Along the Jericho Road
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Comment from judiverse
Great job characterizing Danika. She sounds full of ambition and will do anything to get what she wants. Oh, oh, it sounds like Danika already knows information from the coroner's report on Fritz Buell. She must have all kinds of sources. Skeets makes a good point about panicked people might shoot first and ask questions later. Dialogue is handled well in this. Good job of showing the atmosphere of McGuffin's. Definitely 6 star work! judi
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Great job characterizing Danika. She sounds full of ambition and will do anything to get what she wants. Oh, oh, it sounds like Danika already knows information from the coroner's report on Fritz Buell. She must have all kinds of sources. Skeets makes a good point about panicked people might shoot first and ask questions later. Dialogue is handled well in this. Good job of showing the atmosphere of McGuffin's. Definitely 6 star work! judi
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Judi, I thank you for your exceptional rating. I'm always pleased when you enjoy my chapters. And I do appreciate how you've faithfully kept up with my chapters. This one sort of had a mind of its own. Glad it came out okay LOL. :0) Bev
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You're so welcome. I've been waiting for it! judi
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Aw, thanks so much, judi. xx
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You're so welcome. I can just see Danika throwing her weight around to get information for a story. judi
Comment from Quillian
I liked the dialogue between these two hard boiled professionals. I just don't know about that Danika, she's a tough cookie! You write with confidence and knowledge of your subject. Well done!
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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I liked the dialogue between these two hard boiled professionals. I just don't know about that Danika, she's a tough cookie! You write with confidence and knowledge of your subject. Well done!
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much, Quillian. I really appreciate you stopping into read and for sending along this gracious review. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where skeets makes a deal with the newspaper reporter. i enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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this is very well written, writingfundimension, you did an excellent job writing this chapter where skeets makes a deal with the newspaper reporter. i enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks so much, Sweet. I much appreciate your support. :0) Bev
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You are moving this novel at a good pace. I am afraid mine might be dragging out, because I post so short. Anyway, this post is another good addition.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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You are moving this novel at a good pace. I am afraid mine might be dragging out, because I post so short. Anyway, this post is another good addition.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Barbara, thank you so much. I don't feel that way about your novel at all. :0) Bev
Comment from JB Lynn
"I can feel the grease in the air congealing on my skin." - Love this description, and even better that we got it in a piece of dialogue.
"They watch television more than the average." - the average what? I know what she's talking about, but I think you need one more word here.
I love the tension between Skeets and Danika! You've done a superb job with their dialogue and this was a quick read for me. Thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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"I can feel the grease in the air congealing on my skin." - Love this description, and even better that we got it in a piece of dialogue.
"They watch television more than the average." - the average what? I know what she's talking about, but I think you need one more word here.
I love the tension between Skeets and Danika! You've done a superb job with their dialogue and this was a quick read for me. Thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hi, JB. Yes, I think you are absolutely correct about that sentence. Thanks so much for your generous and helpful review.
Warm regards, Bev
Comment from MM lives on :)
Writingfundimension indeed you are one writer on this site that never disappoints.. This made for one hell of a read through and through.. Thanks for the cast of characters and thank you for sharing always a great pleasure to read and review your fine writing..
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Writingfundimension indeed you are one writer on this site that never disappoints.. This made for one hell of a read through and through.. Thanks for the cast of characters and thank you for sharing always a great pleasure to read and review your fine writing..
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Hello, Christopher. You have put a great big smile on my face with your very gracious and generous review. I can't say when a review touched me this much. I so appreciate your hanging in with my novel. Warmest regards, Bev
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Most welcome my friend :)
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