Hurt Feelings
Words are like weapons48 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
Excellent contest entry and a nice subtle humor encased in your short poem. The art work fits your poem to a T. Good luck in the contest. Good conection to the 5 words, 7 words, very clever. Don and Vicki
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Excellent contest entry and a nice subtle humor encased in your short poem. The art work fits your poem to a T. Good luck in the contest. Good conection to the 5 words, 7 words, very clever. Don and Vicki
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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thank you for taking the time to read and review my work
Comment from amada
This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem. In a few well placed words the writer touches a heavy and very known subject. Well done. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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This is a very well written 5-7-5 poem. In a few well placed words the writer touches a heavy and very known subject. Well done. Best wishes.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you for such a nice review of my work
Comment from The Boy Whodunnit!
This is not only well written it also speaks truth.
A well thought out poem, and every word matters.
The first two lines flow and roll together really well. Each syllable moving smoothly to the next.
The third is a little bit more staccato, which gives quite a disjointed feeling against the other two. It really helps support the message and the truth that you speak. As a reader I think it makes you realise the damage that five or seven words can do. What is easily said in the first two lines, leaves a lasting impression on the child. The harshness of the reality really comes through in those last three words, as it is said so bluntly.
A great poem that means more than the actual words, the meaning is clear and it is structured well. One of the best I have read on here for a while.
Sorry this is a bit of a waffly review - hope it makes sense.
BW
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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This is not only well written it also speaks truth.
A well thought out poem, and every word matters.
The first two lines flow and roll together really well. Each syllable moving smoothly to the next.
The third is a little bit more staccato, which gives quite a disjointed feeling against the other two. It really helps support the message and the truth that you speak. As a reader I think it makes you realise the damage that five or seven words can do. What is easily said in the first two lines, leaves a lasting impression on the child. The harshness of the reality really comes through in those last three words, as it is said so bluntly.
A great poem that means more than the actual words, the meaning is clear and it is structured well. One of the best I have read on here for a while.
Sorry this is a bit of a waffly review - hope it makes sense.
BW
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for such a nice review of my work
Comment from kiwisteveh
I liked the way you have matched the five and seven to their respective lines, although I am still puzzling over whether the specific numbers mentioned are a strength or a weakness..
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I liked the way you have matched the five and seven to their respective lines, although I am still puzzling over whether the specific numbers mentioned are a strength or a weakness..
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for suck a kind review of my work
Comment from ennahanid
I wish you luck with your 5-7-5 contest entry. Sush a sweet yet sad looking baby to headline your thought-provoking words. It was a pleasure to read you this morning - Dinah
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I wish you luck with your 5-7-5 contest entry. Sush a sweet yet sad looking baby to headline your thought-provoking words. It was a pleasure to read you this morning - Dinah
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review
Comment from mumsyone
I seldom review 5-7-5 entries, but I like this one because it has so much truth in it. An excellent entry for the contest. Good luck in it.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I seldom review 5-7-5 entries, but I like this one because it has so much truth in it. An excellent entry for the contest. Good luck in it.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thanks so much for the kind review of my work
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way words can play a powerful role in shaping a child's future. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this poem about the way words can play a powerful role in shaping a child's future. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you so much for the kind review of my work
Comment from jadapenn
Correction, words are weapons, very sharp and dangerous weapons if used wrongly. They can't be retracted and can be the fine line between making and breaking a youngster. Your contest entry is strong in message and I wish you the best of luck. Well penned. luv jada
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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Correction, words are weapons, very sharp and dangerous weapons if used wrongly. They can't be retracted and can be the fine line between making and breaking a youngster. Your contest entry is strong in message and I wish you the best of luck. Well penned. luv jada
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Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Thank you for the kind review of my work