Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

The powers that be had come together to discuss (the) recent events. - I'd remove this extra 'the' - I think it will read the same without it :)

Did you see the name and address Mildred gave (for) herself - edit suggestion

"Oh(,) Lordy, Miss Veronica,

since I last had a proper cuppa (tea). - not sure if leaving it off was intentional to her dialect, so I'll put it here just n case :)

That evening, after we'd had an early dinner due to James's hospital shift finishing at four o'clock, we sat down and listened to the children tell us about their day at school. Michael loved it, his thirst for knowledge being similar to that of his father. He certainly didn't get it from me. At eight-years-old, he was the top of his class in reading, and his teacher had nothing but praise for him. The only lesson he struggled with was *maths. - not sure if this paragraph was intentionally not tab'd over like the rest, so I'll just put it here in case :)

The only lesson(s) he struggled with (involved math.) - edit suggestion

Once Mildred had gone off to bed, James put his arm around me and I cuddled up to him on the sofa. "I've got to admit, I gave a sigh of relief knowing you went back to being invisible. I worry enough about you on your time travelling trips as it is. I just wish Mildred had the same protection. But, I can see the logic in the power's way of doing things." - tab this one over also?

James had just voiced what I'd been thinking. - I'd remove the 'had' in this sentence. It will read much smoother and remain in tense, too :)

They took her out of the prison the moment she became upset, (irregardless) of (any) problems it might cause." - edit suggestion

(Multi-storey) apartment stores were collapsing like matchstick models, - edit suggestion below-

'Multi-story' (as the spelling used may be from over the pond, I'm just pointing it out here in case it's not ) :)

Hmmm....what is happening? I can't wait to read next installment. As usual, writing is clean and has crisp dialogue. I only made some minor edit suggestions- I'm not familiar with UK English, so, just know I offer them from Washington State, America, LOL, with love. Another fine installment to this book, dear. It's full of energy and excellent descriptors. I felt like I was there. Nicely done :)
Janelle

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thank you so much for taking all that time to go through this chapter, Janelle. I've used some of your corrections, but some are UK English. Maths, is how we say and write it. I was picked up on that one a while ago when I wrote about something else.
Saying 'Cuppa' is what Mildred, and most people would say for a cup of tea. Tea is never needed as we all know what cuppa means. It's another one of our idiosyncrasies, lol. Multi-storey, is again, UK English, but, story, is sometimes used but not much. I think all the rest I've used, and corrected. Thank you again, my friend, you've been such a great help, and I do appreciate it a lot. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

A joy to be back, at least for a while.

'Had he murdered his wife, Lady Ann, by then?" Kraid asked. [Did the others know Lady Ann was his wife?

"It's alright love, she quite safe ... I think!" [she's??]

"OH, LORDY! RUN, MISS VERONICA--RUN!" [I've been so long away from your writing style, Sandra. I'm assuming they are back in time-travel mode. 1905 was the year of the big earthquake in San Francisco. Hmmmm. Reckon?

Good work, Sandra.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Hi Jay! How lovely to see you on here again. I hope you'll be writing again too?

When you say, 'Did the others know Lady Ann was his wife?' did you mean the 'powers that be'? If you did, it was them that sent Veronica back to sort it out. If you mean other readers, if they read the first book they would know her, if they didn't, hopefully they will want to go and buy it!! LOL.

Thank you for pointing out the missing word, 'she's' I've corrected that now. :))
Yes, she is back in time, but not in America, she is English and in England. So, no, it isn't the earthquake in San Francisco. In fact, Veronica hasn't a clue what is going on at the moment, but she will do when she looks at what Mildred is pointing to....

Thank you again, my friend, it was so nice to see your name there again. I hope your book is doing well? Mine slacked off, I need to do so much promoting, which is expensive, and traveling around isn't easy either. But, I have 2 novels published now, and this, the third in the trilogy, will be out next year. That's all I wanted, to hold my novel in my hand and hopefully have other readers enjoy reading it. Big hugs, dear friend. :)) Sandra xx

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hi sandra, another wonderful chapter in your wonderful story. I love it the way you describe the interaction between Veronica, Mildred and James. But what the heck is happening now? A bombing? An earthquake I can hardly believe as this takes place in Britain. I'm bewildered. You've certaintly left us on a cliff hanger.
That were the worst time of my lives." = that was the worst time of my lives."
I can't wait to be reading on. Big hugs. Ulla xxx

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Aww, thank you so much, Ulla, for all those stars, and the wonderful review. Oh, yes, this is definitely taking place in England, as you will all find out next time. It is also very relevant to their assignment as it's going to reveal itself very soon. I'm glad I've left you bewildered, LOL. That 'were/was' that Mildred used, is her way of saying it, she never gets it grammatically correct! lol.
Thanks again, my dear friend. Big hugs, Sandra xxx

reply by Ulla on 24-Oct-2018

I should have known it was Mildred talking. Silly me xx

Comment from Mistydawn

Excellent

I imagine that would be a shock to Sir John when he opens the door and finds out the police are there to haul his mom away, lol. I'm still worried about Gladys. Wish they could do something to change her situation, but that would be changing history and I'm not sure if they're allowed to do that. It's very well-written, interesting. Your great hook at the end makes me look forward to more.

 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thank you so much, my friend, for this lovely review. No, whatever Gladys goes through, Veronica and Mildred can't change. They are there to change something that really does change history if they don't sort it out. More will be revealed in the next part. Thank you again, my friend for your continued support of my story. Big hugs, Sandra xxx

Comment from royowen

Excellent

One minute Veronica is cuddled up to James on the sofa, and all of a sudden, there in a earthquake afflicted place, with nothing but there esenses to deal with. A good touch with Mildred declaring she was Lady Edith Humphries. Have the powers that be changed their minds about where the girls are supposed to be? Well done Sandra, good scribing, blessings, Roy
Typo : "It's alright love, she('s) quite safe...I think."

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thank you so much for another lovely review, Roy. Veronica thinks it's an earthquake because she is so bewildered about whats going on. Is it an earthquake? Hmm. I'm glad you liked Mildred giving them Lady Edith's name as hers, she is a monkey, isn't she! lol. Their whereabouts will come to light next time as well, I can tell you, it's all connected, and they will soon know what they've been sent back to put right. Thanks again, my friend. Big hugs, Sandra. :))

reply by royowen on 24-Oct-2018

Thanks Sandra, well done

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

I enjoyed this chapter, Sandra. I really like the way Mildred thought to use the name Lady Edith Humphries. Your story progressed well. I like the inclusion of the talk of her kids' schooling. The ending with the earthquake reminds me of the San Francisco earthquake of 1906. Good job. I see nothing to change. Thanks for sharing. Jan

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 Comment Written 23-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2018

Thank you so much, Jan. I glad you enjoyed the kids' schooling, it's the everyday things that go on in normal peoples' lives. I've read about the San Francisco earthquake. Knowing there is a major fault there would put me off living in that area. Mildred enjoyed giving her name as Sir John's mother, she didn't like him after what he did to Mrs Humphries, and Lady Ann. Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx