torture never stops
the torture never stops
written after seeing the dentist
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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I can share your pain having had many bad dental experiences and having to wear dentures. Here's one I wrote on this theme
dental torture blues
Sitting in the dental chair
Undergoing dental surgery
While the dentist probes
And tortures me
With his instruments of pain
The Frank Zappa song plays over and over
The torture never stops
The torture never stops
And I think of the mad dentist
In Little House of Horrors
The Jack Nicolson character
Who screams Pain is good
As he assaults his patients
Doing root canals
Without anesthesia
And so, I endure the torture
Of the dentist
In the vain hope
I can save my teeth
Until the next time
I undergo dental torture
The song faces away
And I slowly recover
Then as I leave
I am confronted with the bill
And the song roars back to life
The torture never stops
the torture never stops
written after seeing the dentist
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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That's a good one, Jake. I like country western music when I'm in the dentist chair.
Comment from shad blunt
Spent a great amount of time in a chair so similar. The anxiety of not knowing what may come next. May the story told on how and why you are sitting before her today, before the tools reveal themselves. Taking a careful inventory and watch what we say when we are exposed for another to pounce on us like a cat. That we may get out alive, at least with all most everything that was inside our mouth.
Get some rest, sorry to share I enjoyed the poem that brought you same pain. Looking forward to reading more of work. Shadrach
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Spent a great amount of time in a chair so similar. The anxiety of not knowing what may come next. May the story told on how and why you are sitting before her today, before the tools reveal themselves. Taking a careful inventory and watch what we say when we are exposed for another to pounce on us like a cat. That we may get out alive, at least with all most everything that was inside our mouth.
Get some rest, sorry to share I enjoyed the poem that brought you same pain. Looking forward to reading more of work. Shadrach
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Shad. I have had three different dental hygienists, and I have written a poem for each of them.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
As soon as I read "night school dentistry" I knew you were in trouble.
She had someone else's blood on her gown? That's not a very hygienic that for a hygienist to do! Vital signs? I've never had a dentist take my vital signs.
"pulled my mouth back to my ear", LOL! Not funny, I know, but I know exactly what you're talking about.
Of course, this is an exaggeration of what really happens, but what a great story it makes, Paul.
Very funny, and I especially liked, "She fetched a pressure washer to clean up the blood and gore."
I have an appointment at my dentist tomorrow for a procedure on my gums; can't wait:-(
Excellent entry for the contest. Good luck.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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As soon as I read "night school dentistry" I knew you were in trouble.
She had someone else's blood on her gown? That's not a very hygienic that for a hygienist to do! Vital signs? I've never had a dentist take my vital signs.
"pulled my mouth back to my ear", LOL! Not funny, I know, but I know exactly what you're talking about.
Of course, this is an exaggeration of what really happens, but what a great story it makes, Paul.
Very funny, and I especially liked, "She fetched a pressure washer to clean up the blood and gore."
I have an appointment at my dentist tomorrow for a procedure on my gums; can't wait:-(
Excellent entry for the contest. Good luck.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 01-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Pam. Good luck with your appointment.