Shall I compare thee...
A cooler version of Shakespeare's Sonnet 1845 total reviews
Comment from rouskin
Shall I compare thee to a winter's eve? Thou art more frigid and more icy cold. Different seasons different reasons
different ages different wages .. Well done Blessings, Rouskin
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
Shall I compare thee to a winter's eve? Thou art more frigid and more icy cold. Different seasons different reasons
different ages different wages .. Well done Blessings, Rouskin
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from closetpoetjester
Oooh a fool for the Pyrite Princess I see. This was a superb parody Tony and thank you for including the proper version in the notes. I'm ashamed to say as a Sonnet lover I've NEVER actually read the real deal...heard it parodied many a time but wouldn't have known his ow'st from his grow'st. LOL
Your frigid display from an ice queen who likes to collect hearts like badges was thoroughly enjoyable.
LOVED it all but the closing couplet my absolute top shelf choice for phrasing. Well done and sorry NOT a sixer to speak of but this was damn terriff. May the bitch freeze in Hell. LOL Good luck with this new slant on an old favourite.
Cheers P
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
Oooh a fool for the Pyrite Princess I see. This was a superb parody Tony and thank you for including the proper version in the notes. I'm ashamed to say as a Sonnet lover I've NEVER actually read the real deal...heard it parodied many a time but wouldn't have known his ow'st from his grow'st. LOL
Your frigid display from an ice queen who likes to collect hearts like badges was thoroughly enjoyable.
LOVED it all but the closing couplet my absolute top shelf choice for phrasing. Well done and sorry NOT a sixer to speak of but this was damn terriff. May the bitch freeze in Hell. LOL Good luck with this new slant on an old favourite.
Cheers P
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Thanks P. A bit cheeky, aping the Bard! Glad it gave a moment or two of amusement. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Righteous Riter
Good use of the sonnet rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with cold/gold...love/dove. Good alliteration with does/dove...changes/course...like/lips...to/tempt. Good simile use with like lips vermillion...as light as snow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
Good use of the sonnet rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good perfect rhyming with cold/gold...love/dove. Good alliteration with does/dove...changes/course...like/lips...to/tempt. Good simile use with like lips vermillion...as light as snow. Good complimentary photo followed by a clear message.
Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!
Comment from Kenneth Schaal
I like the remake. This is what Bill's poem would have probably read written several months later. I am curious as to why you isolate the line, 'Rough winds do shake the autumn leaves.' It seems a natural enjambment into the following two lines. Kenny
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reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
I like the remake. This is what Bill's poem would have probably read written several months later. I am curious as to why you isolate the line, 'Rough winds do shake the autumn leaves.' It seems a natural enjambment into the following two lines. Kenny
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 16-Mar-2014
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Thanks, Kenny. I appreciate your review and comment. I used the short sentence here as a springboard into the enjambment, which leads into a much longer sentence spanning the next three lines.
Comment from akulkumol
Beautiful way of expressing one's internal beauty..one must have the sense realization to write a poem like this loved reading it thanks for sharing..
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reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
Beautiful way of expressing one's internal beauty..one must have the sense realization to write a poem like this loved reading it thanks for sharing..
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Comment Written 15-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2014
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Many thanks for your great comments and review. Appreciated!