Lessons in the Key of Life
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Punctuality at All Costs"A music and dance teacher's improvization
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Comment from Colin John
Ok you bad girl you don't deserve 6 stars but it was just the best bloody story I have read in here , I wish i could give you more , ok , the copper I like but the fireman are no more than Red Devils and wish I had been there , who put the hose in the road anyway . And you get a plus for thinking of your daughter with her new plates . I should add it's just the sort of thing I would do and loved the happy smell prelude to the moment of desperation .
Red Devils are an air display team famous in the UK , so I did not mean as in Devils to the fireman who do a great job . I have a story as bad as that but could not tell as my children do not know ! Thanks for this embarrassing episode of your life with bad icky everybody lol xxx
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Ok you bad girl you don't deserve 6 stars but it was just the best bloody story I have read in here , I wish i could give you more , ok , the copper I like but the fireman are no more than Red Devils and wish I had been there , who put the hose in the road anyway . And you get a plus for thinking of your daughter with her new plates . I should add it's just the sort of thing I would do and loved the happy smell prelude to the moment of desperation .
Red Devils are an air display team famous in the UK , so I did not mean as in Devils to the fireman who do a great job . I have a story as bad as that but could not tell as my children do not know ! Thanks for this embarrassing episode of your life with bad icky everybody lol xxx
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Hahahaha. This review made it all better and easier to handle. Thank you, Colin! (Maybe you can private-message me your episode. I'm a vault. I would never tell your family!) xo
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Ha ha , chance s gone thing , but maybe some time lol
It's bad bad , but I guess the Gs were on my side xx
I was fixated smith your story xx
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xo
Comment from LisaMay
What a tale of going from bad to worse. Those cops must get lots of practice being patient... as does Bobby, too, I assume! This is so entertainingly told with lovely touches of self-deprecation and humor; those gawking bystanders, just pleased it isn't them making twits of themselves.
Did you have to pay for the fire-hose to be fixed?
Comments about the story:
I think there's one drink too many in the first paragraph:
'drinking in the sight of vibrant bursts'
and
'drank in the beauty of the Spring sky'
'driving with the fire hose between the left and right sides of my car's undercarriage'
... This sounds like an overly-complicated way of saying:
'Oddly enough, straddling the fire hose with my car seemed like the perfect solution.'
I love this description: 'keening sounds like a chihuahua in a mouse trap'.
(This time, though, I at least had the dignity to repeat the nugget about her birthday.)... I think it would have been more dignified to NOT repeat that nugget!
I do like that 'screw you' symbolism of the hardware that had secured the expired plates.
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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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What a tale of going from bad to worse. Those cops must get lots of practice being patient... as does Bobby, too, I assume! This is so entertainingly told with lovely touches of self-deprecation and humor; those gawking bystanders, just pleased it isn't them making twits of themselves.
Did you have to pay for the fire-hose to be fixed?
Comments about the story:
I think there's one drink too many in the first paragraph:
'drinking in the sight of vibrant bursts'
and
'drank in the beauty of the Spring sky'
'driving with the fire hose between the left and right sides of my car's undercarriage'
... This sounds like an overly-complicated way of saying:
'Oddly enough, straddling the fire hose with my car seemed like the perfect solution.'
I love this description: 'keening sounds like a chihuahua in a mouse trap'.
(This time, though, I at least had the dignity to repeat the nugget about her birthday.)... I think it would have been more dignified to NOT repeat that nugget!
I do like that 'screw you' symbolism of the hardware that had secured the expired plates.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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These are all great suggestions, LisaMay! Thank you for them all, and I will edit accordingly when I'm done replying to all the review. Thank you, Sis, for having my back. xo
Comment from Carla Trinklein
Oh my! If it's any consolation, I've decided the worst days of our lives very often make the best stories, and this story is proof of that. You've found the humor in the situation and made me laugh. That is an amazing feat! All three of my kids take piano lessons, but we go to the piano teacher's house for lessons! Maybe you might consider going that route in future...anyway, what a great story!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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Oh my! If it's any consolation, I've decided the worst days of our lives very often make the best stories, and this story is proof of that. You've found the humor in the situation and made me laugh. That is an amazing feat! All three of my kids take piano lessons, but we go to the piano teacher's house for lessons! Maybe you might consider going that route in future...anyway, what a great story!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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That reminds me of when I told a young student of mine that, when I was her age, I used to go to my piano teacher's house for my lessons. She nodded and said, "Yes, that's the way it was done in The Olden Days."
Anyway, you're right, Carla, that the worst days make for the best stories. I think, in my case, G-d figured as long as He gave me a sense of humor, the least He could do is given me lots of opportunities to use it!
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And use it you do!!
Comment from JudyE
What an awful scenario you painted so vividly! I would have been beside myself twice removed. No wonder you needed copious amounts of wine. I would have been drinking from the bottle! And isn't it funny how people can be so sanctimonious when it is someone else who has done something a bit ... well, silly?
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What an awful scenario you painted so vividly! I would have been beside myself twice removed. No wonder you needed copious amounts of wine. I would have been drinking from the bottle! And isn't it funny how people can be so sanctimonious when it is someone else who has done something a bit ... well, silly?
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2019
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SO very true!