This Time - That Time 3
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Time Is Running Out!"Third book in the time travel trilogy
40 total reviews
Comment from susand3022
Hi Sandra... I don't know what's happening here... I missed a bit of it. But it seems as if we've gone into the past and we're saving people! Danger Will Robinson... Danger!!! Unknown timeline event changes in the works!!! :o
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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Hi Sandra... I don't know what's happening here... I missed a bit of it. But it seems as if we've gone into the past and we're saving people! Danger Will Robinson... Danger!!! Unknown timeline event changes in the works!!! :o
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
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LOL, I remember that series, it goes back hundreds of years!!! lol. Thank you so much, Susan. They are in the year 1915 and the Zeppelins are about to bomb the hospital. They don't have much time to get the people out... :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm sure they'll get all the patients to safety just in the nick of time. Will Mildred be a heroine? Will anyone know her part in it? I like the giant rats... nice touch. The tunnel must lead to the outside somewhere, because the rats have to eat... a lot, apparently, being so big. :)
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I'm sure they'll get all the patients to safety just in the nick of time. Will Mildred be a heroine? Will anyone know her part in it? I like the giant rats... nice touch. The tunnel must lead to the outside somewhere, because the rats have to eat... a lot, apparently, being so big. :)
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I hate rats, but I'm sure they would have had some down there. Gives me the willies just thinking about them. Thanks, my friend, for the lovely review. Mildred, a heroine? I can just imagine her reaction. I've got to go and jot them down! lol. Good night, my friend, I'm off to bed now. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Sandra!
Once again, I am fascinated by the plot and dialogue of your well-crafted story. Wouldn't it be wonderful to see your story acted out - as in a televised series? Well-paced and just the right amount of mystery. Love your characterizations.
Just an excellent read on another freezing early evening in northern Michigan!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Hello Sandra!
Once again, I am fascinated by the plot and dialogue of your well-crafted story. Wouldn't it be wonderful to see your story acted out - as in a televised series? Well-paced and just the right amount of mystery. Love your characterizations.
Just an excellent read on another freezing early evening in northern Michigan!
Thank you for sharing!
diane
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Goodness, I don't know what I'd do! lol, I'd be wondering who would play Mildred. That is such a nice thing to say, Diane, thank you. lol. Now I'm off to bed with a smile on my face. It's freezing cold here, too. And past my bedtime. Thanks for this lovely review, my friend. I'm really pleased we have fanned each other. Good night. :)) Sandra xxx
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Sleep well, Sandra!
diane
Comment from TheStoryMan
Another well written chapter. I didn't see any typos or spelling or grammar errors. It was an interesting chapter, it kept my interest. Finally, they have a plan.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Another well written chapter. I didn't see any typos or spelling or grammar errors. It was an interesting chapter, it kept my interest. Finally, they have a plan.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much. Yes, now if they can get the patients to safety they'll be able to get started on the job they are really there for. Time will tell. Thanks again, my friend. :) Sandra xx.
Comment from Rob Caudle
No sixes I'm afraid but another super piece of writing. Loved the rats bit. Again you have given us no choice but to read on. Mildred is such a great character. You create a very believable story regardless of the readers opinion of time travel . Your work has the reader easily suspending disbelief because of your ability to create realism in your words. As always Sandra just loved it.
Rob
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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No sixes I'm afraid but another super piece of writing. Loved the rats bit. Again you have given us no choice but to read on. Mildred is such a great character. You create a very believable story regardless of the readers opinion of time travel . Your work has the reader easily suspending disbelief because of your ability to create realism in your words. As always Sandra just loved it.
Rob
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Your review is worth far more than a six, Rob, what a wonderful thing to say! I had better watch this head of mine, my doors aren't that wide! LOL. Thank you, sincerely for this wonderful review, my friend. :)) Sandra xx x
Comment from royowen
Well, after investogation what was on the other side of the door, and discovering lots of giant rats, Mildred tried a bunch of keys, and none of them fitted, but being disturbed by Bill, and after explaining to him, he comes back with a whole bunch of keys, and one opens it. After convincing everyone of their master plan, the day's advancing, the Zeppelins may get them before the evacuation happens. Well done Sandra, a great episode, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Well, after investogation what was on the other side of the door, and discovering lots of giant rats, Mildred tried a bunch of keys, and none of them fitted, but being disturbed by Bill, and after explaining to him, he comes back with a whole bunch of keys, and one opens it. After convincing everyone of their master plan, the day's advancing, the Zeppelins may get them before the evacuation happens. Well done Sandra, a great episode, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Roy, for another of your lovely reviews. Now the race is on. Veronica knows the Zeppelins will be there after dark, so they have to be quick about it. Fingers crossed they make it. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
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LOL!! Shhhh! Don't tell anyone. lol xxx
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I'll try. Heh heh
Comment from Cybertron1986
Quite an exceptional story here. You placed many details in supplementing the visual aspect of the characters' actions and thoughts. I liked it. I would recommend trimming down, however. Fine tuning the story can help your story that already expresses a strong, unique voice. Overall, an enjoyable read!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Quite an exceptional story here. You placed many details in supplementing the visual aspect of the characters' actions and thoughts. I liked it. I would recommend trimming down, however. Fine tuning the story can help your story that already expresses a strong, unique voice. Overall, an enjoyable read!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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What a very constructive review, Cybertron, I really appreciate it. I will be going over it thoroughly when it comes to the final editing. Your encouraging review has really made my day. Thank you so much. :)) Sandra x
Comment from tfawcus
Good sense of urgency building up in this chapter. I was a bit surprised by how easy it was for Mildred to persuade the hospital staff of the need for an immediate evacuation practice. On the other hand, she's such a down-to-earth, practical character that she, perhaps, more than anyone, would be able to do it. The possible love interest helps!
Once again, the dialogue flows with authenticity and I like the humour that Veronica's ability to pass through things and people causes. It makes a good counter-balance.
Another great chapter.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Good sense of urgency building up in this chapter. I was a bit surprised by how easy it was for Mildred to persuade the hospital staff of the need for an immediate evacuation practice. On the other hand, she's such a down-to-earth, practical character that she, perhaps, more than anyone, would be able to do it. The possible love interest helps!
Once again, the dialogue flows with authenticity and I like the humour that Veronica's ability to pass through things and people causes. It makes a good counter-balance.
Another great chapter.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Tony, for the 6 stars! I never expect them this far into the week, so that was a thrill! Mildred is the salt of the Earth, her character has grown so much since I began the trilogy, I can't do without her now. I wait for her to write herself these days, lol. I'm glad you like her. Yes, it's getting too close for comfort and Veronica is right to be worried. Thank you for the lovely review, my friend, I really appreciate it. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Miranda Langston
i really enjoyed reading this chapter and i almost laughed out loud at her fear of rats and her inner dialogue. i also appreciate the character list and the ending to the previous chapter
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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i really enjoyed reading this chapter and i almost laughed out loud at her fear of rats and her inner dialogue. i also appreciate the character list and the ending to the previous chapter
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much, Miranda, for this lovely review. Rats are not my favourite creature, so it was easy to imagine how Veronica would feel. :) I'm really pleased you enjoyed this chapter. Thank you! :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Rhonda Skinner
Another well-written, entertaining chapter. I spotted one typo. It accurred to Bill instead of occurred. I also have a question. Is Bill one of them? He didn't seem surprised to see the light already on when they opened the door.
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reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Another well-written, entertaining chapter. I spotted one typo. It accurred to Bill instead of occurred. I also have a question. Is Bill one of them? He didn't seem surprised to see the light already on when they opened the door.
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Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Hi Rhonda, thank you so much for this lovely review, and for spotting that error. The other thing I want to thank you for, was raising the point about Bill. No he's not one of them, but I have altered that sentence a bit to show his surprise. It's reviews like this that are a boon to me. Thank you! :)) Sandra xxx