A Cup of Sugar
A little sweetness in difficult times.35 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Marked a script, but it is not one.
Conjures up pleasant memories, but full of run-on sentences throughout.
corona virus should be one word.
In the third paragraph is "ramp" supposed to be romp?
Tense change from present to past in next to last paragraph.
Also in that same paragraph, the "wall" before wallpaper unnecessary.
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that offers assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Marked a script, but it is not one.
Conjures up pleasant memories, but full of run-on sentences throughout.
corona virus should be one word.
In the third paragraph is "ramp" supposed to be romp?
Tense change from present to past in next to last paragraph.
Also in that same paragraph, the "wall" before wallpaper unnecessary.
My reviews are mere suggestions. Feel free to use anything that offers assistance and/or chuck the whole shebang.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, dear reviewer.
Comment from Kenia Suarez
Excellent story. I like the subject matter, the way it flows and your choice of words when describing things. I also miss the social times, but, they will come back. Good luck.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Excellent story. I like the subject matter, the way it flows and your choice of words when describing things. I also miss the social times, but, they will come back. Good luck.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Kenia, for reading and commenting in my work.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
I really like this. It's a reminder of friendlier and more social times that have gone by during this crisis. Hope holds on to them believing that such times will come again. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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I really like this. It's a reminder of friendlier and more social times that have gone by during this crisis. Hope holds on to them believing that such times will come again. Thanks for sharing this inspirational and well written work. Well done!
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you, Jeffrey for reading this work and for your own thoughta and ideas about those times of friendly free walks.
Comment from country ranch writer
Life used to hold meaning when one could chat with your neighbors and make friends along the using the saying can I borrow a cup of coffee.miss the good ole days.
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Life used to hold meaning when one could chat with your neighbors and make friends along the using the saying can I borrow a cup of coffee.miss the good ole days.
Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you so much for commenting in this work.
Comment from Ash.writer
Love the title of your poem. Quite a positive way of looking at things during a chaos. Love how descriptive your poem is about everything. It drew a nice picture and setting for me when I read it. Thank you.
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reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Love the title of your poem. Quite a positive way of looking at things during a chaos. Love how descriptive your poem is about everything. It drew a nice picture and setting for me when I read it. Thank you.
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Comment Written 07-May-2020
reply by the author on 20-May-2020
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Thank you for reading my work.