Charlie's fence
Story about Charlie in rhyme38 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I enjoyed this lovely story about Charlie, the undoubted hero. 6th line should have 'though(t)' You have cleverly introduced rhyme which makes it sing along like the canter of a horse. You've also done the job of endearing Charlie to the reader. So well done! Debbie
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I enjoyed this lovely story about Charlie, the undoubted hero. 6th line should have 'though(t)' You have cleverly introduced rhyme which makes it sing along like the canter of a horse. You've also done the job of endearing Charlie to the reader. So well done! Debbie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from JSD
Aww. A touching and moving little story, immaculately written in rhyme and rhythm. I'm impressed at the way you have sustained this across its length. A proper piece of Americana.
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Aww. A touching and moving little story, immaculately written in rhyme and rhythm. I'm impressed at the way you have sustained this across its length. A proper piece of Americana.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Ben Colder
Yep, old Charlie has seen his day, but I would bet he could still hold his own with them city slickers. Fence or no fence. I think we all are like Charlie when it comes to straddling fences. Good write.
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Yep, old Charlie has seen his day, but I would bet he could still hold his own with them city slickers. Fence or no fence. I think we all are like Charlie when it comes to straddling fences. Good write.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from royowen
Cowboys were my heroes when I was very young, when I grew up, it became an obsessive hero worship of super-heroes, then there sporting heroes, now it's God, surely an unreachable goal, but a worthwhile goal nevertheless, well done Willie, , blessing
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Cowboys were my heroes when I was very young, when I grew up, it became an obsessive hero worship of super-heroes, then there sporting heroes, now it's God, surely an unreachable goal, but a worthwhile goal nevertheless, well done Willie, , blessing
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
Comment from Douglas Goff
Great story Willie. It is definitely a passing area and made me wonder if there are any old cowboys left.
The Old West sure could capture the imaginations of young boys, I mean who didn't want to be Wyatt Earp at one point?
Good piece of work.
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Great story Willie. It is definitely a passing area and made me wonder if there are any old cowboys left.
The Old West sure could capture the imaginations of young boys, I mean who didn't want to be Wyatt Earp at one point?
Good piece of work.
D
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Cowboys unfortunately grow old! But you wrote a good story about Charlie and his horse here, the rodeo is impossible in old age, too dangerous! Love Dolly x
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Cowboys unfortunately grow old! But you wrote a good story about Charlie and his horse here, the rodeo is impossible in old age, too dangerous! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
Comment from Beri Bee
This is wonderful! The first few lines and the rhyming of "fence" and "since" set the tone for an ode or yarn in cowboy cadence. I'm glad you wrote a story/poem for this because it really works. I love Charlie's fence. It has more than one meaning, and that's a great bonus!
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This is wonderful! The first few lines and the rhyming of "fence" and "since" set the tone for an ode or yarn in cowboy cadence. I'm glad you wrote a story/poem for this because it really works. I love Charlie's fence. It has more than one meaning, and that's a great bonus!
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
Comment from nor84
I wanted to give you a heads-up. You may want to rewrite this, because the contest rules ask specifically for story and there doesn't seem to be a provision for poetry.
The rules: Write a story that begins with the line: The last time I saw Charlie ... (continue the sentence and story)
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I wanted to give you a heads-up. You may want to rewrite this, because the contest rules ask specifically for story and there doesn't seem to be a provision for poetry.
The rules: Write a story that begins with the line: The last time I saw Charlie ... (continue the sentence and story)
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Comment Written 24-Apr-2019
