A parents love
For my children I'll risk it all.3 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is such a great poem. A mother's love is boundless. We will do anything for our kids.
Just a couple errors:
(Ill) walk, crawl this road-should be I'll
(Ill) risk all.-should be I'll
I also wouldn't put periods at the end of the sentences. This way it flows nicely.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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This is such a great poem. A mother's love is boundless. We will do anything for our kids.
Just a couple errors:
(Ill) walk, crawl this road-should be I'll
(Ill) risk all.-should be I'll
I also wouldn't put periods at the end of the sentences. This way it flows nicely.
Cecilia
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you 😊🙏
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Thank you 😊🙏
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You're welcome
Ceciila
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is full of raw emotion. I love how it shares a sense of determination. The short lines make each word hit harder. Especially with "For you, / I'll risk all." The way your poem builds toward the final line is powerful. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Your poem is full of raw emotion. I love how it shares a sense of determination. The short lines make each word hit harder. Especially with "For you, / I'll risk all." The way your poem builds toward the final line is powerful. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Thank you so much
Comment from Patrick Bernardy
Hello!
Your short poem is very well done. You really get to the heart of how we as parents feel. Of course, I am not a mother, so I can't totally relate, but I do feel the same way about my own kids.
I might make one suggestion, if you agree. The size of the font you are using is very small. I had to put my glasses on and get close to my screen to read it. I would recommend making it a little bigger if you agree. Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Hello!
Your short poem is very well done. You really get to the heart of how we as parents feel. Of course, I am not a mother, so I can't totally relate, but I do feel the same way about my own kids.
I might make one suggestion, if you agree. The size of the font you are using is very small. I had to put my glasses on and get close to my screen to read it. I would recommend making it a little bigger if you agree. Good luck in the contest!
Patrick
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Amazing feed back I appreciate it! Thank you. I honestly didn't know I could adjust it I'm sorry but thank you so much for your constructive feedback. Straight to the point I like that! I should rename it also to a parents love also as I was having a moment and was only thinking about my own feelings as a mother, I'm certain that father's would do the same.