Brelynn
Miracles still Happen (please read authors note before reading poem)57 total reviews
Comment from emjaihammond
You don't really need the highlights. The rhythm may be off in a few places just a bit, but I truly find the story done in rhyme so sweet and I can picture it as it takes place in my head. Wonderful story and I wish your family the very best. God is full of miracles. God bless!
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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You don't really need the highlights. The rhythm may be off in a few places just a bit, but I truly find the story done in rhyme so sweet and I can picture it as it takes place in my head. Wonderful story and I wish your family the very best. God is full of miracles. God bless!
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from TPAC
You go, very inspiring write touching in its appeal and delightful in its given presentation. I found it profound and filled with treasured thoughts.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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You go, very inspiring write touching in its appeal and delightful in its given presentation. I found it profound and filled with treasured thoughts.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello author love how you have fun in your poem ABCB.
with Syllable Count of 8 Per Line.
Loved this part- made me smile
Fifty people came to party,
they all had one thing on their mind.
It was called a gender reveal,
what color balloons would we find?
Gert
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Hello author love how you have fun in your poem ABCB.
with Syllable Count of 8 Per Line.
Loved this part- made me smile
Fifty people came to party,
they all had one thing on their mind.
It was called a gender reveal,
what color balloons would we find?
Gert
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
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You are so welcome Dr,Nad
Gert
Comment from patcelaw
You may copy and share it with your daughter. Congratulations to all.
Across The Room
When you look across the room,
And see your daughter smile,
Why not stop everything,
Just to play with her a while?
For all too soon the years,
May take her to a distant place,
And many will be the days,
You'll long to see her face.
Don't let those precious years,
Slip by until she's grown,
To take some time to cherish her,
And make your love well known.
For as you strive to love her,
The way God wants you to,
You'll build such precious memories,
That she'll show her love to you.
© Patricia Lawrence
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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You may copy and share it with your daughter. Congratulations to all.
Across The Room
When you look across the room,
And see your daughter smile,
Why not stop everything,
Just to play with her a while?
For all too soon the years,
May take her to a distant place,
And many will be the days,
You'll long to see her face.
Don't let those precious years,
Slip by until she's grown,
To take some time to cherish her,
And make your love well known.
For as you strive to love her,
The way God wants you to,
You'll build such precious memories,
That she'll show her love to you.
© Patricia Lawrence
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Thanks so much Pat for your poem. I am going to be presenting this one to her in a frame to put in our granddaughter's room if she wants to. After she gets mine. I will give her a copy of yours LOL I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Congratulations on your new grandchild! That is exciting! This poem is well-written and I have to agree with your Author's Notes that the bolding does properly effect the meter of the poem. Didn't know why they were bolded until I did read your notes, then, I went back for a second read and it was much smoother! Great job! Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Congratulations on your new grandchild! That is exciting! This poem is well-written and I have to agree with your Author's Notes that the bolding does properly effect the meter of the poem. Didn't know why they were bolded until I did read your notes, then, I went back for a second read and it was much smoother! Great job! Good luck in the contest. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
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You are so very welcome, dear. I enjoy reading others' works so much because I learn so much by doing so. In poetry, we seem to shed that skin which hides us from shame, embarrassment, and intimidation. I love to write poetry because of its ability to hide behind it and it is another personality that accepts or rejects the reviews. I will be fanning you to see how you progress (my secret method of stalking people without out-and-out just telling them I'm on their tail! lol) Look forward to reading more of your works.
God bless and hugs, Susanne
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I will attempt to get better! Please feel free to Help me along the way with corrections!
Embrace the love from above!
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I will fan you so I can watch you progress, if that's alright. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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I will provide honest and kind corrective critiques of anything you post. Glad to hear you are receptive to that...so many are NOT! God bless and hugs, Susanne
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Thanks again, so very much. I really do need to learn, even if it hurts. LOL
Embrace the love from above!
Comment from Galactia
Hi
When i read this, i thought it was based of a true story, felt so real, then as i went to review this poem, scrolled down to it saying writting prompt.
Lol now i feel silly, just read yoyr auther notes, so it was a girl. Congrates.
I thought your poem flowed really smoothly, no hick ups at all.
Great job
Regaeds
Tia
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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Hi
When i read this, i thought it was based of a true story, felt so real, then as i went to review this poem, scrolled down to it saying writting prompt.
Lol now i feel silly, just read yoyr auther notes, so it was a girl. Congrates.
I thought your poem flowed really smoothly, no hick ups at all.
Great job
Regaeds
Tia
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I really wasn't looking to write a poem when I saw the writer prompt, but I absolutely had to. LOL. , Our little granddaughter is due June 25, 2016. She weighs 7 lbs. 1 oz., according to the doctor. As of yesterday. That was free information that other people haven't gotten LOL. I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
This is an excellent entry for the contest! The artwork is fabulous and is a perfect complement to your poem. Fave line: "your home braced for giggles and whines". :) It is clearly conveyed to the reader that you are excited about the upcoming arrival of your first grandchild. How wonderful!
Best wishes for the contest!
Connie
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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This is an excellent entry for the contest! The artwork is fabulous and is a perfect complement to your poem. Fave line: "your home braced for giggles and whines". :) It is clearly conveyed to the reader that you are excited about the upcoming arrival of your first grandchild. How wonderful!
Best wishes for the contest!
Connie
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
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Hello Dr. Nad,
I think perhaps you have my review mistaken with someone else's. I didn't offer any "gentle words of correction".
Connie
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When I said this I guess I was making an assumption and an encouragement. Assumption: You might be so kind as to review my work in the future. Encouragement: Thanks for both support and gentle correction. Sorry for the confusion.
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem and excited grandparents who can't wait for that little bundle to make her appearance. It is not only the parents who are excited but the grandoarents too.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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A very well-written poem and excited grandparents who can't wait for that little bundle to make her appearance. It is not only the parents who are excited but the grandoarents too.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from ElegantButler
Oh how very true. And a wonderful poem. I love how it addresses the complications and trials of pregnancy, from the doctor suggesting surgery, which clearly wasn't needed to the task of mailing out letters. It's very well written.
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Oh how very true. And a wonderful poem. I love how it addresses the complications and trials of pregnancy, from the doctor suggesting surgery, which clearly wasn't needed to the task of mailing out letters. It's very well written.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
Comment from dragonpoet
These abcb quatrains seem to say that doctors said it was impossible for this woman to concieve. But faith let it happen. Did you find out the sex?
I don't understand why you bolded the words.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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These abcb quatrains seem to say that doctors said it was impossible for this woman to concieve. But faith let it happen. Did you find out the sex?
I don't understand why you bolded the words.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 10-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2016
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In your analysis was correct. The doctor did say she could not conceive. Brelynn is a little girl. Because of your statement about the bold words, I added an authors note to my poem. In essence, I said before I submitted this poem I had several people read it, and they seem to stumble over the flow. When I emboldened the words for them. First time readers did much better. In my reviews for the poem. I've been thanked for the folding of the words and also told I didn't need them. LOL thank you for the suggestion. I know my author notes helped. I must confess to you that writing is emotional for me. I have no idea why my writing is more emotional than most other areas of my life. As you may guess, Brelynn is more emotional to me than most of my writings! So it?s with a special sense of appreciation that I thank you for your wonderful five star review. It?s only been the last couple of years that I have attempted to write because I?ve never been encouraged to do so. I want to thank you so very much for your kind words of support, and the gentle words of correction. I need both to help make me the kind of writer with broad appeal. May God bless you! Your TEAMMATE in written communication .
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You're welcome. I am glad I could help without hurting. We are all TEAMMATES here.
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You did Help!
Embrace the love from above!