The Escape
There are times when the only way out is to Escape.18 total reviews
Comment from Tim Margetts
A book that ends with that sentence sounds intriguing. How wildly did you change the concept of the original book as you wove from it a really good flash fiction, filled with emotion and suspense. I applaud you
Tim
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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A book that ends with that sentence sounds intriguing. How wildly did you change the concept of the original book as you wove from it a really good flash fiction, filled with emotion and suspense. I applaud you
Tim
Comment Written 12-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Tim, thanks for your great review. I would say about a 180 degree shift from the book. That concentrated on the affair of the husband and a letter he secretly penned. Glad you enjoyed my story. I am off to New Zealand for a couple of weeks.I might get some Kiwi inspiration. Take care.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
This us an excellent story. I could follow it along easily. It was exciting and interesting. So many women live in this situation
Congratulations on your win. You deserve it.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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This us an excellent story. I could follow it along easily. It was exciting and interesting. So many women live in this situation
Congratulations on your win. You deserve it.
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2024
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Brenda, thanks for your great review. Glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for the congrats as well. Cheers
Comment from Esther Brown
Very well done. The author Moriarty writes a number of books about abuse, I happened to read this one. You write the woman's emotions and I can identify with terror and relief. It felt authentic. Esther
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Very well done. The author Moriarty writes a number of books about abuse, I happened to read this one. You write the woman's emotions and I can identify with terror and relief. It felt authentic. Esther
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Esther, thanks for the six star review. Much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed the read. It took out first place which I am happy about. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Gayla putnam
I was rushing to the train right along with your woman. The story is well-written, and the tension remains high throughout. When her arm was grabbed at the station, I was sure she had been caught. It is a nice twist in the story that it's her sister. There is only one phrase I didn't care for. The punch became the determining point. The word "determining" took me momentarily out of the story. That could be just me, but it is worth reviewing. gayla
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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I was rushing to the train right along with your woman. The story is well-written, and the tension remains high throughout. When her arm was grabbed at the station, I was sure she had been caught. It is a nice twist in the story that it's her sister. There is only one phrase I didn't care for. The punch became the determining point. The word "determining" took me momentarily out of the story. That could be just me, but it is worth reviewing. gayla
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Gayla,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. The story took out the number one spot in the competition. Thanks also for your suggestion.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Natureschild
Hi, You have crafted a powerful portrayal of the woman escaping from an abusive relationship. You successfully drew me in from the first paragraph. The piece is nicely written, and the tension builds in the middle story, but I found the conclusion a little underwhelming. - Terry
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Hi, You have crafted a powerful portrayal of the woman escaping from an abusive relationship. You successfully drew me in from the first paragraph. The piece is nicely written, and the tension builds in the middle story, but I found the conclusion a little underwhelming. - Terry
Comment Written 11-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Terry,
Thanks for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Sorry the end did not quite grab you. The story won the contest. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Congrats on your win.
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Thanks for your congrats. It was nice to get a winner.
Comment from Wendy G
Excellent description of the violent and controlling husband and the build up of tension as she put her escape plan into practice was also well done. The tension of the twist at the end made it a gripping story.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Excellent description of the violent and controlling husband and the build up of tension as she put her escape plan into practice was also well done. The tension of the twist at the end made it a gripping story.
Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Wow,
Thanks for the six stars. So glad you enjoyed the story. Take care.
Comment from Bill Schott
The story moves steadily from her escape, back through the reasons for it, and right up to the dramatic suspected encounter with her soon-to-be ex. Fortunately, the happy ending appears instead. Nice.
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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The story moves steadily from her escape, back through the reasons for it, and right up to the dramatic suspected encounter with her soon-to-be ex. Fortunately, the happy ending appears instead. Nice.
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Bill,
Thanks for the great review. Glad you liked the story.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great story, if not a sad one. I hope this didn't happen to you. You know unfortunately, domestic abuse starts out slowly and by the time you realize it's happening it's too late. The abuser isolates you and then you have nowhere to turn.
Great job.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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This is a great story, if not a sad one. I hope this didn't happen to you. You know unfortunately, domestic abuse starts out slowly and by the time you realize it's happening it's too late. The abuser isolates you and then you have nowhere to turn.
Great job.
Cecilia
Comment Written 10-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 11-Nov-2024
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Thanks so much for your great review. Glad you liked the story despite the sad subject matter. Have a good day.
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You're welcome
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Aww Tremendous! And her sister too! You've selected a strong sentence to start your flash story and this hooks the reader immediately. After this, I found your prose was well structured to set the scene of why she was leaving and further detail the journey, creating a tension that this attempt to escape was going to be foiled, either by the abuser or by missing the train. Instead, we had a very satisfying and unexpected ending. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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Aww Tremendous! And her sister too! You've selected a strong sentence to start your flash story and this hooks the reader immediately. After this, I found your prose was well structured to set the scene of why she was leaving and further detail the journey, creating a tension that this attempt to escape was going to be foiled, either by the abuser or by missing the train. Instead, we had a very satisfying and unexpected ending. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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Thanks for your kind review and your best wishes.
Comment from DonandVicki
A flash fiction with a surprise at the end, A short story about abuse with a good ending. You kept the reader in suspence untill the very ending of the story. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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A flash fiction with a surprise at the end, A short story about abuse with a good ending. You kept the reader in suspence untill the very ending of the story. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2024
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Thanks for the kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read.