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Comment from Sissy
Hello Mr. Jay!
I enjoyed this one. I like when you do the simile/metaphor/chatty thing. I feel like it's a conversation! That makes it more engaging and fun to read. You could just tell me about critting, why not tell me and still entertain!!! So type away!
As for those first reviews on FanStory, well, I think we all get yelled at least once or twice, sometimes rightfully so, sometimes not. I don't mind being told I'm wrong, if it's done in a respectful manner. I don't shoot anyone down, and I expect to be treated the same.
Some stuff to consider:
For those of you who were with me last time, and are now waiting to join me once again with my wife (I had a little problem with the 'and are now...', I felt like you guys were joining hands in marriage!! :) No, but seriously, how about something more simple like: and are now waiting for me to join my wife?)
Don't worry about the love of my life, though. She has the car, and she'll find her way home (hahahhahaa)
I don't just wander from Roseana, it appears. (Weirdly enough, I kept thinking, "What appears?" something that makes him wander? If anyone else says anything, maybe put the 'it appears' in front of the sentence? If no one else dings you, it's probably me just being too literal!)
the pure vanilla brand of macro/micro critting:(Maybe a period here, since you go with 'However' next. I was really on the fence about the colon).
They ended with, "So, jaysquires, if you come across anything else I've posted here, please feel free to pass it by.(")
and I watched Studio 60, Sunset Strip. (Studio 60 on the Sunset Strip -- however, I like your name better!!!)
but that just flat mystifies me. (flat out? I've never heard just 'flat' before.)
and, from someone who was not a writer, but someone who liked to read.
(can you just say: from someone who was not a writer, but liked to read? A little more concise.)
have to have the word (kick out extra space b/w 'to' and 'have')
I really enjoy these pieces, jay! You are doing a great job!!
Take care,
Sissy
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2006
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Hello Mr. Jay!
I enjoyed this one. I like when you do the simile/metaphor/chatty thing. I feel like it's a conversation! That makes it more engaging and fun to read. You could just tell me about critting, why not tell me and still entertain!!! So type away!
As for those first reviews on FanStory, well, I think we all get yelled at least once or twice, sometimes rightfully so, sometimes not. I don't mind being told I'm wrong, if it's done in a respectful manner. I don't shoot anyone down, and I expect to be treated the same.
Some stuff to consider:
For those of you who were with me last time, and are now waiting to join me once again with my wife (I had a little problem with the 'and are now...', I felt like you guys were joining hands in marriage!! :) No, but seriously, how about something more simple like: and are now waiting for me to join my wife?)
Don't worry about the love of my life, though. She has the car, and she'll find her way home (hahahhahaa)
I don't just wander from Roseana, it appears. (Weirdly enough, I kept thinking, "What appears?" something that makes him wander? If anyone else says anything, maybe put the 'it appears' in front of the sentence? If no one else dings you, it's probably me just being too literal!)
the pure vanilla brand of macro/micro critting:(Maybe a period here, since you go with 'However' next. I was really on the fence about the colon).
They ended with, "So, jaysquires, if you come across anything else I've posted here, please feel free to pass it by.(")
and I watched Studio 60, Sunset Strip. (Studio 60 on the Sunset Strip -- however, I like your name better!!!)
but that just flat mystifies me. (flat out? I've never heard just 'flat' before.)
and, from someone who was not a writer, but someone who liked to read.
(can you just say: from someone who was not a writer, but liked to read? A little more concise.)
have to have the word (kick out extra space b/w 'to' and 'have')
I really enjoy these pieces, jay! You are doing a great job!!
Take care,
Sissy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2006
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I'm gonna do what I always do with your crits, Sissy. Copy it out and when I go to work Monday, I'll check it against the context of it. I can see a couple of changes I'm going to make. As usual... Thank you so much. See you next time.
Jay
Comment from Jan Anderegg
"Also ... it can be pretty lonely in the circle all by myself. So, if you want to jump in with me at any time feel free -- and just as freely jump out when inclination or mood strikes you"
I'd jump in, but I might drown!
Some very valid points you are making here. I especially like the comments on reviewing chapters! It is so important to be careful if you jump in at chapter 5 and wonder why you don't have a clue what's going on!
I think the biggest problem with the summary section here on FanStory is that you are very limited on the number of characters you can type. Which is fine in chapter 2 and 3 but by the time you reach chapter 25 you are struggling to know what to say in thirty words that will bring a new reader up to date with the entire plot thus far! It can be done, as you pointed out. Milt did a fantastic job!
Excellent point made in the story of your friend reading the novel. Our readers are indeed, or at least can be, our best crits and inspiration!
Great work here. I didn't find any nits at all.
Jan
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2006
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"Also ... it can be pretty lonely in the circle all by myself. So, if you want to jump in with me at any time feel free -- and just as freely jump out when inclination or mood strikes you"
I'd jump in, but I might drown!
Some very valid points you are making here. I especially like the comments on reviewing chapters! It is so important to be careful if you jump in at chapter 5 and wonder why you don't have a clue what's going on!
I think the biggest problem with the summary section here on FanStory is that you are very limited on the number of characters you can type. Which is fine in chapter 2 and 3 but by the time you reach chapter 25 you are struggling to know what to say in thirty words that will bring a new reader up to date with the entire plot thus far! It can be done, as you pointed out. Milt did a fantastic job!
Excellent point made in the story of your friend reading the novel. Our readers are indeed, or at least can be, our best crits and inspiration!
Great work here. I didn't find any nits at all.
Jan
Comment Written 21-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2006
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But, don't use the space that FS allows for summary. Use the body of your submitted piece; just skip down four or five lines to begin your writing. Note where I did my summary. Hey, Jan, thank you for jumping aboard again. BTW, if you plan on catching any of the subsequent segments while there will be some $$ on them, you might want to bookmark this. I'm not going to be able to promote the future ones like I did the first 3 parts. I only have so many hours a day to review and promote. Thanks again, Jan
Jay
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She sits here thinking "Duh, why didn't I think of that!" Thanks so much for the advice! I will do that with my "To Catch Pegasus" novel!
I will bookmark!
:-)
Jan
Comment from bookishfabler
I am so glad I found you and this piece of work. I enjoy your sence of humor. I found this chapter, in particular, very interesting. I have currently a novel out on FS. I do put a quick summery, but There is no room for a chapter by chapter update. I know, I have tried and it is cut off. The only space you have for more details is in the end.
I have realized, after posting my masterpiece, is it needs to hold the facination with your current fans, who have stuck by you. These are the people you wnat to impress and hold on to with every word. Once you past chapter two or three, most readers will not come aboard, except for the first three, that are complimentary posting. Oh, unless you have enough points to postmon the first page in the first spot. I usually get on page two or three. So, I only have my wonderful fans.
Thanks so much for sharing
bookishfabler
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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I am so glad I found you and this piece of work. I enjoy your sence of humor. I found this chapter, in particular, very interesting. I have currently a novel out on FS. I do put a quick summery, but There is no room for a chapter by chapter update. I know, I have tried and it is cut off. The only space you have for more details is in the end.
I have realized, after posting my masterpiece, is it needs to hold the facination with your current fans, who have stuck by you. These are the people you wnat to impress and hold on to with every word. Once you past chapter two or three, most readers will not come aboard, except for the first three, that are complimentary posting. Oh, unless you have enough points to postmon the first page in the first spot. I usually get on page two or three. So, I only have my wonderful fans.
Thanks so much for sharing
bookishfabler
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Hi bookishfabler -- Thank you for your kind words and your loyalty. About the summary. Don't even attempt it in the space FS gives you. I didn't. I made it a part of the chapter, the part of the chapter you are posting. That way it can be a half page long if you want to (and, of course you wouldn't). BTW, if you?re planning on catching the whole series, it might be prudent to bookmark it. I?m not a fast reader or critter and can?t do a decent job in that capacity and still earn enough member $$ or pumps to promote the remaining chapters like the ones to date. I don?t want anyone to miss any installments. I do appreciate you so much.
Jay
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You are book marked, darling.
book
Comment from RaymondJohn
A well-written essay. I find that when I'm critting, there are essentially two different groups of people. Those who need it, and those who don't. There are many writers who don't need any critique except for the subject matter. They are very well-versed in the mechanics, can write lively prose or poems. I know before I open their file that it will be a fine offering. Occasionally I am surprised and have to mark them done for some reason or other.
The second group is those who do need critiquing. Their stories may not make sense, it is very poorly edited and proof read, or have no characterization or sense of place. They need to be told, but they also need to be encouraged. I've never awarded a one, and seldom a two. They're not terribly helpful. A three tells them that they have some pretty important problems to address, either in the plot or in their editing and posting. Most of my critiques come out as 4s and 5s.
I apologize for throwing in my 2 cents worth but I did enjoy your analysis and agree with most of it. All best wishes. Ray.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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A well-written essay. I find that when I'm critting, there are essentially two different groups of people. Those who need it, and those who don't. There are many writers who don't need any critique except for the subject matter. They are very well-versed in the mechanics, can write lively prose or poems. I know before I open their file that it will be a fine offering. Occasionally I am surprised and have to mark them done for some reason or other.
The second group is those who do need critiquing. Their stories may not make sense, it is very poorly edited and proof read, or have no characterization or sense of place. They need to be told, but they also need to be encouraged. I've never awarded a one, and seldom a two. They're not terribly helpful. A three tells them that they have some pretty important problems to address, either in the plot or in their editing and posting. Most of my critiques come out as 4s and 5s.
I apologize for throwing in my 2 cents worth but I did enjoy your analysis and agree with most of it. All best wishes. Ray.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Ray, I want to especially thank you for taking the time to be so specific on your role as a critter. I appreciate you and what you are saying, more than you know. Please stay aboard. BTW, if you?re planning on catching the whole series, it might be prudent to bookmark it. I?m not a fast reader or critter and can?t do a decent job in that capacity and still earn enough member $$ or pumps to promote the remaining chapters like the ones to date. I don?t want anyone to miss any installments.
Bless you, my friend...
Jay
Comment from FlowingInk
Here are a few items I noticed while crittering, there are a few more
learned to accept my propensity - perhaps, [learned acceptance of my...]
and, it's almost always not a physical - almost always?? how about one word [usually]
Secondly (and, why - are the () needed in this sentence
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Here are a few items I noticed while crittering, there are a few more
learned to accept my propensity - perhaps, [learned acceptance of my...]
and, it's almost always not a physical - almost always?? how about one word [usually]
Secondly (and, why - are the () needed in this sentence
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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FlowingInk, thank you so much for reading this piece and making your constructive suggestions. One especially catches my attention. You're the second person to suggest changing "almost always" to "usually." I'll have to check it over in its context. To me, "almost always" has more emphasis than "usually," but when two people agree, I must look more closely. I'm pasting here this other comment you wrote because I don't understand it. If you would get back with me on it I'd appreciate it. You ready? Here: "Secondly (and, why - are the () needed in this sentence" Please know how I value your input and I'm honored to have your readership.
Jay
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just wondering why you are using the () in the sentence, can maintain sentence structure with commas and such, just curious
Comment from ooh baby
Like your friend said..."it was really long." I like when you add the humor to your writes! It is a lot more fun, heh-heh-heh! I did enjoy this and I hope that I do let people know I care about what they have said, because I do care. Otherwise, I wouldn't stop to read at all!
I don't have a lot of experience, just what I have learned on my own from life and a little bit of college English I had to take for my business degree and a nursing degree...I'm not a trained writer. I just do this for my own sanity. I like what you have to say! I love your sense of humor! Thanks for having me in for awhile!!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Like your friend said..."it was really long." I like when you add the humor to your writes! It is a lot more fun, heh-heh-heh! I did enjoy this and I hope that I do let people know I care about what they have said, because I do care. Otherwise, I wouldn't stop to read at all!
I don't have a lot of experience, just what I have learned on my own from life and a little bit of college English I had to take for my business degree and a nursing degree...I'm not a trained writer. I just do this for my own sanity. I like what you have to say! I love your sense of humor! Thanks for having me in for awhile!!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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You may not be a trained writer, ooh baby, but you are a good writer. I enjoy having you as a regular to this series. Jump aboard and enjoy the ride. Thanks for your kind words.
Jay
Comment from simon_morris
Jay, another wonderful piece here. Since I already gave you one of the sixes this month, I can't (by order of the grand marshall) give you another. It is a perfectly-tailored piece of writing.
I've made a few comments that I am posting that may get me kicked out of FanStory. I prefer to take that chance than play the alcolyte who takes the advice of the drunken Mother Shapiro knowing she is not only wrong but is doomed to hell. Some things need to be said and your work here opens the door to saying them. I didn't name any names but if anyone would like to complain, they can find me. I'm listed in the phone book and despite being the last angry man since I was a boy, I'm still standing. Just tell them not to get me confused with my son. We are the only two families on the planet who spell my last name the way I do.
Jay, I disagree with the anal retentive people who couldn't drive a toothpick up their collective asses with a sledgehammer about assaying the topic of writing with humor, metaphor and simile and stories. Writing about writing can be a teacher's manual for an eleventh grade educator and third-rate thinker, or it can be an adventure into the realms you are discussing. Examples of good writing teach more than all the lists you could assay. I'm writing two page imitations of your work here and I am being told they are too long by one or two troglodytes who want every piece of writing to look like a high school composition (none since the era when HS composition were carved on stone tablets has ever been published). Most of the reviewers are readers, thank God and they give an opinion of how the work affected them. The others try to find any nit they can to prove they can find one. I'm always appreciative of spelling nits or gross errors in grammar but Io do not appreciate the person who tells me that I "Should have said A instead of B." That, is rewriting, not critting.
People in a hurry to get through a piece of writing aren't readers. In many instances, they miss key points and take you to task for not including them. I had one take me to task for not quoting a source when it is the first three words in the sentence that starts the piece. Then she tells me I should have opened MY writing about writing with a quote! I opened it with a brief unquote taking the words of another into my realm.
People who rush through reviews are simply panderers who want their 8 points and 37 cyber cents quickly so they can move on to mind-f--- someone else with their superior knowledge unsupported by a single review in a newspaper or magazine about their writing. Have they ever has a substantive publication credit? When a blind man tells me how to get to Forty-Second Street and I am already standing in the middle of Times Square, I am reluctant to give him much verity. He could tell me better than the sighted people if there are crumbs on the ground, but he can't tell me if the plethora of neon is a substantive distraction from the zeitgeist that the town is trying to project. Such people get the SPAG but don't get the writing.
That person you quoted - I got the same answer from her for a different chapter. She writes like she thinks. I wish you had answered ..., "Regardless, it was written so poorly that motivation and five cents would buy you permission to stop killing trees!
There goes them concentric circles again.
Jay, you used a great story-telling mode to get a point across. It is a method that I used to teach therapy to grad students. Stories capture readers who have a soul. The rest will never write anything of note but they live to criticize others. It is a power trip to compensate for something missing in their own lives. It is a taking, not a giving and you can read it between every self-righteous line. Thank God there are not many of that ilk here. What is unfortunate, like Hitler, a few people tend to imitate them because of the fact that it takes so little skill to be anonymously authoritative. The real critters here are critting to help themselves. Every time they discover something -- either positive or negative in someone else's writing, they are able to transpose the knowledge to their own writing. Include me in that group. There is no end to learning as a writer.
I can't wait to see part III of this chapter. I was planning to post an essay on critting but I will hold off until later. It pales in comparison to this piece of work.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Jay, another wonderful piece here. Since I already gave you one of the sixes this month, I can't (by order of the grand marshall) give you another. It is a perfectly-tailored piece of writing.
I've made a few comments that I am posting that may get me kicked out of FanStory. I prefer to take that chance than play the alcolyte who takes the advice of the drunken Mother Shapiro knowing she is not only wrong but is doomed to hell. Some things need to be said and your work here opens the door to saying them. I didn't name any names but if anyone would like to complain, they can find me. I'm listed in the phone book and despite being the last angry man since I was a boy, I'm still standing. Just tell them not to get me confused with my son. We are the only two families on the planet who spell my last name the way I do.
Jay, I disagree with the anal retentive people who couldn't drive a toothpick up their collective asses with a sledgehammer about assaying the topic of writing with humor, metaphor and simile and stories. Writing about writing can be a teacher's manual for an eleventh grade educator and third-rate thinker, or it can be an adventure into the realms you are discussing. Examples of good writing teach more than all the lists you could assay. I'm writing two page imitations of your work here and I am being told they are too long by one or two troglodytes who want every piece of writing to look like a high school composition (none since the era when HS composition were carved on stone tablets has ever been published). Most of the reviewers are readers, thank God and they give an opinion of how the work affected them. The others try to find any nit they can to prove they can find one. I'm always appreciative of spelling nits or gross errors in grammar but Io do not appreciate the person who tells me that I "Should have said A instead of B." That, is rewriting, not critting.
People in a hurry to get through a piece of writing aren't readers. In many instances, they miss key points and take you to task for not including them. I had one take me to task for not quoting a source when it is the first three words in the sentence that starts the piece. Then she tells me I should have opened MY writing about writing with a quote! I opened it with a brief unquote taking the words of another into my realm.
People who rush through reviews are simply panderers who want their 8 points and 37 cyber cents quickly so they can move on to mind-f--- someone else with their superior knowledge unsupported by a single review in a newspaper or magazine about their writing. Have they ever has a substantive publication credit? When a blind man tells me how to get to Forty-Second Street and I am already standing in the middle of Times Square, I am reluctant to give him much verity. He could tell me better than the sighted people if there are crumbs on the ground, but he can't tell me if the plethora of neon is a substantive distraction from the zeitgeist that the town is trying to project. Such people get the SPAG but don't get the writing.
That person you quoted - I got the same answer from her for a different chapter. She writes like she thinks. I wish you had answered ..., "Regardless, it was written so poorly that motivation and five cents would buy you permission to stop killing trees!
There goes them concentric circles again.
Jay, you used a great story-telling mode to get a point across. It is a method that I used to teach therapy to grad students. Stories capture readers who have a soul. The rest will never write anything of note but they live to criticize others. It is a power trip to compensate for something missing in their own lives. It is a taking, not a giving and you can read it between every self-righteous line. Thank God there are not many of that ilk here. What is unfortunate, like Hitler, a few people tend to imitate them because of the fact that it takes so little skill to be anonymously authoritative. The real critters here are critting to help themselves. Every time they discover something -- either positive or negative in someone else's writing, they are able to transpose the knowledge to their own writing. Include me in that group. There is no end to learning as a writer.
I can't wait to see part III of this chapter. I was planning to post an essay on critting but I will hold off until later. It pales in comparison to this piece of work.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Milt, you have no idea how valuable and affirming I find your crits. Your words sizzle with the fire of real life undergirding them. You cut through all the humor and crap that I throw in just to keep the smiling eye scrolling down the page, and get what is real in the piece. You find it, you examine it, you agree or disagree with its tenets (and let me know), but you don't go off like one critter, chiding me for making her go to her dictionary to look up "denouement." She asked why I didn't just say "ending." I felt like telling her because it doesn't mean just ending; my tongue still bears the crease from my crowns, but I may keep her with the program. So goes the life of the prostitute. I just want you to know that I read and re-read your crits. They and you mean a lot to me.
Jay
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Aaarrrgh! The piece I am about to post on "random issues in writing" contains the word denouement.
I will NOT erase it or replace it and if she excoriates me, I will tell her:
"If I had writen this article for dumbshits, I would have posted a warning. If it is over your head, criticize your parents for not exposing you to proper vocabulary. You are not a writer who had sound parenting or a good education. That is too bad. If you ever decide to publish your personal history of sexual abuse, find a writer to ghost it for you.
"Me, I had parents who treasured books and what was contained therein, and a wife whose 40 years as an English and reading teacher taught me how to do more than just give her a Hallmark Moment every anniversary with someone else's writing.
"Be aware that if you annoy me one more time, I will review all of your work and point out every single flaw in it. You think Satan is your enemy? I am one devil you do not want to get on the bad side of."
That about sums up how I feel. One time, just for the satisfaction, I would love to let it fly. Maybe on my last day on FanStory I will.
Your series is so well done that it merits publication but unfortunately, I have discovered that the publishers want to market to Ms. Terminally Irreparable Shithead. Their subsriptions are more from her than from us. That is why I taught a writing course on line and also why Sol Stein was willing to teach with me. He wanted an outlet where he didn't have to write down. We had a great three years. I just can't believe how little he was able to teach me that I didn't learn just from reading and writing. He is, by far, the greatest teacher of writing on the face of the earth. His book, "Stein on Writing" is a classic and is good. I haven't heard from him lately. He would be very old now. He was in his late 70s when we worked together in the 90s.
Comment from Jack Lewis
I'm off to go join your fan list, because I'm really enjoying this series. I only spotted one SPAG issue: "me (and a few others I'll bet), who is ecstatic" -- I believe the "is" should be "are"
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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I'm off to go join your fan list, because I'm really enjoying this series. I only spotted one SPAG issue: "me (and a few others I'll bet), who is ecstatic" -- I believe the "is" should be "are"
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Jack, thank you, thank you, thank you for your enthusiasm. And also, thanks for the heads up. You know the English language is strange. It forces us to make the incorrect choice, because the correct one just doesn't make sense. It would have made perfect sense had I left out the "(and a few others I'll bet)" but I wanted to have the inclusive feeling to the sentence. But I didn't want to carry it to it's natural conclusion if I changed "is" to "are" that the others are looking up everything in their little manuals (as I admitted to) and passing it off as being spontaneous corrections (as I also admitted to the guilt of). See the problem? I chose what I chose, though, with my eyes wide open. English is strange.
Anyway, thank you again, Jack for coming aboard and for becoming my fan. I'm really touched by that. A suggestion. When the next posting comes on your mailbox, jump right on it. I won't be able to promote it like the others since I don't have enough member dollars or pumps.
you da bomb!
Jay
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will do :)
Comment from cutie
very professionally skillful language of writer talkin here.....impossible to hold myself out of this place very thanks to bring it!! cheers!!! kisses!!!
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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very professionally skillful language of writer talkin here.....impossible to hold myself out of this place very thanks to bring it!! cheers!!! kisses!!!
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Charmy, your crits mean so much to me. Thank you for continuing to be here for me. Your support is appreciated. BTW, if you?re planning on catching the whole series, it might be prudent to bookmark it. I?m not a fast reader or critter and can?t do a decent job in that capacity and still earn enough member $$ or pumps to promote the remaining chapters like the ones to date. I don?t want anyone to miss any installments. Love ya girl.
Jay
Jay
Comment from Ageispanther
Jay,
I agree with what you said about coming into the middle of a book and not know what was previously said. I actually went to your prologue and read until I came to this chapter because I was so use to not having a summery at the beginning. I have been doing a lot of that. I am new to the "critting" of others work. I am still learning how to find mistakes.
I am learning so much from you and I am enjoying the journey. I know what I like and do not like but as for the grammar and spelling I am still learning. I have actually bought a few books to learn about those subjects.
I can not wait for your next chapter! I am waiting and biting my nails.
Bright Blessings
Ageis
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Jay,
I agree with what you said about coming into the middle of a book and not know what was previously said. I actually went to your prologue and read until I came to this chapter because I was so use to not having a summery at the beginning. I have been doing a lot of that. I am new to the "critting" of others work. I am still learning how to find mistakes.
I am learning so much from you and I am enjoying the journey. I know what I like and do not like but as for the grammar and spelling I am still learning. I have actually bought a few books to learn about those subjects.
I can not wait for your next chapter! I am waiting and biting my nails.
Bright Blessings
Ageis
Comment Written 20-Oct-2006
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2006
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Hi Ageis ( I love that name. It is so Greek!) First, thank you for your wonderful crit. It warms this old man's heart to be able to offer something that others are able to use. I hope you jump aboard for all the rest of them. BTW, if you?re planning on catching the whole series, it might be prudent to bookmark it. I?m not a fast reader or critter and can?t do a decent job in that capacity and still earn enough member $$ or pumps to promote the remaining chapters like the ones to date. I don?t want anyone to miss any installments.
Blessings to you.
Jay
