Lost in the Woods
Timmy Mouse goes looking for Elves76 total reviews
Comment from Chris Tee
Another absolutely lovely story for the kiddies in poetic format that we have here old sport.
Well done indeed with this excellent work.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Another absolutely lovely story for the kiddies in poetic format that we have here old sport.
Well done indeed with this excellent work.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thanks Chris, I am really glad you liked it! xsx
Comment from ameen786
Well Sandra my friend, I don't think it would be long before Timmy and Tammy become a popular story among children, great poem with superb rhyming. Just one suggestion if you don't mind...make the poem shorter, with your extraordinary talent, I know you could still maintain the theme. God bless.
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Well Sandra my friend, I don't think it would be long before Timmy and Tammy become a popular story among children, great poem with superb rhyming. Just one suggestion if you don't mind...make the poem shorter, with your extraordinary talent, I know you could still maintain the theme. God bless.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you for your thoughtful and very helpful review, ameen. I think you are right about length, I will look at that. I do get carried away sometimes! Thank you again. xsx
Comment from rchitwood
Your poem about Timmy and Tommy is very creative and has nice imagination. They will make good books for the children and I know they will enjoy them. You don't nee them illustrated they paint the image in ones mind. But I know what you mean I did so enjoy this. Blessings Rita
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Your poem about Timmy and Tommy is very creative and has nice imagination. They will make good books for the children and I know they will enjoy them. You don't nee them illustrated they paint the image in ones mind. But I know what you mean I did so enjoy this. Blessings Rita
Comment Written 12-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Rita, that is very kind of you, such a lovely review! xsx
Comment from wordsfromsue
This is another really sweet chapter. I think the characters will go over in a big way with children.
I enjoyed the story from start to cozy end with the Elves.
I have one small question:
In the first line, it reads Reggie the Rat was sat on a log. Is that the way it should read? 'was sat' sounds unusual to my ear.
This is a wonderful chapter. Great writing. :-)
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This is another really sweet chapter. I think the characters will go over in a big way with children.
I enjoyed the story from start to cozy end with the Elves.
I have one small question:
In the first line, it reads Reggie the Rat was sat on a log. Is that the way it should read? 'was sat' sounds unusual to my ear.
This is a wonderful chapter. Great writing. :-)
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Hi Sue,firstly, thank you for your great review. I have sat here going over that sentence, trying to put it another way. I am not sure how I could change it to actually tell the reader what Reggie was doing when Tommy came by looking fo his brother. This is a hard one, do you have any suggestions? I honestly do appreciate it when someone reviewing my work does come up with a query, that is what reviewing is all about. I will carry on thinking about it during the day, Thank you for your comments, greatly appreciated. xsx Sandra.
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Reggie the Rat (who) sat on a log
Reggie the Rat, (he) sat on the log
It can be vexing trying to pick out just the right word!
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Thank you Sue! Sometimes you can ponder for hours trying to get it right, thanks again.xsx
Comment from Veronica Grace
Another cute and sweet chapter to your creatures' adventures. I would love to see you publish this and fulfill you dream of illustrating it. It's a winner!
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Another cute and sweet chapter to your creatures' adventures. I would love to see you publish this and fulfill you dream of illustrating it. It's a winner!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2012
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Veronica, how lovely of you to say so! Thank you so much for this wonderful review, you are so kind. xsx
Comment from Piggies Grandma
I enjoyed reading your stories very much sandra. They are cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure children will love reading and having this story read to them.
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I enjoyed reading your stories very much sandra. They are cleverly written and very well thought out. I'm sure children will love reading and having this story read to them.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you, Piggies Grandma, I really appreciate your reviews, thank you! xsx
Comment from Rahul@ISM_India
This is a very well written poem
Funny and so well presented,You should consider adding an artwork to this splendid piece,Loved you work,well done
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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This is a very well written poem
Funny and so well presented,You should consider adding an artwork to this splendid piece,Loved you work,well done
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Rahul, that is no nice of you! Unfortunately I can't draw the illustrations I want to go with my stories and I don't know anyone to do them for me. I will keep looking though. Thank you for your lovely review, I do appreciate it. xsx
Comment from alexisleech
I bet if children were read one of your lovely rhyming stories every night, the world would be awash with poets! The flow is never interrupted whilst still telling a great story about things children (and this adult!) can relate to. Well done! Alexis x
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I bet if children were read one of your lovely rhyming stories every night, the world would be awash with poets! The flow is never interrupted whilst still telling a great story about things children (and this adult!) can relate to. Well done! Alexis x
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thaank you, Alexis, That is so nice of you. I really appreciate your review, thank you! xsx
Comment from JennieClare
I think that this fun story in a poem should appeal to children. Should get published in my opinion. Great meter and rhyme. All the best Jennie.
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I think that this fun story in a poem should appeal to children. Should get published in my opinion. Great meter and rhyme. All the best Jennie.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you Jennie, that is so nice of you to say that. I really appreciate your comments. Thank you! xsx
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My pleasure. Jennie
Comment from irishauthorme
Fanciful and entertaining! Even though your story was written in rhyme, it was still easy to follow, and moved along at a good pace. I liked the tension as the elves grew close, and then the resolution at the end, where Reggie got his comeuppance.
Good work, irish
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Fanciful and entertaining! Even though your story was written in rhyme, it was still easy to follow, and moved along at a good pace. I liked the tension as the elves grew close, and then the resolution at the end, where Reggie got his comeuppance.
Good work, irish
Comment Written 11-Jan-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2012
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Thank you!! What a lovely review, that is no nice of you, Irish, I really appreciate your review. xsx