Approaching Storms
a Kyrielle poetic form46 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Hey. Here's an idea take this and forward to your local meteorologist and have them read it as a forecast when rain is nearby. Maybe... they'll get ONE forecast right. OUrs can't.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hey. Here's an idea take this and forward to your local meteorologist and have them read it as a forecast when rain is nearby. Maybe... they'll get ONE forecast right. OUrs can't.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Tom. Haha, that is cute. Thanks for the fun review.
Melissa
Comment from damommy
Very good! I good see and hear everything as you described in beautifully worded rhyming lines. Good meter and rhyme. We had a storm like that yesterday.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Very good! I good see and hear everything as you described in beautifully worded rhyming lines. Good meter and rhyme. We had a storm like that yesterday.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Yvonne. Thanks. I heard from my Dad in Bryant that you all had a big storm. I guess it will get to Virginia in a few days... we always seem to run two days later. So glad you liked this Kyrielle.
Melissa
Comment from mermaids
There is a musical feel and flow to your words. You also have a vivid use of words in which the reader can see and feel the oncoming storm. "The boiling clouds can't hold the strain" is a perfect line that shows nature in action.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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There is a musical feel and flow to your words. You also have a vivid use of words in which the reader can see and feel the oncoming storm. "The boiling clouds can't hold the strain" is a perfect line that shows nature in action.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thanks so much! I am glad you could feel the tension (my aim for this piece) in the words. I appreciate your comments and thoughts.
Melissa
Comment from Carlos' girl
Dear author: this is a Great poem following the given format perfectly. Some great verses in there with fine imagery. Very good work. I especially like the last paragraph. So visual.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Dear author: this is a Great poem following the given format perfectly. Some great verses in there with fine imagery. Very good work. I especially like the last paragraph. So visual.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments. I'm delighted you liked it. :)
Melissa
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I really enjoyed this
Comment from lyenochka
Wow! I can feeling the storm approaching! You always do such a spectacular job of describing rainstorms and this one is full of suspense. You used the repeated line to build that suspense from the silence to "White lances flash ~ flung from the sky;
and cracks of thunder shake on high.
The boiling clouds can't hold the strain..."
Virtual six!!
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Wow! I can feeling the storm approaching! You always do such a spectacular job of describing rainstorms and this one is full of suspense. You used the repeated line to build that suspense from the silence to "White lances flash ~ flung from the sky;
and cracks of thunder shake on high.
The boiling clouds can't hold the strain..."
Virtual six!!
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Hi Helen. I am grinning with delight that you liked the Kyrielle. It's been a while and I hoped I did ok... you wouldn't believe the editing and re-editing that I had to do to make sure I got out the glitches... like I said, it's been a while... thanks sweet friend.
Melissa
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💖💖You are a fabulous nature poet, Melissa!
Comment from Ulla
Oh, Melissa, How I enjoyed this poem. I could hear and visualise the storm approaching through your descriptive words. How well written your Kyrielle is written. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Oh, Melissa, How I enjoyed this poem. I could hear and visualise the storm approaching through your descriptive words. How well written your Kyrielle is written. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2022
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Oh thanks so much, Ulla.... I am so delighted you liked it... its been a while since I've written and I hoped I could still make a coherent poem. Hugs, sweet friend.
Melissa
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Oh you've done very well. I'm so glad to seeing you back. Hugs back. X