Russian Roulette
A short story36 total reviews
Comment from roof35
This, indeed, a long story. It is also a very well written story and a fun read. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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This, indeed, a long story. It is also a very well written story and a fun read. Your illustration, of course, pairs perfectly and sets the stage for your words. Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you, Roof. I appreciate your review and supportive comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Supe
This a very compelling story and I could not find one thing to edit in it. Your characters came to life on the page. It moved along with great descriptive passages and flowed from start to finish. I enjoyed it immensely. Nicely done!!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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This a very compelling story and I could not find one thing to edit in it. Your characters came to life on the page. It moved along with great descriptive passages and flowed from start to finish. I enjoyed it immensely. Nicely done!!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thank you very much, Supe, for your most affirming comments and the award of a sixth star. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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you are welcome.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oops, poor Russians another bad thing to take over:) but you are right even Pushkin talks about this in one of its poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Oops, poor Russians another bad thing to take over:) but you are right even Pushkin talks about this in one of its poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thanks very much, Iza. I appreciate your review and comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from damommy
Fascinating. I think the Major told the life he wished he'd led. As it says in the ending, Fletcher and Evans are common names. I don't think he was a good subject to be around classrooms with his gun like that, but boys like stories like his.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Fascinating. I think the Major told the life he wished he'd led. As it says in the ending, Fletcher and Evans are common names. I don't think he was a good subject to be around classrooms with his gun like that, but boys like stories like his.
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Yvonne. I appreciate your review and comments. This was set in the immediate post-war years. I doubt he'd have got away with bringing a gun into the classroom these days! All good wishes, Tony
Comment from pome lover
so it was Evans' grandfather who was the last survivor and died, and Evans knew the reason? Or that is the assumption for the reader.
I was entranced by the writing at the beginning and then as it progressed, became wary of disaster which I was glad to see did not occur.
The story did become long, but that was the point for this "long story long" event, I take it. Very good.
pome lover
just saw who wrote this - no wonder I was entranced.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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so it was Evans' grandfather who was the last survivor and died, and Evans knew the reason? Or that is the assumption for the reader.
I was entranced by the writing at the beginning and then as it progressed, became wary of disaster which I was glad to see did not occur.
The story did become long, but that was the point for this "long story long" event, I take it. Very good.
pome lover
just saw who wrote this - no wonder I was entranced.
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Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thanks very much for your review and comments, Katharine. Much appreciated. I deliberately left some elements open. Different readers have brought different interpretations to the story. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from phill doran
Ah Tony!
A ripping yarn. I had a similar experience by proxy when someone in the office next to me (many years ago) blew out a window with a shot from a rifle, which was claimed to be (and I assume thought to be) unloaded. I only heard the bang and the shattering of glass - although the tell-tale smell of fear hung heavy in the corridors...
An effortless read, wonderfully described characters and fluent scene setting - "I-was-there" in a few deft strokes. Oh, and "...the enthusiasm of two toads about to be kissed...." wonderful. I will steal that one.
Not being flush, I can only reciprocate with stars - but know that I enjoyed this and the effort you put into making it all look and read 'effortless' is noted, and envied.
I wish you well...
cheers
phill
"...bay window and the rosebed..." (rose bed, two words?)
"...in their stride (comma) and they all set off..."
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Ah Tony!
A ripping yarn. I had a similar experience by proxy when someone in the office next to me (many years ago) blew out a window with a shot from a rifle, which was claimed to be (and I assume thought to be) unloaded. I only heard the bang and the shattering of glass - although the tell-tale smell of fear hung heavy in the corridors...
An effortless read, wonderfully described characters and fluent scene setting - "I-was-there" in a few deft strokes. Oh, and "...the enthusiasm of two toads about to be kissed...." wonderful. I will steal that one.
Not being flush, I can only reciprocate with stars - but know that I enjoyed this and the effort you put into making it all look and read 'effortless' is noted, and envied.
I wish you well...
cheers
phill
"...bay window and the rosebed..." (rose bed, two words?)
"...in their stride (comma) and they all set off..."
Comment Written 16-Sep-2020
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2020
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Thanks, Phill. I appreciate that sixth star. Most affirming. Glad this one worked for you. Although the characters have been transformed beyond any possible recognition, the incidents described here are loosely based on a school where I taught in the early 1960s.
Thanks for your suggestions. I've added the comma but left 'rosebeds' as is.