Miracles
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Comment from LJbutterfly
There's never a dull moment (or dull sentence). I especially enjoyed this chapter focused on the actions and dialogue between Tango and Poppa, Enough happened in this chapter that they can all begin to put the pieces together.
You left Eleanor hanging, unable to tell Garth she knows where Donatelli is located, which cleverly left the reader hanging hopeful. I love your style. This is another exceptional chapter.
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There's never a dull moment (or dull sentence). I especially enjoyed this chapter focused on the actions and dialogue between Tango and Poppa, Enough happened in this chapter that they can all begin to put the pieces together.
You left Eleanor hanging, unable to tell Garth she knows where Donatelli is located, which cleverly left the reader hanging hopeful. I love your style. This is another exceptional chapter.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Ric Myworld
Angles coming in from all directions, makes it almost impossible to figure out everything that's going on all at once. But it's pretty obvious exactly who is behind it all. Thanks for sharing.
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Angles coming in from all directions, makes it almost impossible to figure out everything that's going on all at once. But it's pretty obvious exactly who is behind it all. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from karenina
I enjoyed this chapter. (I enjoy all of them, by the way) --
Nothing suspicious at ALL about a "German looking guy" walking into a dive bar with a painting...
(smile)
This is how criminals get caught. They get cocky and think they're invisible.
THAT is Eleanor's superpower!
(I wish oh wish she'd blurted out that she'd located Donatelli)
I am sure that's coming soon!
Karenina
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I enjoyed this chapter. (I enjoy all of them, by the way) --
Nothing suspicious at ALL about a "German looking guy" walking into a dive bar with a painting...
(smile)
This is how criminals get caught. They get cocky and think they're invisible.
THAT is Eleanor's superpower!
(I wish oh wish she'd blurted out that she'd located Donatelli)
I am sure that's coming soon!
Karenina
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from royowen
So Tango and Poppa have been doing some great surveillance work, and they've spotted Vince Rossi and two thugs and a forth that had eluded them before, but now has been seem with a painting, so Doyle is involved, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
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So Tango and Poppa have been doing some great surveillance work, and they've spotted Vince Rossi and two thugs and a forth that had eluded them before, but now has been seem with a painting, so Doyle is involved, beautifully written Carol, blessings Roy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Plenty going on at the Hideaway Bar and with Poppa and Tango on the outside, waiting, watching, impatient, I feel there's some drama still to go . Another good read, Carol.
well done,
cheers
valda
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Plenty going on at the Hideaway Bar and with Poppa and Tango on the outside, waiting, watching, impatient, I feel there's some drama still to go . Another good read, Carol.
well done,
cheers
valda
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Tango and Poppa are a team because Tango is way too impatient and could get all of them into trouble. Good that Poppa called Garth. But I wish he'd let Eleanor talk when she has something urgent to share. Besides, he needed worry about keeping her safe and she's already dead. He doesn't know what a gold mine it is to have a ghost on his team.
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It's good that Tango and Poppa are a team because Tango is way too impatient and could get all of them into trouble. Good that Poppa called Garth. But I wish he'd let Eleanor talk when she has something urgent to share. Besides, he needed worry about keeping her safe and she's already dead. He doesn't know what a gold mine it is to have a ghost on his team.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Wendy G
So much happening at once. Eleanor does need to get to Garth, but tailing this German guy and finding confirmation of the links with Doyle, as well as the painting heist need to be sorted first. Well done. Very exciting.
Wendy
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So much happening at once. Eleanor does need to get to Garth, but tailing this German guy and finding confirmation of the links with Doyle, as well as the painting heist need to be sorted first. Well done. Very exciting.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Carol Clark2
It's good that Tango was able to hear the conversation between Crystal and Bruiser about the artwork being worth so much money. Well, that's one way Eleanor can keep Garth away from seeing Matthew, by his running off to try to catch William. Another well-written chapter. Blessings. Carol
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It's good that Tango was able to hear the conversation between Crystal and Bruiser about the artwork being worth so much money. Well, that's one way Eleanor can keep Garth away from seeing Matthew, by his running off to try to catch William. Another well-written chapter. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Very good job of pulling a lot of strings together to form a picture that isn't worth a million dollars, but maybe it will explain a lot of what is going on and send the judge up for more years in prison. And you did this all while taking care of two or three girls, one ailing. You have a better ability to concentrate than I do.
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Very good job of pulling a lot of strings together to form a picture that isn't worth a million dollars, but maybe it will explain a lot of what is going on and send the judge up for more years in prison. And you did this all while taking care of two or three girls, one ailing. You have a better ability to concentrate than I do.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
But if Eleanor was allowed to get through Garth's thick head, they would all know where Matthew is. Things are really hotting up, Carol, talk about exciting!! Well done, dear friend, this is really good!! If you don't win this contest, I'll want to read the one that does to see if it deserves it!! Love you lots, Sandra xxxx
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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But if Eleanor was allowed to get through Garth's thick head, they would all know where Matthew is. Things are really hotting up, Carol, talk about exciting!! Well done, dear friend, this is really good!! If you don't win this contest, I'll want to read the one that does to see if it deserves it!! Love you lots, Sandra xxxx
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 20-Nov-2024
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I just hope I can get the whole story in on time. It's going to be a rough one. And I don't want to short change the story. I did get this chapter done today and I'm started on the enxt. Quiet afternoon... The next one should be exciting if I can write it like I see it in my mind. Off I go...
Love you, Carol