Truckin
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Comment from LJbutterfly
It's interesting, reading into the mind of an obsessed man. He likes the music of my era. I think he should not consider a friend. That person could end up being the weak link. Also Clyde is headed down to my neck of the woods in Florida over I-75. I look forward to seeing what damage he does.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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It's interesting, reading into the mind of an obsessed man. He likes the music of my era. I think he should not consider a friend. That person could end up being the weak link. Also Clyde is headed down to my neck of the woods in Florida over I-75. I look forward to seeing what damage he does.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you. Florida will be fairly safe (smiley face here).
I appreciate your very nice review.
Comment from Kahlani
I probably should have read chapter 6 before chapter 7, but it was still a great read. I guess you know by now I'm a fan and look forward to chapter 8.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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I probably should have read chapter 6 before chapter 7, but it was still a great read. I guess you know by now I'm a fan and look forward to chapter 8.
Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much. I appreciate your support.
Comment from Jim Wile
The thoughts are swirling through Clyde's head now as he seems quite conflicted about his motivations and what he is doing about them. Thoughts of his wife are preying on his conscience, as he knows she wouldn't approve of his tactics. And now he has to dissemble with his son who jokingly? questions him about being the culprit.
Will he come to his senses before it's too late? Will the desire for one more hit before leaving Florida be the one that does him in?
This is such an interesting take on a man with a moral dilemma: how to properly avenge his wife's pointless death and punish those, and others like him, properly.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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The thoughts are swirling through Clyde's head now as he seems quite conflicted about his motivations and what he is doing about them. Thoughts of his wife are preying on his conscience, as he knows she wouldn't approve of his tactics. And now he has to dissemble with his son who jokingly? questions him about being the culprit.
Will he come to his senses before it's too late? Will the desire for one more hit before leaving Florida be the one that does him in?
This is such an interesting take on a man with a moral dilemma: how to properly avenge his wife's pointless death and punish those, and others like him, properly.
Comment Written 03-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Indeed, a dilemma. He is confused, but doesn't know it.
Thank you so much for your great review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
So, he has created his ray gun. It seems that this advance in his attacks is going to get much more attention from the police and other truckers. Killing the trucks computers could also be more dangerous for everyone on the road with them as they would stop very quickly, wouldn't they? He needs to visit his son and daughter and reclaim his humanity.
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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So, he has created his ray gun. It seems that this advance in his attacks is going to get much more attention from the police and other truckers. Killing the trucks computers could also be more dangerous for everyone on the road with them as they would stop very quickly, wouldn't they? He needs to visit his son and daughter and reclaim his humanity.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2024
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smiley face here - losing his humanity.
Trucks would actually stop more safely if they just lost power rather than losing wheel control at a high speed.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"He and Jane Ann ... music in common" is third-person; then in the next paragraph you use "I" - first person. Just watch for tense exchanges. We all are guilty of it.
"Your mom and I" - was Jane Ann their mother or his second wife for a short time?
Why do I read "one more" and think this could be the one that does him in.
We'll see if I'm right next time:-)
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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"He and Jane Ann ... music in common" is third-person; then in the next paragraph you use "I" - first person. Just watch for tense exchanges. We all are guilty of it.
"Your mom and I" - was Jane Ann their mother or his second wife for a short time?
Why do I read "one more" and think this could be the one that does him in.
We'll see if I'm right next time:-)
xo
Pam
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Great comments. Thank you.
I didn't think about the tension of 'one more'. You're right in thinking that, but no, his quest continues.
I can see how 'your mom and I' could be confusing even though it's common speech. The possibility for confusion is not worth authenticity of speech.
Thanks again.
Comment from Wendy G
I think he's losing it. He could easily kill the innocent truckers, and even damaging their trucks would put honest men out of work for quite a while. It's now a dangerous obsession. Well written however.
Wendy
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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I think he's losing it. He could easily kill the innocent truckers, and even damaging their trucks would put honest men out of work for quite a while. It's now a dangerous obsession. Well written however.
Wendy
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you. I hope I don't belabor the issue of Clyde's road-raging revenge before moving to the next plot point. But so far, no one has been injured.
Thanks again for your great review. As a writer it's encouraging that I've solicited so many reactions and emotions.
Comment from lyenochka
Well, you know your roads and perhaps from all your driving all over the country, you can give us such precise info. (I did check out your great pics on tumblr until it wanted my info)
I like this pivotal stage in the story. Clyde's processing through his grief and the connections with his kids are making inroads into what he really wants and what his Jane Ann would really want for him.
I'm guessing a friendship with Thurmon would change life for Clyde.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Well, you know your roads and perhaps from all your driving all over the country, you can give us such precise info. (I did check out your great pics on tumblr until it wanted my info)
I like this pivotal stage in the story. Clyde's processing through his grief and the connections with his kids are making inroads into what he really wants and what his Jane Ann would really want for him.
I'm guessing a friendship with Thurmon would change life for Clyde.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much - seriously.
I thought an actual friendship would be pushing credibility. Maybe not, though.
Thanks again, and especially for the six stars!
Comment from Ric Myworld
You sure seem to know north and souths and easts and wests. And knowing the roads and areas they run to and from makes everything all the more realistic to me. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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You sure seem to know north and souths and easts and wests. And knowing the roads and areas they run to and from makes everything all the more realistic to me. Great job. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from jim vecchio
Are you sure you haven't tried this out before? You're not the one in Connecticut who hit and ran me , smashing me into the guardrail with a blind woman and seeing eye dog in the passenger' seat? Seriously, though, you write with such realism and manage to keep us in suspense. Thnks for such a great job.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Are you sure you haven't tried this out before? You're not the one in Connecticut who hit and ran me , smashing me into the guardrail with a blind woman and seeing eye dog in the passenger' seat? Seriously, though, you write with such realism and manage to keep us in suspense. Thnks for such a great job.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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smiling here
I don't know, were you in a diesel rig that camped out in the left lane?
Thank you for your fun review.
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Actually, it happened. In CT, I was driving a blind woman and her guide dog. Suddenly,I saw a pair of headlights coming at me like a locomotive. I had no time to do anything. He rammed into me and sent me into the guardrail. No one saw him, and the drivers kept yelling at me to get out of their way.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I have a hard time with violence like this. I see all the collateral damage that might happen. If he went after the driver that got Jane Ann that would be one thing, but this is overkill. I k now I kill off people too, but this is off the rails. You write strongly and well, but it is hard for me to read. Sorry. Karen
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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I have a hard time with violence like this. I see all the collateral damage that might happen. If he went after the driver that got Jane Ann that would be one thing, but this is overkill. I k now I kill off people too, but this is off the rails. You write strongly and well, but it is hard for me to read. Sorry. Karen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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So far, all he's hurt are trucks. If he could find 'Santa Claus' he would. But this is road rage on steroids. But you are right, there is potential for hurt, just hasn't been any.
thanks for the review.