Spirited Justice
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Comment from karenina
I any other writer's hands this might have been chaos. You have the touch-- introducing actions step by step so we can follow and understand multiple interlocking interactions at once. That is a gift. I adore Elanor --(and I think I've said this a few times for sure!)--
So cool the way she shows up on the plain and then jokes about brushing up on her speed and skills...
I like that Danni CAN appear and does dare to do it, despite being "warned" she doesn't have clearance.
Nice flirtatious interaction between Danni and Donatelli (I'm always a romantic)
Now!
I've got to read what happens next!
Karenina
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I any other writer's hands this might have been chaos. You have the touch-- introducing actions step by step so we can follow and understand multiple interlocking interactions at once. That is a gift. I adore Elanor --(and I think I've said this a few times for sure!)--
So cool the way she shows up on the plain and then jokes about brushing up on her speed and skills...
I like that Danni CAN appear and does dare to do it, despite being "warned" she doesn't have clearance.
Nice flirtatious interaction between Danni and Donatelli (I'm always a romantic)
Now!
I've got to read what happens next!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 28-Sep-2024
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I'm blushing! I truly am more than thankful for the kindness you give me when reading my stories. I do try my best to make the action clear and where it is going next.
As for Eleanor...I love her and she owns a special place in my heart and my stories. I am thrilled that you feel the same way. I wasn't sure if I could pull her humor off but so far I think I get a passing grade.
I think Danni is taking coaching lessons from Eleanor and will become a full-fledged ghost detective in the next series. She deserves it. Donatelli has her doing all the work and he gets the credit.
she will probably get in trouble first but I do know Eleanor will go to bat for her.
Smiles, Carol
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Just saying...
Assuming I make it to spirit detective academy, I want Eleanor as my mentor!
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OH, me too!
Comment from Harry Craft
Well, Carol. After flying in military aircraft for many years I must say these two lines I could really relate to. I always loved the hum of the engines. I never really liked the cold though and sometimes at high altitudes we did experience cold temperature. Great story! Keep up the great work! Except for the soft hum of the jet engines, the cabin was quiet. The temperature in the cabin dropped -- slowly at first, but steadily enough that Angelo felt a chill creeping in.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, Carol. After flying in military aircraft for many years I must say these two lines I could really relate to. I always loved the hum of the engines. I never really liked the cold though and sometimes at high altitudes we did experience cold temperature. Great story! Keep up the great work! Except for the soft hum of the jet engines, the cabin was quiet. The temperature in the cabin dropped -- slowly at first, but steadily enough that Angelo felt a chill creeping in.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much Harry. This story is coming to a close and I've got to wrap up a few things before it does. I am thrilled you are enjoying it.
Smiles, Carol
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Yes, it is very entertaining.
Comment from lyenochka
Aha! You made sure that Angelo got the papers through Eleanor! That's cool. I'm glad Angelo has Eleanor because he couldn't get through any of this without her. And Donatelli is definitely realizing how much he's dependent on Danni.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Aha! You made sure that Angelo got the papers through Eleanor! That's cool. I'm glad Angelo has Eleanor because he couldn't get through any of this without her. And Donatelli is definitely realizing how much he's dependent on Danni.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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It's coming together. Hope you enjoyed Eleanor's entrance on the plane.... I love the girl, though she's braver than me, competing with a jet. I barely feel comfortable inside a plane let alone flying through the atmosphere like she does, LOL
Appreciate the review, Helen. Going to have a little soft side for Donatelli coming up soon.
Smiles, Carol
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Yes, I can see the changes in how the characters are relating to one another. Great job!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I sure Danni doesn't get in trouble for materializing. This is another good write.
He opened it and drank it from the bottle (drank from the bottle)
She chuckled, "If I'm going to do that very often, I must invest in a helmet and goggles." (chuckled.)
except for the suspect that got away. (the suspect who got away.)
Danni nodded, "I like it too!" (nodded.)
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you for sharing this addition with us. I sure Danni doesn't get in trouble for materializing. This is another good write.
He opened it and drank it from the bottle (drank from the bottle)
She chuckled, "If I'm going to do that very often, I must invest in a helmet and goggles." (chuckled.)
except for the suspect that got away. (the suspect who got away.)
Danni nodded, "I like it too!" (nodded.)
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I think Donatelli and Eleanor will have to come to her rescue. she did a good job but broke the rules. I rushed this chapter and it shows. I'll get to it right away. (Done)
Thanks so much.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
I guess Eleanor shows up with someone is thinking about her and needs her, even if it is on a plane. I don't how Danni managed to materialize. Your ghosts are just full of skills.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I guess Eleanor shows up with someone is thinking about her and needs her, even if it is on a plane. I don't how Danni managed to materialize. Your ghosts are just full of skills.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Danni was not allowed but now she has broken the rules twince once at the bank and once with Johan.... she's going to need Eleanor and Donatelli to back her up or there might be cause for this to be the end of her career as a ghost.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've given me a whole new way of looking at pageants, since I've already read about many unscrupulous things that have happened behind the scenes of many. But real life can never keep up with fictional exploitations from a great imagination. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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You've given me a whole new way of looking at pageants, since I've already read about many unscrupulous things that have happened behind the scenes of many. But real life can never keep up with fictional exploitations from a great imagination. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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You are so kind.... I never have liked pageants either...too much ugliness involved and people exploited where beauty and talent were to be appreciated. Thanks for reading and reviewing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Jacob1395
You're doing a brilliant job of keeping me intrigued in your story and your character's, Carol. I loved Eleanor's sense of humour in this chapter as well, which I thought brought her personality to life really well. Another exciting, engaging read. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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You're doing a brilliant job of keeping me intrigued in your story and your character's, Carol. I loved Eleanor's sense of humour in this chapter as well, which I thought brought her personality to life really well. Another exciting, engaging read. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next.
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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thank you, Jacob. I am thrilled you are getting to know the characters because I've already got a third in the series brewing I think... and one far more emotional and dark... just toying with the ideas. As for this one...I think if the people involved put two and two together they should be able to figure out what's happening. We shall see!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I was in bed reading on my iPad and flicked it over to FS before I closed it down, and I was so surprised (and pleased) to see another chapter. I read it but couldn't review. Another great chapter, Carol. I loved how Eleanor materialised in the jet! Lol, and so pleased she managed to lighten Angelo's load and give him some hope things would work out. And Danni! Will she be like Eleanor now? Able to be seen? I'm glad she managed to comfort that bank clerk; I would have been like her, too, in pieces! Excellent, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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I was in bed reading on my iPad and flicked it over to FS before I closed it down, and I was so surprised (and pleased) to see another chapter. I read it but couldn't review. Another great chapter, Carol. I loved how Eleanor materialised in the jet! Lol, and so pleased she managed to lighten Angelo's load and give him some hope things would work out. And Danni! Will she be like Eleanor now? Able to be seen? I'm glad she managed to comfort that bank clerk; I would have been like her, too, in pieces! Excellent, my friend. Love and hugs, Sandra xxx
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Oh, I worry about you! I didn't want to bother you with my stories but I have so much to talk to you about when ever you are feeling better. I've written many shorts - even close to making the All Time Best with several - that would be a first... and I'm climbing the ladders in reviwers and shorts. I don't know what's gotten into me, but the writing bug is going crazy. Oh yeah, and I have one fantastic storyline developing in my head for the next series.... I'm rally excited but I have to wrap this one up first.
Take care and please get better.
Smiles, hugs and lots of love - Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Good chapter. Danni breaks the rules and materializes. Are there consequences for that? One very small typo: 'I wanted Carlos to suffer....it wouldn't be (at or by -- eliminate one).' Good dialogue, especially between Donatelli and Danni. I like the humor at the end. Blessings. Carol
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Good chapter. Danni breaks the rules and materializes. Are there consequences for that? One very small typo: 'I wanted Carlos to suffer....it wouldn't be (at or by -- eliminate one).' Good dialogue, especially between Donatelli and Danni. I like the humor at the end. Blessings. Carol
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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got it - thank you!
Glad you enjoyed the humor as well as the story. I find it lightens the tension when like in real life we can laugh. thanks so much, Carol.
Smiles, Carol
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Yes, laughter is a great gift.
Comment from Wendy G
I was waiting for Eleanor and Danni to turn up again, unnerving though their appearances can be, yet always helpful. Interesting that there is more stuff in the safe. Better that way than to have everything in one package. Well written. The threads are gradually being woven together.
Wendy
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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I was waiting for Eleanor and Danni to turn up again, unnerving though their appearances can be, yet always helpful. Interesting that there is more stuff in the safe. Better that way than to have everything in one package. Well written. The threads are gradually being woven together.
Wendy
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Yes, Alejandro didn't mean to leave it behind but when he was startled he grabbed the folder and ran. Now, we get to find what was left behind. Wonder if its anything interesting>
thanks for the review, WEndy.
Smiles, Carol
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I am sure it is something interesting! That's why it is in the safe! What can it be?