Hues of Life
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Comment from emjaihammond
This is an interesting piece. It seems to be speaking
about a black widow who can't help herself. Just destroying one after the other, weeping after the deed. Enjoyed reading this one.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This is an interesting piece. It seems to be speaking
about a black widow who can't help herself. Just destroying one after the other, weeping after the deed. Enjoyed reading this one.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from denhagan
This is a very interesting senryu poem, that meets the requirement of the contest, containing seventeen syllables or less. Good use of words.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This is a very interesting senryu poem, that meets the requirement of the contest, containing seventeen syllables or less. Good use of words.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Contest??
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review
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You're welcome,
Dennis
Comment from Keelan Cloud
I'll give you four stars for creativity and following tough form. I just don't really understand it. That being said, I still respect your poetry. It has something someone other than me would really enjoy.
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reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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I'll give you four stars for creativity and following tough form. I just don't really understand it. That being said, I still respect your poetry. It has something someone other than me would really enjoy.
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Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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If you don't understand a work,then just don't review it.And giving 4 stars without any suggestion makes no sense.
Comment from GWinterwin
Oh my friend, the black widow does it again. She gets her prey and then weeps. She must be a killer with a conscience. Good writing my friend.
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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Oh my friend, the black widow does it again. She gets her prey and then weeps. She must be a killer with a conscience. Good writing my friend.
Comment Written 09-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 09-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for the positive review
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Nicely done, the description of the eyes made up with black cosmetic design is very dramatic. One can see the black widow weep as she searches for more prey. Good job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Nicely done, the description of the eyes made up with black cosmetic design is very dramatic. One can see the black widow weep as she searches for more prey. Good job, Carolyn
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you could connect with importance of 'kohled eyes'.I appreciate your support.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from tfawcus
You crete a vivid and powerful image here, Anupam! Presumably the black widow's tears are only to elicit sympathy from her next victim - a device to lure him into the net!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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You crete a vivid and powerful image here, Anupam! Presumably the black widow's tears are only to elicit sympathy from her next victim - a device to lure him into the net!
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Yes,you are absolutely right.I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from Zinnia48
Definitely a 6! Extremely powerful poem. the images are visual and emotional. You told a story and left us with lots of questions--all within 3 lines. thanks! Caroline
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Definitely a 6! Extremely powerful poem. the images are visual and emotional. You told a story and left us with lots of questions--all within 3 lines. thanks! Caroline
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi,
I appreciate your lovely comments and generous sixth star.It means a lot.I am glad you liked it so much.Thanks for your kind words and exceptional review:)
Comment from Cookie333
You have given this reader in instant image, the widow is well fed I assume? He was her prey...
I enjoy your short pieces
Thank you
Just one question
'Kohled'?
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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You have given this reader in instant image, the widow is well fed I assume? He was her prey...
I enjoy your short pieces
Thank you
Just one question
'Kohled'?
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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'kohled eyes'-eyes with kohl(eye make-up/mascara)applied on them.
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
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Thank you, I missed that one my friend,
karen
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your little senryu has a startling effect as the reader digests the significance of the first and second lines and then you punch the meaning home with the black widow imagery in the last.
Steve
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Your little senryu has a startling effect as the reader digests the significance of the first and second lines and then you punch the meaning home with the black widow imagery in the last.
Steve
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I am glad you liked it.Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)
Comment from rjuselius
"venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps"
nice piece of poetry! don't know what kohled means but overall it's a good one. i like the last line, it brings ummph.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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"venom took his life
her kohled eyes search new prey
black widow weeps"
nice piece of poetry! don't know what kohled means but overall it's a good one. i like the last line, it brings ummph.
thank you for sharing!
rebekka x
Comment Written 08-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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'kohled eyes'-eyes with kohl(eye make-up/mascara)applied on them.
Thanks for your kind words and excellent review:)