5-7-5 (Man Cold)
A little wifely humor56 total reviews
Comment from Sylvia Page
This fun poem is beautifully written and the picture complements it very well, especially the thermometer in the mouth. The poem has all 17 syllables. Good imagery.
Hope you win the contest, Best wishes!
Cheers
Sylvia
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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This fun poem is beautifully written and the picture complements it very well, especially the thermometer in the mouth. The poem has all 17 syllables. Good imagery.
Hope you win the contest, Best wishes!
Cheers
Sylvia
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Sylvia,
Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback, I appreciate more than you know when some one rechecks my syllables (not my strong suit but I can't resist writing poems that require it).
Thank you also for the great review and the contest wishes :)
Comment from Rondeno
Very good. You have two X chromosomes, you know. We don't. That's what makes us so delicate. If you only knew how we suffer!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Very good. You have two X chromosomes, you know. We don't. That's what makes us so delicate. If you only knew how we suffer!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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lol, you have me smiling now!! Thank you so much for indulging my humor and for the kind review and feedback.
Have a wonderful week :)
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a good entry for the contest - it did make me smile:) Your 5-7-5 syllable count is perfect. Good luck.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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This is a good entry for the contest - it did make me smile:) Your 5-7-5 syllable count is perfect. Good luck.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Teresa,
Thank you so very much for the great feedback, I always appreciate an extra look at my syllable count. I'm so very pleased that you got a smile from it.
Have a wonderful week!!
Comment from Silent1rose
What a picture lol. Very amusing. Cold's can make you feel very horrible. Good work.
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Oh no it's a man cold lol ~ Rose
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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What a picture lol. Very amusing. Cold's can make you feel very horrible. Good work.
sneeze cough at deaths door
thinks this is the end for sure
sigh it's a man cold
Oh no it's a man cold lol ~ Rose
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Rose,
Thank you so much for the wonderful review and great feedback.
:)
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You're welcome!
Comment from Jose Saic
Excellent short poem that with a good sense of humor tells us about a person probably very ill with sneezes, coughs and so on (I figure he was an old deep-rooter smoker). And to crawn it all,
he is cold!.
Wow!
Yes, I think he is probaly dead.
Congratulations to the author.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Excellent short poem that with a good sense of humor tells us about a person probably very ill with sneezes, coughs and so on (I figure he was an old deep-rooter smoker). And to crawn it all,
he is cold!.
Wow!
Yes, I think he is probaly dead.
Congratulations to the author.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Wow, thank you so very much for the wonderful stars, they have certainly brighten my day!! Thank you so much for the well wishes. :)
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You are welcome.
Comment from Debra White
Oh yes, man cold is a deadlier strain of the virus than common cold... at least that what my husband tells me!
I like the proximate rhyme of door and sure, also good use of alliteration in deaths door.
Very funny, thanks for the laugh and good luck in the contest. Kindest regards, Debra :)
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reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Oh yes, man cold is a deadlier strain of the virus than common cold... at least that what my husband tells me!
I like the proximate rhyme of door and sure, also good use of alliteration in deaths door.
Very funny, thanks for the laugh and good luck in the contest. Kindest regards, Debra :)
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Comment Written 14-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2013
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Debra,
Thank you so much, it was fun to write. We love our husbands, bless their hearts.
Have a great week.
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You too :)