Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "SICA MOON"Murder Mystery
52 total reviews
Comment from judiverse
This is really great. I like the way the Sheriff and his detectives are so involved in the case. They are very alert and competent. A clever little aside about the scones. It serves to lighten things up a bit. The stranger seen in the hospital has become a person of interest. Although he has a way of vanishing very quickly. Jana recognizes the tattoo she sees in the sketch of the man. Will be waiting to see what develops next and how Father Brian is going to help supply motive. Very interesting! judi
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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This is really great. I like the way the Sheriff and his detectives are so involved in the case. They are very alert and competent. A clever little aside about the scones. It serves to lighten things up a bit. The stranger seen in the hospital has become a person of interest. Although he has a way of vanishing very quickly. Jana recognizes the tattoo she sees in the sketch of the man. Will be waiting to see what develops next and how Father Brian is going to help supply motive. Very interesting! judi
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you much, judi, my faithful friend! I always appreciate getting your insights and perspective. Much appreciate. Hugs, Bev
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You're welcome, and it's my reading pleasure. judi
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh don't apologize for the large type, it saves eyestrain in we old farts (kidding - I'm not that old, just need reading glasses, so this IS a treat)
Well, you did it again! You have posted mid-week and I am out of sixes! Damn! (I think the thirty days should be up by now, but I'm not sure) Anyway, I guess that tells you what I think of this chapter, Bev - it is fabulous! I feel as if I am right there, INSIDE the story. Superior writing, all the way! It has everything it takes- narrative voice, pacing, suspense, authentic characters, lots and lots of plot action - I loved it! TEN stars!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Oh don't apologize for the large type, it saves eyestrain in we old farts (kidding - I'm not that old, just need reading glasses, so this IS a treat)
Well, you did it again! You have posted mid-week and I am out of sixes! Damn! (I think the thirty days should be up by now, but I'm not sure) Anyway, I guess that tells you what I think of this chapter, Bev - it is fabulous! I feel as if I am right there, INSIDE the story. Superior writing, all the way! It has everything it takes- narrative voice, pacing, suspense, authentic characters, lots and lots of plot action - I loved it! TEN stars!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Hi, Dawn. Your words of support are worth a hundred stars to me. Thank you so very much, my friend. Your loyalty is invaluable! Hugs, Bev
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Yes, well, that's all good, I am glad, but I really DID try to save one, and I have to try again for next week! Sheesh, I AM sorry my friend.
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You sure don't have to apologize for an excellent rating, Dawn. I do appreciate the thought, though. That's really kind of you. Xxx Bev
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I just want you to know how much I really think of your chapter - it is really, really good!!!
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Dawn, coming from a writer whose many skills I respect, that's really an honor. Thanks so much, my friend.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Us older folks don't mind the large type at all. Makes for easy reading of your excellent chapter. I'm eager to read more.
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Us older folks don't mind the large type at all. Makes for easy reading of your excellent chapter. I'm eager to read more.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you much, my friend. I really appreciate the generous review and your words of support. Glad the print didn't put you off. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from mizzkris20
I love the large print! i could enjoy the story
better this way. I didn't have to strain my eyes
to see it.....Awesome story. good job with this
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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I love the large print! i could enjoy the story
better this way. I didn't have to strain my eyes
to see it.....Awesome story. good job with this
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Hello, mizzkris. I'm glad the large type didn't put you off. Thank you much for taking time to read and for your generous review! Warm regards, Bev
Comment from Realist101
Hi Bev! Most intriguing! I found your dialogue so real and made the chapter flow just like life. And I was in an elevator not long ago and it 'stuck'. It started again, and that makes me believe someone was messing with it. I use the stairs now. I also like this ending. Very compelling! Luv, Susan
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Hi Bev! Most intriguing! I found your dialogue so real and made the chapter flow just like life. And I was in an elevator not long ago and it 'stuck'. It started again, and that makes me believe someone was messing with it. I use the stairs now. I also like this ending. Very compelling! Luv, Susan
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Hi, Susan. Thank you, my friend, for your awesome review! I so appreciate your words of support for this chapter. Great hearing from you! Love, Bev
Comment from AprilShower
Very interesting, Bev. I am anxious to read more. I felt like I was there at the hospital with them. The big print is nice really. I enjoyed reading this. Looks like the man may have shown up.
April
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Very interesting, Bev. I am anxious to read more. I felt like I was there at the hospital with them. The big print is nice really. I enjoyed reading this. Looks like the man may have shown up.
April
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much, April. I do so appreciate your continued interest in my story. I'm planning to post closer together. It's hard for folks to follow the story when I take so long between chapters LOL. Hugs, Bev
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You're welcome, Bev.
Hugs,
April
Comment from DALLAS01
I personally do not mind the large print. This is a great chapter encompassing a lot of significant motion that moves it forward. Love the way you slipped in the mysterious character in Jana's visions. Just one sentence that threw me off balance:
The elevator bell brought both their faces forward.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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I personally do not mind the large print. This is a great chapter encompassing a lot of significant motion that moves it forward. Love the way you slipped in the mysterious character in Jana's visions. Just one sentence that threw me off balance:
The elevator bell brought both their faces forward.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Hi, Dallas. Thanks so much for the great review. I think you are right about that line and have changed it. Appreciate the interest and great support! Warm regards, Bev
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You're welcome.
Comment from Cumbrianlass
A virtual sixer for this superb post.
You set a scene with such clarity, Bev. I'm right there with Derek. I even cringed at the elevator fart! Yeah - thanks for that. LOL!
Realistic dialogue only adds to the professional authenticity of your writing. The tension in the hospital, and still a wee sprinkling of humour.
It's fabulous, Bev.
Great hook at the end. You just keep on dangling that bait and reeling us in!
Excellent post. Always looking forward to the next.
Love Av
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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A virtual sixer for this superb post.
You set a scene with such clarity, Bev. I'm right there with Derek. I even cringed at the elevator fart! Yeah - thanks for that. LOL!
Realistic dialogue only adds to the professional authenticity of your writing. The tension in the hospital, and still a wee sprinkling of humour.
It's fabulous, Bev.
Great hook at the end. You just keep on dangling that bait and reeling us in!
Excellent post. Always looking forward to the next.
Love Av
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Av, you have put me over the moon with this awesome review. I so appreciate all the supportive insights you've shared with me. That's worth a million stars to me. You are so kind! Hugs, Bev
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You rock, woman.
xxx
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Aw, thanks, buddy. XXooo Bev
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Well, if you ever want to get into a discussion about support...
I sure do value yours, my friend.
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An honor, Av. :0)
Comment from Curtis Hatch
The story is interesting and a grabber from the first paragraph. The storyline is compelling and realistic. The characters are convincing and believable. The dialogue between the detectives providing protection for Mr. Eisner is interesting. It is a good read and the narrative flow well.
Well done,
Curtis
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The story is interesting and a grabber from the first paragraph. The storyline is compelling and realistic. The characters are convincing and believable. The dialogue between the detectives providing protection for Mr. Eisner is interesting. It is a good read and the narrative flow well.
Well done,
Curtis
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Thanks for the extensive and supportive review, Curtis. I appreciate such compliments from a writer of your caliber. Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from Cornelius2000
My 78 year-old eyes were glad to have the LARGE TYPE....now I'm missing it! This is a good story, well told, with especially good dialogue writing. It all sounds very natural. The touch of self deprecating donut humor is welcome amidst all the serious talk about the case. Well done.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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My 78 year-old eyes were glad to have the LARGE TYPE....now I'm missing it! This is a good story, well told, with especially good dialogue writing. It all sounds very natural. The touch of self deprecating donut humor is welcome amidst all the serious talk about the case. Well done.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2012
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Hi, Dave. I'm glad you didn't find the print annoying. And thank you so very much for this wonderfully generous review. I appreciate the specifics, always so helpful. Warmest regards, Bev