Comment from The Death

Excellent

So true! It's all about taking efforts and making our won destiny, rather than just sitting. Your poem is fine form and delivers a strong message. Nice presentation of your work as well. Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018

Thank you very much****kahpot

Comment from jenintorre

Excellent

Hi there Kahpot
I like your 5-7-5 poem . It is a great life story in just seventeen syllables. Very good advice.
I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes Jen.

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018

Thank you very much****kahpot

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi kahpot. This is a good entry for the contest. It has a nice message conveyed in just seventeen syllables. You just inspired me to write a 5-7-5. Not the same subject matter This day and age honor is a valuable and forgotten commodity. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018

Thank you very much and good and happy writing****kahpot

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Very nicely written kahpot. Do you know how to centre your text? Just go into advanced editor and then you have a lot more leeway with what you do.

A fine entry into the contest and the artwork is terrific too.

Best wishes to you.

Gloria

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018

Thank you very much and I do now and have it centered, many thanks****kahpot

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

that is superb, K. I am afraid you are going find yourself teaching how to pronounce ON-RA-BA-LEY. good luck in the contest, I like your entry a lot..........meeshu

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018

Thank you very much, have I spelled it wrong?****kahpot

reply by meeshu on 09-Jul-2018

not at all, but some dialects (mine) would pronounce it : ON-OR-A-BA-LY 5 syls.

reply by the author on 09-Jul-2018

many thanks my Freind****kahpot

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a great inspirational speech in just ten words! It would make a great card for a graduate entering independent life.
I like how the second line covers the day to day life and the last line keeps focus on the future goals.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018

Thank you very much, this is very encouraging****kahpot

Comment from Alexander Vasa

Excellent

Hello Kahpot, you have a knack for combining words, I love the ones you've chosen for this self-improvement poem. Something we should always be striving for. Such powerful words to begin each line, begin, walk, claim. It could be a mantra, just those three words. NIce job with this. Best of luck with it, cheers, Ana.

p.s. loved the pic!!

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 Comment Written 08-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2018

Thank you very much, I will have to look up a Mantra****kahpot