Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I love that song! How old is it? Perfect for your chilling verse in which you've morphed into a lunatic they're coming to take away:) You know I'll be singing this for the rest of the day and smiling as I think of you acting out your charade:) A wonderful entry for the club! Love Debbie

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Debbie, that is so funny you asked. I had to go look as I forgot and it was done in 1966.
I realize that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song.
So as soon as I heard the prompt, the song popped in my head. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. I guess you knew that. LOL..
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend! Love, Debi

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This four-line poem suite, Breaking Out, has the proper formatting and allows the voice of the committed screaming against the forces which are assembled against his/her rebellion.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Thanks Bill for the awesome review and comments. So appreciated, my friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Well if I wasn't scared before, I am certainly scared now Debi and often when we are admitted to a mental institution we have no means of escape! Ha ha ha, I enjoyed your tongue in cheek drama here, love Dolly x x x x

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Dolly, thank you so very much for the wonderful review and comments.

Truthfully, I was just trying to be funny with it. As soon as I saw the prompt I thought of that song (which reminded me of the asylum) and I remembered it from my childhood and nothing else would do. LOL..

So thanks again, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

Your poem has such a tense energy that really draws me in. The whole thing feel like a intense ride through emotions. I love how each stanza brings a new layer of drama. I couldn't help but get pulled into your world. Keep up the great work!

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Michael, I realize that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So as soon as I read the prompt, the song popped in my head. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. I guess you already knew that. LOL..
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend! Love, Debi

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good artwork and nice presentation, Debi.
-You did a good job with the prompt.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-A very good opening verse, followed
by feelings of fear and what could happen.
-Very good concluding verses, as well.
-The poem flows well from verse to verse.


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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hi Pam, thanks for all the awesome remarks. I realize that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So as soon as I read the prompt, the song popped in my head. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. I guess you already knew that. LOL..
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend! Love, Debi

reply by Pam (respa) on 02-Apr-2025

You are welcome for the review, Debi. Thanks for sharing about the poem. I am familiar with the song, but didn't make the connection until reading this. I think it's good to do something fun, and that is the main thing.

Comment from Begin Again

Excellent

I immediately had "They are coming to take me away - ha ha" marching through my cob-webbed brain...and it will probably be stuck there all day. Cute and well written poem, my dear. Thank you for sharing as always.
Smiles, Carol

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 Comment Written 31-Mar-2025

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2025

Hahaha, Carol, you too? I realize that not everyone knew that song and so they wouldn't see the humor in it. But so glad that you got it from the beginning.

The reason I did this prompt in the first place was because I grew up with that song. So as soon as I read the prompt, the song popped in my head. So I had that on my mind while writing so it would end with the song. Otherwise this is so not me at all. I guess you already knew that. LOL..
Thanks for the kind review and comments, my dear friend! Love, Debi

reply by Begin Again on 02-Apr-2025

You did an excellent job, Debi and of course after reading this again this morning, I am humming the song again. LOL