Hues of Life
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Comment from michaelcahill
oh yes. I like this very much. I appreciate that you rely on words to paint a picture instead of an image. your words paint a vivid picture and are well chosen. a difficult form in my opinion. very successful in this case. mike
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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oh yes. I like this very much. I appreciate that you rely on words to paint a picture instead of an image. your words paint a vivid picture and are well chosen. a difficult form in my opinion. very successful in this case. mike
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Leineco
what an interesting vehicle for learning a new word - successfully adding a second dimension to this humble senryu!
Very nicely conceived and executed :-)
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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what an interesting vehicle for learning a new word - successfully adding a second dimension to this humble senryu!
Very nicely conceived and executed :-)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Nichola
A disturbing little poem, especially if it is a metaphor for a real person.
I enjoyed reading your chilling poem, which was owerful for such a small amount of words.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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A disturbing little poem, especially if it is a metaphor for a real person.
I enjoyed reading your chilling poem, which was owerful for such a small amount of words.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your positive review.
Comment from ravenblack
Kohled eyes ( masquera ) / cold eyes; black widow ( spider )/ black widow ( poisons husbands ) very clever and unobtrusive. Such wordplay in such a short form often overwhelms the piece, but you have achieved the right balance.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Kohled eyes ( masquera ) / cold eyes; black widow ( spider )/ black widow ( poisons husbands ) very clever and unobtrusive. Such wordplay in such a short form often overwhelms the piece, but you have achieved the right balance.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your positive review
Comment from SueZen
Indeed no image needed, as poem evokes ENOUGH !!!
Super the word 'kohled'...says more than 'cold' !
Black widow ashen,'cinders' weeps in search of new prey to poison...Wow, superb !
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Indeed no image needed, as poem evokes ENOUGH !!!
Super the word 'kohled'...says more than 'cold' !
Black widow ashen,'cinders' weeps in search of new prey to poison...Wow, superb !
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Wow!I feel honored and humbled by your wonderful words and generous stars.I am glad you liked it so much.Thanks for your lovely review:)
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Wow!I feel honored and humbled by your wonderful words and generous stars.I am glad you liked it so much.Thanks for your lovely review:)
Comment from Matoshka
Very direct and to the point, strange how the black widow will mate and then around and kill him. Your metaphor is superb. Blessings
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Very direct and to the point, strange how the black widow will mate and then around and kill him. Your metaphor is superb. Blessings
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your positive feedback
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You are so welcome. Blessings
Comment from Debra White
Hi Anupam :)
This is very clever.
I really liked what you did here, deserves nothing less than a 6!
Love the similarities of a 'black widow' and black widow spider.
I enjoyed the way you directed me to read between the lines to get lots of different meanings.
Fab!
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi Anupam :)
This is very clever.
I really liked what you did here, deserves nothing less than a 6!
Love the similarities of a 'black widow' and black widow spider.
I enjoyed the way you directed me to read between the lines to get lots of different meanings.
Fab!
Kindest regards as always, Debra :)
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2013
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Hi:)
I am glad you could interpret the multiple meanings and I feel humbled by your wonderful comments and generous rating.It means a lot.I was not sure whether people will like it or not.Thanks for your lovely review:)
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You're welcome :)
Comment from Sueellen11
My friend great Senryu true to form , but sad for me, as her venom is deadly, I like the double take here, the venom of a woman's scorn, aligned with with the spiders bite, the fact that, both can be deadly, great write, blessings, sueellen
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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My friend great Senryu true to form , but sad for me, as her venom is deadly, I like the double take here, the venom of a woman's scorn, aligned with with the spiders bite, the fact that, both can be deadly, great write, blessings, sueellen
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it and your interpretation is spot on.Thanks for your wonderful review
Comment from judiverse
The deadly female! I wonder if the male thought his death was worth it. I bet the black widow weeps. Great alliteration with "black widow." I remember a movie titled "Black Widow." She would marry a rich man and kill him, and then artfully go after another one. Although she inherited wealth from each of her victims, it wasn't enough to satisfy her. So she kept on until she was caught at last. judi
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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The deadly female! I wonder if the male thought his death was worth it. I bet the black widow weeps. Great alliteration with "black widow." I remember a movie titled "Black Widow." She would marry a rich man and kill him, and then artfully go after another one. Although she inherited wealth from each of her victims, it wasn't enough to satisfy her. So she kept on until she was caught at last. judi
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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You got it right and I am glad you liked it.I haven't heard about that movie but this thought struck my mind and I shared it.I meant it to be considered as dark humor.Thanks for sharing your thoughts and positive review
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You're so welcome. Yes, definitely dark humor. judi
Comment from Val Crisson
Very nice my friend. Another stunning sentry, that does not lose anything with out presentation. I always find that a good sign, though I can't resist it myself. I have one question, why is the black widow weeping? This might make a great free verse, though it is also a very good senyru.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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Very nice my friend. Another stunning sentry, that does not lose anything with out presentation. I always find that a good sign, though I can't resist it myself. I have one question, why is the black widow weeping? This might make a great free verse, though it is also a very good senyru.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2013
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She is weeping because of social customs.She has lost her husband and needs to show off that she is sad,though she is happy for she got rid of him.Thanks for your positive review
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Oh! I have to remember you're from India, but none the less this could be a universal truth.