A Picture's Worth a Thousand Poems
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "~The Battle of Leap Castle~"A compilation of pictapoems from my portfolio
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Comment from pickthorn
I'm not familiar with the pictaphone process but you have written a very interesting synopsis of the Legend of Leap Castle. I find the history of this castle fascinating.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I'm not familiar with the pictaphone process but you have written a very interesting synopsis of the Legend of Leap Castle. I find the history of this castle fascinating.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Well, pickthorn, by reading this, you're familiar with it now, LOL...
Thanks so much for your read & review, my friend!
Comment from Laurie Keim
Hi Dean.
You don't always have a sound track to write your review to. I like the way you have combined image, music and text. The Ap. poem is not too far away.
However, the rhymes in your ballad aren't as modern as the general tech. Your text seemed Victorian (19C) for example "bloody tryst", "lazy lasses" I don't here too much of this lexicon on the street.
I'd love to see you write edge cutting words with the visual effort: it might blow us all away.
Cheers, Laurie keim
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Hi Dean.
You don't always have a sound track to write your review to. I like the way you have combined image, music and text. The Ap. poem is not too far away.
However, the rhymes in your ballad aren't as modern as the general tech. Your text seemed Victorian (19C) for example "bloody tryst", "lazy lasses" I don't here too much of this lexicon on the street.
I'd love to see you write edge cutting words with the visual effort: it might blow us all away.
Cheers, Laurie keim
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Ah, a challenge huh? LOL...
Thanks very much, Laurie Keim. You're absolutely correct in your assumptions concerning the time period of the text. Commonly, for medieval pieces I tend to go with an old word verbiage. Yet, for others such a such as one of my recent 'pictapoem' offerings (a pictapoem is a poem that is intended as more of a sensory experience, rather than simply just a read), "Handwriting on the Wall" (http://fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=647134), I do utilize more cutting edge vernacular and concepts. So, it truly depends upon the type of feeling I'm trying to generate as it pertains to the writing.
I truly appreciate your insights and the review...
Comment from Sueellen11
Dean,, I so enjoy reading your stories/poems,,, they are so full of information,,, with your comments on the history behind your writings,,well done,,, blessings,,sueellen
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Dean,, I so enjoy reading your stories/poems,,, they are so full of information,,, with your comments on the history behind your writings,,well done,,, blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, Sueellen 11. I am so glad that you do!
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Sorry for the typos will see if I can change thm
Comment from CR Delport
I must admit, I have never heard of Leap Castle, but this poem is very interesting and done exceptionally well. Another masterpiece.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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I must admit, I have never heard of Leap Castle, but this poem is very interesting and done exceptionally well. Another masterpiece.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Many thanks, CR Delport. I'm glad that you enjoyed this one!
Comment from mumanoon
This was nicely written using powerful descriptive sentences that tantalize the senses capturing ferociousness and brutality of the battle - also you capture the changing mood that occurs during the course of a long and brutal conflict. As always your writing is polished to perfection complimented by your artwork and accompanying sound effects, a treat to read! Thanks E..
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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This was nicely written using powerful descriptive sentences that tantalize the senses capturing ferociousness and brutality of the battle - also you capture the changing mood that occurs during the course of a long and brutal conflict. As always your writing is polished to perfection complimented by your artwork and accompanying sound effects, a treat to read! Thanks E..
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, mumanoon. I am very pleased that you enjoyed reading it!
Comment from tfawcus
Barbarous days! Romantic views of the Middle Ages are all very well for the people who didn't live through them. No wonder these places are haunted! Your alliteration of the 'b's in 'Cannons belched blazing...etc' is quite onomatopoeic in reproducing the distant sound of artillery fire.
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Barbarous days! Romantic views of the Middle Ages are all very well for the people who didn't live through them. No wonder these places are haunted! Your alliteration of the 'b's in 'Cannons belched blazing...etc' is quite onomatopoeic in reproducing the distant sound of artillery fire.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thank very much, 'T'. I really appreciate you taking a look at this for me. Thanks for the generous rating, too, my friend!
Comment from GregoryCody
Belched, blazing boisterous bellows. Great alliteration. A fun read. In that it was captivating. This sort of stuff really interests me. The title is strong. Nice near rhyme. Adds power. I really liked this. Ending is eerie, how unusual for you ;) its good. Its hard to explain, leaves me feeling a little scared, captivated by the words still. If that makes sense.
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Belched, blazing boisterous bellows. Great alliteration. A fun read. In that it was captivating. This sort of stuff really interests me. The title is strong. Nice near rhyme. Adds power. I really liked this. Ending is eerie, how unusual for you ;) its good. Its hard to explain, leaves me feeling a little scared, captivated by the words still. If that makes sense.
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Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Hah, yeah, it makes perfect sense to me, Greg. I felt the same way all day after staying up until five am in doing the research for it, LOL...
Thanks very much for your most gracious review!
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Haha. You Are a scholar my friend. That I Do know. Maybe ill research something for my next piece. Could use some smarts! ;)
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Some really terrible evnts have occurred down throught he ages and you have produced a fine pictapoem about Leap Castle and the battles that occurred there.
Very cleverly written and beautifully presented,
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Some really terrible evnts have occurred down throught he ages and you have produced a fine pictapoem about Leap Castle and the battles that occurred there.
Very cleverly written and beautifully presented,
Comment Written 30-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2013
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Thanks very much, seken58, I really appreciate it. I worked very hard on getting this, what I felt, just right. I was a toughie, but I love a challenge! It certainly was...
Thanks so much again!:)