Embarssing Happening
My family will never let me forget.5 total reviews
Comment from Rachelle Allen
NOOOOOO!!! OMG!!! I think you should have gotten a medal for having not deliberately drowned yourself from the humiliation of it all!! That is the thing EVERYONE's nightmares are made of! You poor sweetie, you!!
But you did a FANTASTIC job of relating the story. You kept it vivid and funny, lively and perfectly paced [hey! I sound like a swim meet announcer!] I enjoyed it from beginning to end.
I did notice these two spags, though:
cap over my ears and my **googles** over my eyes.
Every muscle ** taught** (taut)
Best of luck in the contest! This one definitely seems like a contender!! xo
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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NOOOOOO!!! OMG!!! I think you should have gotten a medal for having not deliberately drowned yourself from the humiliation of it all!! That is the thing EVERYONE's nightmares are made of! You poor sweetie, you!!
But you did a FANTASTIC job of relating the story. You kept it vivid and funny, lively and perfectly paced [hey! I sound like a swim meet announcer!] I enjoyed it from beginning to end.
I did notice these two spags, though:
cap over my ears and my **googles** over my eyes.
Every muscle ** taught** (taut)
Best of luck in the contest! This one definitely seems like a contender!! xo
Comment Written 18-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the encouraging review. And for catching the mistakes. Sorry, I don't have any commendations left.
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Oh, gosh, no. That's fine. I just did it so that the mechanics would be as flawless as the story, itself! xo
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Always, appreciate your sage advice.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I don't have any stars left. But you deserve them for this little beauty. The Picture perfectly matches the story. But you did not verify where your picture came from. In your author's notes you need to mention where the picture came from. That is how they stay free for all of us. Karen
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I don't have any stars left. But you deserve them for this little beauty. The Picture perfectly matches the story. But you did not verify where your picture came from. In your author's notes you need to mention where the picture came from. That is how they stay free for all of us. Karen
Comment Written 17-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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I will seek the reference. Thanks for the read and feedback.
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you are welcome Karen
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you are welcome Karen
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Between your entry and "Grampy's" MIT visit with his grandaughter it will be hard to decide which of these two to vote for as they are both delightfully well versed.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Between your entry and "Grampy's" MIT visit with his grandaughter it will be hard to decide which of these two to vote for as they are both delightfully well versed.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the read and feedback.
Comment from Nicki Nance
Your imagery was so clear I could smell the chlorine. You told the story in a way that didn't leave the reader in excess discomfort. My favorite part - what a good sport you are.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Your imagery was so clear I could smell the chlorine. You told the story in a way that didn't leave the reader in excess discomfort. My favorite part - what a good sport you are.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to read and provide feedback. Appreciated.
Comment from kahpot
Ha! Ha! excellent, I can relate, I lost my Cosie, on the springboard, no hope of retrieval, the coach's wet towel did save me, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Ha! Ha! excellent, I can relate, I lost my Cosie, on the springboard, no hope of retrieval, the coach's wet towel did save me, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jan-2024
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2024
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Thanks for the read, review and for sharing. Don't know what a Cosie is, but losing it sounds embarrassing. Thank goodness for a quick acting coach.