Steve's Poems for Kids
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Almost..."A collection of my children's poems
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Comment from GEETBHIM
While reading your poem I reminded of my own child doing all this nonsense.
You bring life to the poem a well written format, words flow freely easy to understand.
Thanks for giving such a wonderful laugh.
Keep writing.
Good luck for your contest.
geetbhim.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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While reading your poem I reminded of my own child doing all this nonsense.
You bring life to the poem a well written format, words flow freely easy to understand.
Thanks for giving such a wonderful laugh.
Keep writing.
Good luck for your contest.
geetbhim.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thaks, Geet
I always like it when a reader tells me they got a laugh out of my work - it is a lovely compliment.
I managed to snare a share of first place in the contest.
Steve
Comment from Chris Tee
Wow!! You almost did every thing... I thought this was the almost best feat..... " I almost caught my Mom and Dad playing games in bed;"
I asked my dad what game they were playing and he called it jumping Jack.
Well done with this fun poem we have here old sport.
Good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Wow!! You almost did every thing... I thought this was the almost best feat..... " I almost caught my Mom and Dad playing games in bed;"
I asked my dad what game they were playing and he called it jumping Jack.
Well done with this fun poem we have here old sport.
Good luck in the contest
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, Chris
I seem to be on a hot streak writing winning poems from the point of view of a young child - my wife says she can understand that perfectly.
Steve
Comment from Linda England Bonam
This was very clever and original. I really enjoyed reading it and I couldn't wait to see what this tyke would do next! I think this is an excellent entry for this contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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This was very clever and original. I really enjoyed reading it and I couldn't wait to see what this tyke would do next! I think this is an excellent entry for this contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, Linda
I seem to be on a hot streak writing winning poems from the point of view of a young child - my wife says she can understand that perfectly.
Steve
Comment from Rama Rao
Excellent. You've presented the POV of a child in a free flowing poem which made good reading.
The only problem is would the child use such language and difficult words?
I wish you had used simpler words.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Excellent. You've presented the POV of a child in a free flowing poem which made good reading.
The only problem is would the child use such language and difficult words?
I wish you had used simpler words.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thanks, RR
I seem to be on a hot streak writing winning poems from the point of view of a young child - my wife says she can understand that perfectly.
I did have a dilemma in that the poem isn't really for children and yet I wanted to 'sound' like a child. I did have the child make mistakes (flied and choppeded). He did use one big word 'ventually which he would have heard from the vet - apart from that, maybe the least childlike word he used was 'stunt' but not anything really difficult I would have thought.
Steve
Comment from gazzagodbod
lol loved this poem great work my friend giggled throughout the picture is fab too got my vote my friend good luck in the contest gazza
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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lol loved this poem great work my friend giggled throughout the picture is fab too got my vote my friend good luck in the contest gazza
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you, Gazza
I seem to be on a hot streak lately writing winning poems from a young child's perspective. It has me baffled, but my wife says she understands perfectly...
Steve
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mate you winning contests is no surprise your a great writer :0)
Comment from Irene D. Garces
He, he, he. That's what you got in disturbing your mom & dad's romantic moments...Almost to be for adoption.
Funny indeed.
Very nice.
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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He, he, he. That's what you got in disturbing your mom & dad's romantic moments...Almost to be for adoption.
Funny indeed.
Very nice.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you.
I seem to be on a hot streak lately writing winning poems from a young child's perspective. It has me baffled, but my wife says she understands perfectly...
Steve
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Very nice try.
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and well thought out. I'm sure kids would love it too. I only have one suggestion:
"My Daddy days he's really" should it be "My Daddy (says) he's really"
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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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I enjoyed reading your poem very much. It is cleverly written and well thought out. I'm sure kids would love it too. I only have one suggestion:
"My Daddy days he's really" should it be "My Daddy (says) he's really"
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2011
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Thank you. I have fixed that typo.
I seem to be on a hot streak lately writing winning poems from a young child's perspective. It has me baffled, but my wife says she understands perfectly...
Steve
