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Senryu Collection

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Comment from PhysioRuss
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Excellent piece. Is the black widow weeping because her nature is to take the life of her partner but still she seeks another as the drive is so strong? Lots to think about, very well written.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
    Senryu are multi-layered and you got it right.She is weeping due to social customs and obligations,but her inner side is ready to move ahead.Thanks for your excellent review.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made effective use of every syllable to describe an evil woman--one who kills her prey emotionally or even physically.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
    I appreciate your comments.Thanks for the positive and generous review
Comment from Mark Alan Trimeloni
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venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps

What does kohled mean? I guess I could look it up.

I highly doubt a spider, especially a black widow, would weep when killing something. But what do I know. Can spiders even cry?

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
    Kohl is eye make-up.'she' refers to wife,not spider.Thanks for your review
Comment from david bell
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I hate to be stupid, but what does the word Kohled mean? Is it a real word or one you made up? I like your last line the very best.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
    Kohl is eye make-up.Thanks for the positive review
Comment from tbacha58
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Woa, That verse is amazing. It tells a
story on its own. With you I never
expect , except outstanding
poems. Bless u Terry

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 Comment Written 07-Sep-2013

reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
    I appreciate your comments and encouragement.Thanks for your lovely review