Comment from
Lisa Charlie
Great write!
I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was entertaining.
The structure was good and I didn't see any punctuational problems. The lines fit nicely into place. The rhymes were in harmony and were not forced.
Great Job!
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Comment Written 24-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2013