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Along the Jericho Road

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Murder Mystery

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Comment from joneau2
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Great story line ... very entertaining. Dialogue is superb and very realistic. You write very well. The tale held my interest from start to finish.

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Thanks so much, J2. I appreciate you reading my chapter and your excellent rating. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
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Hi Bev, wow the image of the rosary beads and inverted cross and the imagery you present is profound and real...frozen body and pictures on the wall in chronological ages resembling a detective...wow what is in that room...wow

THIS IS A CSI MASTERPIECE...I WANT MORE LOL :) BRAVO!

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Hi, Christopher. Thank you so much for continuing to support my story. I'm glad you liked the chapter, and I very much appreciate your insights and generous review. xx Bev
Comment from Sylvia Page
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Another good chapter. The Coroner is annoyed to be pulled away from a fine dinner. So is Dresden Stredwick, the FBI Profiler overseeing the case. The body found in the freezer points to the murder suspect's mother, but who knows. Good story so far. Well done.
Cheers
Sylvia

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Hi, Sylvia. Thank you for taking time to read my chapter! I appreciate your generosity and encouragement. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
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The body in the freezer in a shroud - so they don't know who it is?? There's no love lost between Stredwick and Derek, it seems.
Good for Derek, picking up on the fact the Agent had been drinking!!


He recognized the man(,) thanks to his distinctive cologne.



Great chapter, Bev - deserves a six, but I'm all out.

margaret

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Thank you so much, Margaret. I'm thrilled by your generosity and encouragement. Also, thanks for catching the need for that comma. I swear they'll be the death of me LOL. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Bev, dear, another fabulous chapter!

How neatly things are getting tied together and poising for the grand finale.

I'm dying to know which officer's face was in the pictures..

Here's to you, mistress of whodunnits!!

Hugs xxx

Sonali


He recognized the man(,) thanks to his distinctive cologne

call me(,) considering I'm in charge of this investigation

large figure blocking the doorway's entrance... how about .. blocking the doorway? (The doorway IS the entrance .. :))

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Dear Sonali. As always, great comments and insights. I think you're suggestion on the doorway is a good one. DUH!! I swear I'm dyslexic at times. Appreciate your generosity and encouragement, my friend. Hugs, Bev
Comment from Adri7enne
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Wow! Terrific chapter, Bev. Lots of tension. Things are really starting to heat up. Your characters are all acting true to form and their individual personalities are shining through the dialogues. Well done, girl. They're zoning in on the killer. Good show! Wish I had a 6. I used them all up like a drunken sailor on shore leave. Sigh!

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 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    HaHa... I know exactly what you mean, Adrienne. Well, this chapter shows the effects of your previous reviews where I really tried to keep my POV straight. I truly appreciate your continued support and generosity, my friend. :0) Bev
Comment from jadapenn
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Ooh, tension running high between Oleson and Stredwick. I love this story. All types of weird things going on in this room and of course, the body is probably that of the perp's mother. Time they closed in on this SOB.
Well written. Hope you are fine. luv jada

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 Comment Written 23-Jan-2014


reply by the author on 23-Jan-2014
    Hi, Jada! Thans for the awesome review! Weird things, indeed. Now they have a race on their hands...

    Hugs, Bev