Let's Love Today
a pantoum, that blew in on today's winter rains45 total reviews
Comment from mfowler
This is a very interesting format, and I think you've exploited the style through your evocative lines. It built seductively through your natural imagery, and ends with touching reflections on personal destinies. Lovely work!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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This is a very interesting format, and I think you've exploited the style through your evocative lines. It built seductively through your natural imagery, and ends with touching reflections on personal destinies. Lovely work!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Thx so much mf! I like this form, I must admit!
:)S
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Let's love today. Who knows what lies ahead? << Always a good excuse. LOL!
The line is blurred between the sea and sky. << THis can have several meanings. You've used nature well in this love poem. But then, why not? NOthing more natural than love. Sigh.... :)
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Let's love today. Who knows what lies ahead? << Always a good excuse. LOL!
The line is blurred between the sea and sky. << THis can have several meanings. You've used nature well in this love poem. But then, why not? NOthing more natural than love. Sigh.... :)
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Thanks so much Phyllis - I really like this form, though it can be a bit crazy-making to write ...
:)S
Comment from Sueellen11
Very well written,, a very nice poetry style chosen for your poem,,I like the formate of the pantoum ,,good rhyming thought out your poem,,you have presented your poem so very well and true to form,,,blessings sueellen
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Very well written,, a very nice poetry style chosen for your poem,,I like the formate of the pantoum ,,good rhyming thought out your poem,,you have presented your poem so very well and true to form,,,blessings sueellen
Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Bless you sueellen! So glad you enjoyed this one!
:)Sharyn
Comment from Tonulak
Ah...a carpe diem kind of gal;)
I liked how you mixed the natural elements with the personal desire in this lovely pantome. The repeating lines were very effective. Great job--Ted
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reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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Ah...a carpe diem kind of gal;)
I liked how you mixed the natural elements with the personal desire in this lovely pantome. The repeating lines were very effective. Great job--Ted
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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I am, Ted - always have been. Got it from my dad, who dropped dead at 59. Glad you enjoyed this one - I really like the 'pantoum' as a form.
:)S
Comment from Tina McKala
Oh, that opening and closing line!!! That was beautiful! Set and then closed the scene wonderfully. The repetition made sense, was not bothering or disturbing, very well written pantoum. Such a classy sultry ambiance :)
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Oh, that opening and closing line!!! That was beautiful! Set and then closed the scene wonderfully. The repetition made sense, was not bothering or disturbing, very well written pantoum. Such a classy sultry ambiance :)
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Comment Written 14-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2013
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thx so much Tina!! :)S
