Comment from NewFuture

Exceptional

Wow I Like it.A sick mind paints a vivid faith.I Would love to see this poem made into a movie or a video game.I love the Darkness of this poem with such details.The only thing I didn't like was that I wanted more. Luv Da Poem Great Great Masterpiece.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2014

Thanks for such an excellent review, New Future, I appreciate it!

As far as wanting more...I will do my best, LOL...

Thanks again!

Comment from Schalk Jacobs

Excellent

A very interesting topic. Indeed biological warfare has indeed been around for centuries. Your poem does indeed paint a horror picture for the future. Then, on the other hand, Mother Nature has been waging biological warfare on us since the beginning of time. Well written poem that makes the reader sit down and really think.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks for reading & reviewing this piece for me, Schalk Jacobs. I appreciate the intriguing thoughts and comments.

Comment from Amsterdam

Exceptional

tic tock
tic tock
tic tock
tic tock

tic tock tic tock tick tic tock
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Time to awake the sleeping flock

The world is SICK
WE COULD BE THE DOC

WE DONT GET TO PICK
Time does not ever stop
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shhh....
quiet just like a rock.

people are not sheep
when they hear the pop
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shh... it is ok
no need to drop

people are not sheep
when they feel the bomb drop
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shh... go to sleep
there is no plot

people are sheep
the message I got.
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they will wake...
one way, or the other.

great write brother
am

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks a million, Amsterdam. Much obliged to you, my friend!

Comment from lancellot

Exceptional

A very well crafted poem, and those biological weapons are in the hands men on both sides of the Earth. There really are no safe hands. You are correct, we should not be playing God.

suggestion to consider:

by playing God; we will be burned
or
by playing God; we all will burn
- you lose the all, if you're not counting syllables.
The 'ed' set it apart from the rest of the poem.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2014

Thanks for the excellent suggestions, and for taking the time to critique this one for me, lancellot. I appreciate it!

Comment from Leineco

Exceptional

A horrifying (yet all too possible) scenario
of world-wide "bloodless" death;
a pill or two in a reservoir, a virus loosed in a stadium
genetically enhanced small pox events. . .
the end of mankind's dominance.
". . .not with a bang, but a whimper" -
the whimper of man's final breath.

It is great to have you back Dean! I have missed your writing immensely!

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014

Thanks a million for the fantastic review, Leineco! Hopefully I can continue to entertain you & all of my friends at the same level in the future.

Comment from mickbey

Exceptional

This is one helluva piece of work, really enjoyed this one, scary, yes, but even more creative, I like the interesting rhyme scheme, I knew I heard a rhyme in that fourth line but couldn't see it at first, very clever I thought, everything fit and flowed, the illustration and sound made it a total package for me, great work.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014

Thanks a million, mickbey. Sorry for the delayed reply, I have been a bit sick lately. I'm doing better now, though. I truly appreciate your comments!

Comment from Petriesan

Exceptional

the first stanza reads like ezekial to me.

wonderful rhyme schemes used in innovative manners.

ANd how did you superimpose the words on the picture? Great touch.

SUperb

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 22-Feb-2014

Thanks so much for the excellent review, Petriesan. I always appreciate how encouraging you are, it really helps to keep me going!

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is very well written, dean, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the use of biological warfare that could be released at anytime or anywhere....

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2014

Comment from ravenblack

Excellent

Biological agents should never have been produced. Now we have to worry about them falling into the wrong hands. Are these agents adequately guarded? No. Have they been used on a massive scale- smallpox infection was deliberately accelerated by infected blankets to the Native American population. Play God and you will fall.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014

Play God, and innocent people die.

Thank you, as always, RB. You viewpoints are well spoken and grounded in the realities we face today.

Comment from DonandVicki

Excellent

A very dark and foreboding poem about Armageddon and the horror's of war. I think your poem holds the readers attention all through the work and is well composed. Don

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2014

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014

Thank you very much, DonandVicki. I appreciate your review of my work. I am very happy that you liked it.